Apathy

Nice man...

Thanks :)

i lke this poem. there are some natural rest you can indicate with commas, such as
detached,
drowning

now it rots.

Thank you, punctuation is one of my many weak points.

no worries, it is hard to think of language as an art yet you have to consider languages tools to highlight specific things it the poem. overall a little work will make your themes really pop out.
enjoyed the poem :)

Patience is a virtue. Don't rush things to avoid mistakes. Don't dwell in the past and avoid self-pity because the more you do that, the more things get worse. Stay on the positive side and learn to see and hear things with your heart!
Treasure the present, mate...for it is a gift!

Remember though, that present is built upon past and lit up by what we hope for from the future. Poetic Engineer is right, but so are you. Sometimes reveling in What Had Been can be just as fruitful as What Is Right Now.

The beauty of this piece, the hope of it, is really in the idea itself. Summer is always neck and neck with winter. The good, though most often over shadowed by the bad. But as summer fades, the leaves fall, it presents a promise that NEW is soon to take its place after a moment of pause. You've acknowledged a cycle as old as time itself, acknowledge the law of being - two objects cannot occupy the same space. So for something new to come forth, something old must die. You've just flooded the old with all you wish to parish so that the new would not be loaded down.

Wonderful insight.

I love this.  all except the very first line. cut it!  may need to replace it with something to keep the form. right. right.

I was swept away relating to the concept and the best part. the last line - neuro synapse connect! Ironically, it made me feel. not an easy task.