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the mechanic
i don't wanna turn wrenches today
don't want to grind gears
or figure why this bitch won't shift
i just wanna grease the axles and send her on down the road
remember how
baby's blue eyes turn black
after a whole night of driving
eight ball hemorrhaging
around s curves
with no regard for dysfunctional linkage
i'd rather skip the step
of pressure testing the system
if it rolls
i'll ride
i hire to help me climb
fire her before she hits the ground
all my love
has a tail light warranty
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18th Oct 2013 4:17pm
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18th Oct 2013 5:56pm
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19th Oct 2013 6:21pm
thanx mike. been in a bit of a draught lately with everything else goin on man. needed a decent distraction from always tryin to find a distraction
thanx for comin thru bro...
thanx for comin thru bro...
Re: the mechanic
18th Oct 2013 8:38pm
I like this. It's pretty slick and not your usual lyrical slickness, but a quieter, more restrained, intelligent smooth. You don't need that first "i," unless you're using it for the narrative. The reader knows you mean you.
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19th Oct 2013 6:23pm
roger. appreciate it A. i switched it up a bit.
def don't like that cliche spoken word type of start and stop unneeded words just for syllable progression thing. need to be more about the message. but who knows if i'll ever get any of it right...
def don't like that cliche spoken word type of start and stop unneeded words just for syllable progression thing. need to be more about the message. but who knows if i'll ever get any of it right...
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19th Oct 2013 5:13am
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19th Oct 2013 6:26pm
yeh thanx mrs. A. i really did start writing about purely workin on a hotrod but with other similarities goin on subconsciously it took a bit of a double message turn....
thanx for reading lady...
thanx for reading lady...
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