Connecting Threads

I tried, Gabriel, but couldn't break free. Stuck here with everyone else...

Thanks for your comment!

You summed up truth so very well in this excellent poem of yours ataki.

well done sister-poet

strider

Thank you kindly, Strider!

Indeed Atakti.  Sometimes it is better just to stay on the outside of it all.

Great job. :)

Ah, but only for so long, then we're ensnared again, Magdalena. Thank you...

Sparing none...

Then all are a falling....
and we all understand...

Humans!!!!

Humans, spiders, creatures of interlinked intellects.

Thanks for stopping by, turtle.

There's no escaping the truth here, at some point it will catch those who feed on lies... Hector will hunt you down.

Nobody writes like you Atakti, your style is so distinct.

Your words have resonated in my thoughts all morning. Great insight, thanks for sharing Atakti.

Hector helped a little in inspiring this, useful creature that he is.

Thank you for your thoughtful feedback, Case. You're as generous as ever with your praise...

:)

Excellent telling Atakti- style always!!!

Soul, many thanks, I'm glad you think so.

It's definitely our new reality, very relatable scribe.  Well done!

I've tempted you over, I see, into my very own web... Welcome, Vee! Thanks for reading and commenting.

;)

haha, fly fishing huh?  lol

Atakti you're brilliant xoxo

Awww Gigi, thank you!

:)

Ataki,
 
I love the content and vivid relatable truth here.  
 
If I may...
 
I love the form and rhythm you've set in this, the timing is so perfect and well I think it separates this piece and the poet. May I ask is it a formal form and if so, what is it called; would love to study that a little?
 
Al-x-

Now, Al, you've put me on the spot. I just favor this structure and use it in a lot of my poems.  About four, no more than five lines per stanza, and I like using only one or two syllables on the last line sometimes.

That was all I was aware of, but after your question, I went back and counted mostly six, sometimes five syllables in the other lines. Sometimes I use a internal rhyming, but really while I'm writing I just feel my way through it, so those calculations are done subconsciously, I guess.

 Thank you for your kind feedback and interesting questions!

:)

Being as it's properly punctuated, "threads" would need capitalising(just the t though).

Never really noticed the form; because it's not strictly abiding any syllable or word count, it would probably be a little easier on the ol' noggin' if you loosened it up.

Anyway, internet, bullshit: wrote similar thoughts myself recently. Must be something in the cyberscape air.

Good catch on the title, Mr A.

See my comment above on structure, if you're interested. Are you saying it's difficult to read in this form? Is there something concrete you would change? I'm curious how each reader perceives it, so feedback, as always is appreciated.

Thanks for the words and the care...

Excellent poem Atakti! Each word precious and powerful ...

Mark, how groovy to see you here!
 
Thank you...
 
:)

A sad truth of our ever increasing use, and entrapment.Wonderfully penned poem

G

Thank you, Glynis!

A nice little overview of the web (or as I first thought in my sleep deprived state, a commentary on the Syria situation lol)
I'm really starting to love how I can expect a similar structure In a lot o your poems but the content could be anything under the sun, and every piece will written with a type of subtlety, precision and thought behind it that I'm jealous of. Congrats on another fine write tic tac. :)

(P.s is asking what the subject of a poem is cheating or me being just plain dense?)
(P.P.S I love brackets)

Thanks, Dystopian, for your comments!

(The poem is about our interconnectedness, which these days is more immediately about the web. However, it is true on the physical plane as well, so l can see why you thought of Syria, nice interpretation, btw. A lot of people cannot or refuse to see this interconnection, keeping the philosophy 'out of sight out of mind' or even, it's 'over there, far away' so it's not their problem. This is only partly a psychological protection against feeling helplessness, some of it is apathy. Calling it a dragon and claiming it fictional doesn't make it go away... We are all affecting each other, how can we not? Ramble over, closing brackets.)

I liked this poem of yours, Ataki, I do believe there are "connecting threads" that there is what I call a huge web somewhere and this web contains collective information which we pick up on....

oooh ooh very nice! i like the subject a lot :)

We learn from the spiders... Thanks, Gabriel!