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The road i travel
The road i travel is not always straight
it has or blocks that make you wait.
The road i travel has no lines
full of glass but that’s just fine.
It may seem tough or not worth the while
it may stretch for many miles.
It has tones of scenery, i make a mental note
in the winter its chilly but i have no coat.
I gave it to my companion who walks with me
her smile is really something to see.
I love her but she does not know this
but together we walk in bliss.
I don’t know where im headed or if it will end
All that matters is that im travelling with my friend.
Every memory captured in my mind
laid out my path for human kind.
I wish she would love me but that cant be
so i travel as invisible me.
it has or blocks that make you wait.
The road i travel has no lines
full of glass but that’s just fine.
It may seem tough or not worth the while
it may stretch for many miles.
It has tones of scenery, i make a mental note
in the winter its chilly but i have no coat.
I gave it to my companion who walks with me
her smile is really something to see.
I love her but she does not know this
but together we walk in bliss.
I don’t know where im headed or if it will end
All that matters is that im travelling with my friend.
Every memory captured in my mind
laid out my path for human kind.
I wish she would love me but that cant be
so i travel as invisible me.
Published 1st Nov 2010
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12th Nov 2010 5:06am
Rhyming is tricky, and to do it well you must do it very well, because rhyming is like playing music...even someone who can't play will spot a flaw in the rhythm very quickly. Make sure you read the poem out loud as you work on it, because reading it in your own head won't do a good job of picking up flaws...rhythm is the key, and then worry about rhyme. Also, don't just throw a word in because it makes something rhyme...make the right word fit. To do this well is hard, and takes a lot of practise...don't forget to read lots of poems :-)
