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Straight to Hell
Blue took to the water
gazing out, far he could see
knowing if he swam hard
he would be to the spot
he loved so much
With vigor and taste
beloved lake, his mind
to the side
glanced Earth and Sky
recess became excess
dripping pearls pool
collections came
conscious thought
...Suddenly...
The water turned brackish,
tendrils of the bed grab hold, tugging
as the Hydra wakes, someone
dare
touch his lake
rises up to collect
each head twisting, spliced to see
climbing
swam the beast, fleet
Blue screams bubbles
drug down, in a watered kingdom
As Danaiads sing of "another victim"
At the gate he is laid, taken away
from above
the Underworld
walking through bars
only mist can dew
trickling, flitting down
the Caverned hall
Seeing the end
that all, so call
took the hand
The Great Hades
averting his face
"come now as Persephone"
"for the hour grows late"
"we'll gaze upon Tartarus"
"know that's not Your fate"
"But what you shall have made"
"Is story for others above the lake"
As the Caverns opened
the din grew loud
His love of life
went to cloud
wanderer be
drifting
Hades
free
gazing out, far he could see
knowing if he swam hard
he would be to the spot
he loved so much
With vigor and taste
beloved lake, his mind
to the side
glanced Earth and Sky
recess became excess
dripping pearls pool
collections came
conscious thought
...Suddenly...
The water turned brackish,
tendrils of the bed grab hold, tugging
as the Hydra wakes, someone
dare
touch his lake
rises up to collect
each head twisting, spliced to see
climbing
swam the beast, fleet
Blue screams bubbles
drug down, in a watered kingdom
As Danaiads sing of "another victim"
At the gate he is laid, taken away
from above
the Underworld
walking through bars
only mist can dew
trickling, flitting down
the Caverned hall
Seeing the end
that all, so call
took the hand
The Great Hades
averting his face
"come now as Persephone"
"for the hour grows late"
"we'll gaze upon Tartarus"
"know that's not Your fate"
"But what you shall have made"
"Is story for others above the lake"
As the Caverns opened
the din grew loud
His love of life
went to cloud
wanderer be
drifting
Hades
free
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Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 6:20am
I say this is interesting in that you really cover a wide array of styles with your compositions. Some of your previous work took disparate themes and meshed them together. In this one you take a more conventional approach, in which each stanza can be directly related to the on preceding it.
You evoke images that go back a long way for me.
Thank you for sharing with us.
You evoke images that go back a long way for me.
Thank you for sharing with us.
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re: Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 6:32am
Humbled Jazz, Thank You so much!!!...this was my Youth...and then again in my 20 somethings...read,re-read,re-read :)))
they'll always be the best stories for me Adventure, fantasy, love, hate, philosophy-such a wide spectrum of life
they'll always be the best stories for me Adventure, fantasy, love, hate, philosophy-such a wide spectrum of life
Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 7:20am
Whoa! Incredibly dark, yet hauntingly beautiful story!
The way you manipulated words and the clever use of metaphors were amazing, Soul!
I actually got chills reading this! Can't explain why, but I did!:)
LOVED THIS! Xo
The way you manipulated words and the clever use of metaphors were amazing, Soul!
I actually got chills reading this! Can't explain why, but I did!:)
LOVED THIS! Xo
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re: Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 2:21pm
Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 9:20am
Ana adventure of another era, this should be fleshed out into a short story, Soul.
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18th May 2013 2:23pm
Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 10:34am
I adore your story poems, Soul;
every word has an effect or adds to it,
i'm not entirely sure how you do it.
Very well written. :)
every word has an effect or adds to it,
i'm not entirely sure how you do it.
Very well written. :)
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re: Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 2:26pm
So kind, Thank You Dear Scribbler, as a young child I thought I lived in these tales, but I was Mythtaken :)
Re: Straight to Hell
Anonymous
18th May 2013 11:32am
nice darkness wrapped in wonder..I like the way you have incorporated the classics into this piece and really made a story all your own...near magical aura created around this write, nice work soula :-)

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re: Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 2:27pm
:) Very Kind, thank You so much Dear Miki!!!
Have missed You Hellion!!!
Have missed You Hellion!!!
Re: Straight to Hell
Anonymous
18th May 2013 12:57pm
Soul this was really well done. You are working your craft with this one.
Strider
Strider

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re: Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 2:30pm
Greatly appreciated Strider very kind as well...
this is me trying to figure out and mindset for Your comp. before it's over...we shall see...
Not too swift with given words...and time the evil wench!!!
this is me trying to figure out and mindset for Your comp. before it's over...we shall see...
Not too swift with given words...and time the evil wench!!!
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18th May 2013 2:26pm
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Re: Straight to Hell
18th May 2013 2:58pm
dear Soul this is a magical tale that took me on a journey of wonderment!!! great inking!!! peace Crim :)
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