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Scuffing the heal of my soul
The mind's eye glasses,
though fragile, possess
power-focused on her beauty,
mighty far pass the outter flesh
I would raise up praise
to drink from one every hour
as thoughts of sweetness
fed from muscle 'neath breasts
when weak of brittled bone my hope
was to support her unsteady stance
protected baby's heart
furiously I'd do at every chance
such a calamity...
as the cliche of disillusion laughs
in bitter agony
repetitiously questioning...
what has happened to me?
though fragile, possess
power-focused on her beauty,
mighty far pass the outter flesh
I would raise up praise
to drink from one every hour
as thoughts of sweetness
fed from muscle 'neath breasts
when weak of brittled bone my hope
was to support her unsteady stance
protected baby's heart
furiously I'd do at every chance
such a calamity...
as the cliche of disillusion laughs
in bitter agony
repetitiously questioning...
what has happened to me?
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Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
Anonymous
1st Sep 2013 10:53pm
Several feelings ran thru me here. Emotional write! :)
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re: Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
2nd Sep 2013 5:29am
Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
Anonymous
2nd Sep 2013 3:47am
What has happened?
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re: Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
2nd Sep 2013 5:37am
What happened? Same thing that happens to many
I made a fool of myself n digested a ton of heartbreak
that's what happened n continues to happen... Thank u so much for ur support
I made a fool of myself n digested a ton of heartbreak
that's what happened n continues to happen... Thank u so much for ur support
Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
Scuffing the heals of my soul, so so deep! In my eyes that's one of your most honest and heartfelt poems. Had to read it several times and needed a night to digest the emotions. So beautiful and sad, Poe. Love it a lot. P.S. Can deeply felt and honest love make a fool of someone? I don't think so.
xo Chi
xo Chi
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re: Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
2nd Sep 2013 2:29pm
Aaaawwww thank you my sweet lady, u touched my heart with ur comment... Appreciate u so much :)
Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
2nd Sep 2013 2:48pm
A poem about transformation perhaps? I enjoyed the way you incorporated the mind/thought with bodily movement, culminated with introspection.
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Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
2nd Sep 2013 2:57pm
Transformation huh? Guess it could be... It's about the lost of a great love, n being lost without it n wandering thru life wondering what, who, where!? thanks my friend, always grateful forever I'm am for ur support :)
Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
2nd Sep 2013 4:07pm
Baby you know I am a loyal fan of your work but I am kinda of lost on this one, Did I miss something? I read it twice and still don't get the gist.
Red
Red
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re: Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
2nd Sep 2013 5:48pm
Just another sad, lost of love ink is the gist of this lol
Thank you as always for the comment n support always
Thank you as always for the comment n support always
Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
3rd Sep 2013 10:31am
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3rd Sep 2013 11:22am
Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
Anonymous
3rd Sep 2013 4:58pm
Felt the sadness in this piece, Poetikmind. Very nice work! :-)
Peace
Carlene
Peace
Carlene
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re: Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
3rd Sep 2013 5:30pm
Sweet Charlene, hello my dear friend!
Seem like awhile since I last heard from you...
Happy to hear from you again n thank you for your thoughts n support as always! :)
Seem like awhile since I last heard from you...
Happy to hear from you again n thank you for your thoughts n support as always! :)
Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
4th Sep 2013 00:47am
"as the cliche of disillusion laughs
in bitter agony" no greater misery than that moment of realization ..Wow! Excellent Heartfelt Scribe
in bitter agony" no greater misery than that moment of realization ..Wow! Excellent Heartfelt Scribe
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re: Re: Scuffing the heal of my soul
4th Sep 2013 1:37am
Yea I agree... Funny how it happens so often to so many n yet
We are all always surprised by it huh? you'd think someone's get a clue! lol... I Thank u n appreciate u my dearest lady :).
We are all always surprised by it huh? you'd think someone's get a clue! lol... I Thank u n appreciate u my dearest lady :).