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The Overlook
She smelled like gum and cigarettes
holding the edge of the car door
as Her senses became dulled
witless visitors shuffled nearby
in tones of taciturn pillaging
they who needed this image
thought only of the breaking vista
snapping the pictures clipping on frames
not the broken woman, clinging
to free falling gasps
leapt over steps
She stared deep into the gorge
knowing it was Hers someday
and She would take the plunge
for right now in the present
She rested, puffing on
another lucky strike
grateful She hadn't hit bottom
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Re: The Overlook
16th Jul 2013 10:18pm
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16th Jul 2013 10:19pm
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Indeed what a horrid smoke-makes me think of rot-gut style bourbon to boot:) -Thanks so much Dear Red!!!
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16th Jul 2013 11:02pm
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17th Jul 2013 1:11am
Thanks Dear Magdalena;) You guys have that one sewn up!!! (I just loved that line)
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Anonymous
16th Jul 2013 11:04pm
souladareatease,
Nicely penned and the ending topped it off perfectly! Good luck in the comp!
tornado
Nicely penned and the ending topped it off perfectly! Good luck in the comp!
tornado
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17th Jul 2013 1:15am
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17th Jul 2013 00:39am
nice write, it's a '2nd chance' kinda thing. good thing she wasn't out of smokes...
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17th Jul 2013 1:17am
Indeed we all need 'em from time to time-Much Appreciate the visit John!!!
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Anonymous
17th Jul 2013 2:30am
Well done soul...good luck!
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17th Jul 2013 2:40am
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17th Jul 2013 4:18am
The contrast in the immense physical beauty, echoed in the graphic and the plight of the woman is striking!
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17th Jul 2013 2:13pm
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17th Jul 2013 4:41am
Yes more smokes and she would plunge into the abyss, physically or otherwise. Good one Soul.
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17th Jul 2013 2:13pm
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17th Jul 2013 5:02am
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17th Jul 2013 2:14pm
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17th Jul 2013 9:42pm
You have created a vivid and tactful picture
of pain and strands of hope intertwined.
Well Done
Fire
of pain and strands of hope intertwined.
Well Done
Fire
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18th Jul 2013 4:04am
Thank You Dear Fire-That means a lot Kind One-Always happy to see You here:)
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28th Oct 2014 2:04am
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28th Oct 2014 1:17pm
Appreciate You paying a visit Cameron!!!
This was a fun one-reminds me of many folks we meet through life.
This was a fun one-reminds me of many folks we meet through life.