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September
Golden rays mute
in denim skies
as a whispered coolness
sickles the air
In front of
Wal-Mart
beach chairs and
gas grills
huddle together
like trembling refugees
While everywhere
wary children
in pretty, shiny clothes
assemble
on street corners
hugging uncracked books
For you see
bold and noble
August
has fallen
torn and toppled
His page
sea-sawing
downward
to join its
discarded siblings
on the stony floor
Feeling again
a harbinger
breath,
I dismiss
the chill
Only to
resume
my poetic
duty,
cataloguing
each veiled
and vexing sign
in denim skies
as a whispered coolness
sickles the air
In front of
Wal-Mart
beach chairs and
gas grills
huddle together
like trembling refugees
While everywhere
wary children
in pretty, shiny clothes
assemble
on street corners
hugging uncracked books
For you see
bold and noble
August
has fallen
torn and toppled
His page
sea-sawing
downward
to join its
discarded siblings
on the stony floor
Feeling again
a harbinger
breath,
I dismiss
the chill
Only to
resume
my poetic
duty,
cataloguing
each veiled
and vexing sign
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Re: September
Anonymous
14th Sep 2013 11:11am
Missed you Sir. Deeper write than originally thought....
Strider
Strider
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re: Re: September
14th Sep 2013 11:30am
Thanks Strider, spent the summer working on the novel. Taking another poetry class this fall, hence the poem.
Re: September
14th Sep 2013 12:03pm
ah! Beautiful write! Such imagery.
I love your style of writing, thought provoking,
makes you want to sit and contemplate the reason to the very core that laid such marvellous words!
I love your style of writing, thought provoking,
makes you want to sit and contemplate the reason to the very core that laid such marvellous words!
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re: Re: September
14th Sep 2013 12:27pm
Thanks Angst (almost rhymes!!!) Glad you enjoyed it. My first homework assignment for a poetry class I am taking this fall. Speaking of fall, it is my favorite season ... but the crispness in the air always reminds me how winter is not that far off.
re: Re: September
14th Sep 2013 12:38pm
Thanks wrangler, sorry for being so "veiled and vexing"! ;-) Glad you liked it.
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14th Sep 2013 3:53pm
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14th Sep 2013 5:55pm
Re: September
14th Sep 2013 5:30pm
not to minimize earlier work sir but this seems much tighter gripped. it is fluid yet well woven.
the tempo seems just right as well. slow is steady and steady is just fast enough.
well done sir...
the tempo seems just right as well. slow is steady and steady is just fast enough.
well done sir...
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re: Re: September
14th Sep 2013 5:57pm
No offense taken, I've been taken poetry courses and studying different poets. Thanks for the feedback. Glad you enjoyed it!
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Re: September
17th Sep 2013 3:42pm
late to the party but I am here loved this piece Mark,your poetry is growing I see.
Red
Red
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18th Sep 2013 1:00am