Stained Down Deep

Thank you.

Right.  The "new" (transformation) really is effortless, as the Buddha said.  It comes from within, through intention, awareness and understanding.  I really liked your "bio" (Is that what it is called?)  Just BEING is amazing, from the genetic to the spiritual levels (and all those levels inbetween).  No hierarchy intended here, please.

Your poem is well constructed.  It builds and builds until a realization occurs, namely, no "scrubbing" was needed in the first place.  You are a remarkable poet.


marcella1

Thank you. Its always interesting to gain the perspective of another on a subject refined in your own mind. I had intended the work to call attention on a fault, a flaw that had encroached on its host so completely that no retribution could be obtained.

You saw it as a resolution, what is already present is perfect enough.

Yes, BEING is amazing, confusing, revealing and settling. The acknowledgement of the conflict allows full appreciation for the resilience of it.

The only critique I have for this is in the fourth stanza you may have meant 'bury' instead of burry but that may be intentional and I'm just too obtuse to figure it out. But apart from that very minor thing, I have to say I loved it, for me it brought to mind the process of getting over someone. Like a physical representation of what my mind goes through in a break up. Great write :)

Nope, you're right, I meant 'bury', sometimes I hate spell check. Lol wish it could read minds.

I can see it. The removing of evidence, the purge of the person, intentions resolved to eradicate their presence so that a new canvas could be presented to new eyes.