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Does My Bum Look Big Enough In This?
Status, please.
How do you compare?
Petty stage played in name of love
or lack thereof
such sad displays of vanity.
Ah, sweet Vanity
the downfall of humanity;
We often see but blur
beyond our current states of care.
Narcissus,
(were he available)
would treat himself
to an approving gaze
as he turned to admire
the taut,
magnificent
collective arse
we have become.
How do you compare?
Petty stage played in name of love
or lack thereof
such sad displays of vanity.
Ah, sweet Vanity
the downfall of humanity;
We often see but blur
beyond our current states of care.
Narcissus,
(were he available)
would treat himself
to an approving gaze
as he turned to admire
the taut,
magnificent
collective arse
we have become.
Published 10th Jan 2011
| Edited 13th Jan 2011
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Anonymous
10th Jan 2011 11:41am
- from a very talented writer. Well done.
Steven
Steven
10th Jan 2011 12:27pm
10th Jan 2011 4:49pm
needs a picture :)
(of course a plain bum picture would be too literal, and,
actually, would not fit the metaphor. so... what would be
a good picture to go along with the poem?)
(of course a plain bum picture would be too literal, and,
actually, would not fit the metaphor. so... what would be
a good picture to go along with the poem?)
10th Jan 2011 6:11pm
good thoughts, ray, good thoughts. but i'm not sure, so i'll be off to do some searching. [:
13th Jan 2011 9:35am
I still can't find a suitable image for this! do we really have to get permissions?
10th Jan 2011 8:19pm
Another lovely piece, Jestalessa, honest and controversial. Very well done, as for the image - an arse with a Facebook tattoo =P
10th Jan 2011 9:50pm
great minds... my first thought for a picture was something to do with facebook. [:
11th Jan 2011 3:32pm
11th Jan 2011 6:59pm
12th Jan 2011 10:20pm
And in the end, all that was left was vanity--yes, it is a true albeit sad commentary done in a playful and humorous way, but shouldn't the title read Does my bum look great in this? Or are you saying that the goal here is to become the biggest ass of humanity?
13th Jan 2011 9:42am
yeah, it's more to do with the collective. not the goal per se, but what's actually happening. i have a twisty (not twisted) way of putting things sometimes. i hope it didn't throw people off too much!
13th Jan 2011 7:46am
humanity is its own biggest ass.
the saving grace is 'collective'
p.s. the line: "we have all become"
would read better as: "we have become"
thank god for arses, where would we be without them?
not sure, but wouldn't it be a bitch not to sit?
18th Jan 2011 9:59am
19th Jan 2011 00:12am
17th Oct 2011 8:36pm
17th Oct 2011 8:47pm
hey, thank you! it's nice to get some fresh feedback on these older writes. [:
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3rd May 2012 8:08am
Anonymous
29th Aug 2013 8:07pm
Excellent write Jestalessa :)
i have a pic that might work lol
I'll PM a link so you can see..vanity epitomized ;)
i have a pic that might work lol
I'll PM a link so you can see..vanity epitomized ;)
31st Aug 2013 11:30am
Ah, thank you kindly for your attention to this wee oldie. The photo is definitely the tippity top end of vanity, but I'm afraid I've seen it posted on a 'poem' by someone I can't abide, and, in my psychologically blocked state, can't bring myself to use it. Haha
Thank you again for taking the time to leave your thoughts [:
Thank you again for taking the time to leave your thoughts [:
