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Without...
Without
you...
I find
no beat
to my heart,
there’s no go,
to my start...
Without
you
I feel
like an incessant tumor
life,
is just a rumor
the sky is not blue
and no one
can convince me
it’s true...
Without
you
There’s simply
no pep,
haven't slept
no energy's left
It’s like
I’ve no feet,
I’m unsure
of my step...
Without
you
I’m more soured
every passing hour
drenched
with defeat
and there’s
no sweet
in my greet...
Without
you...
nothing
is pristine
not even
in my dream
my loneliness
is my cost
I’m truly lost
on reality's seams
and shiver, perplexed
on what my life truly means…
you...
I find
no beat
to my heart,
there’s no go,
to my start...
Without
you
I feel
like an incessant tumor
life,
is just a rumor
the sky is not blue
and no one
can convince me
it’s true...
Without
you
There’s simply
no pep,
haven't slept
no energy's left
It’s like
I’ve no feet,
I’m unsure
of my step...
Without
you
I’m more soured
every passing hour
drenched
with defeat
and there’s
no sweet
in my greet...
Without
you...
nothing
is pristine
not even
in my dream
my loneliness
is my cost
I’m truly lost
on reality's seams
and shiver, perplexed
on what my life truly means…
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Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 10:03pm
The tenor of your poem matches my mood, Poetikmind. It's full of sorrow and sadness although beautifully and heartfelt written. Like it, babe!
Chi
Chi
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re: Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 10:08pm
Yea, I guess it's the rain bringing me down
Or maybe I'm just blah lol... Thank u my sweetness muah!
Or maybe I'm just blah lol... Thank u my sweetness muah!
Re: Without...
....sighing at the sweet sincerity! So darn romantic, sad and beautiful!
One of those, 'I'm so in love and can't eat, sleep or breathe without you moments!
aww...I just wanna' cradle this ink in my arms and love it forever! Xo
One of those, 'I'm so in love and can't eat, sleep or breathe without you moments!
aww...I just wanna' cradle this ink in my arms and love it forever! Xo
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re: Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 10:10pm
Aaaaawwww baby ur words are eve. Sweeter n u make me wanna cuddle you! lol thank you my sweet Rain :)
Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 10:30pm
Aww is this for me? Can I pretend it is? This is a sweet piece my friend, like a soothing balm.
Red
Red
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re: Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 11:07pm
Aaawww yea u can if u want sweetie lol
seriously though in happy you lined, I'm surprised
It was the huge 'downer' it felt like when I wrote it lol
sti, in grateful always! :)
seriously though in happy you lined, I'm surprised
It was the huge 'downer' it felt like when I wrote it lol
sti, in grateful always! :)
Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 10:30pm
Feel this poem in it entirety. Reminds me how I felt when I lost my wife. Great piece, well written.
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re: Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 11:55pm
I'm sorry to hear that, n I'm grateful for ur thoughts n time spent on my page reading n commenting my ink. :)
Re: Without...
Anonymous
- Edited 13th Aug 2013 1:25am
12th Aug 2013 10:40pm
What beautiful romantic words you write. Strong feelings of how the one you love effects you. Enjoyed! :)
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re: Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 00:12am
Thank you my friend, im happy to know you enjoyed this
Really appreciate a your supply always :)
Really appreciate a your supply always :)
Re: Without...
12th Aug 2013 10:44pm
re: Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 00:14am
Re: Without...
Anonymous
12th Aug 2013 11:15pm
We tend to take people for granted
until we go "without" them....
If you love someone....try not to let them go
Very much enjoyed
Kitty
until we go "without" them....
If you love someone....try not to let them go
Very much enjoyed
Kitty
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re: Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 00:30am
Ironic last words in ur last line... Words famous for "'if u love something/someone set them free..."BUT I do hear you my friend n agree with your thought... Thank u always, I appreciate you so much :)
Re: Without...
This poem resonates with feelings we all have experienced,and could do without,but such is life...
fav line:
life,
is just a rumor
Good write,enjoyed...
fav line:
life,
is just a rumor
Good write,enjoyed...
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re: Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 1:23am
Thanks a ton dude, deeply grateful for this wonderful comment n your time :)
Re: Without...
Anonymous
13th Aug 2013 2:22am
Oh, this hurts, it is so well written.
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re: Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 2:38am
Thank you my sweet lil lady... Yea it DID hurt, but it was a write from a lil ways back that u decided to post here... Appreciate u always sweetheart :)
Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 3:10am
aww this dripped with beautiful melancholy!!! very heartfelt scribe :)enjoyed
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re: Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 3:50am
U humble n honor mey dear, I'm truly grateful to you always :)
Thank u so much :)
Thank u so much :)
Re: Without...
Anonymous
13th Aug 2013 7:42am
I'm having the urge to hug to you now.
Beautifully sad scribe.
Beautifully sad scribe.
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re: Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 11:40am
Well I sure could use it my dear! :) thank you so much for ur thoughts n support always :)
Re: Without...
13th Aug 2013 8:11pm
Feeling the ink! You never realize the gift in front of you until it's gone. Very sincere....I like.
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re: Re: Without...
14th Aug 2013 4:55am
Thank you, n yea tell that to the one who did this to me! Lol
4 real cuz she sure as hell don't seem to be concerned at all...
I appreciate ur time n thoughts on my ink :)
4 real cuz she sure as hell don't seem to be concerned at all...
I appreciate ur time n thoughts on my ink :)
Re: Without...
14th Aug 2013 2:56pm
When love linger after it is gone, it's because it was true. That kinda love never dies. I felt this one in my heart. We all have that one, sometimes two lol We're poets and we tend to love more, feel more, see more. :)
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re: Re: Without...
14th Aug 2013 3:17pm
Yes I agree about the feeling more, seeing more... Sadly I disagree with the other part as far as it being true... There's no signs whatsoever she gives a damn bout what we supposedly meant to each other... All one sided on my part smh.... Thank u for ur sweet comment n ur time :)
re: re: Re: Without...
14th Aug 2013 4:14pm
A woman can be fickle at times.
And we are also very good at hiding
or burying emotions if we were hurt.
She may just be protecting her heart.
But then again she could be a player
only lookin out for number one. Either
way, Great poem
And we are also very good at hiding
or burying emotions if we were hurt.
She may just be protecting her heart.
But then again she could be a player
only lookin out for number one. Either
way, Great poem
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re: re: re: Re: Without...
18th Aug 2013 2:17pm
I pick option b. yea I'm sure that's it... Thank you my sweet one, appreciate you greatly :)
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Mar 2019 10:45pm
19th Aug 2013 3:16am
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re: Re: Without...
19th Aug 2013 5:55am