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EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
[b]An ardent mass licks
the edge beckoning
dripping in pools
as black mirrors stain.
The scry to get free
tepid hands turn cold.
They race patience
slowly biting fringes
of the cold steel care
hours of that dust
over there, in the corner.
Wall and fiber gleam
as the dust gathers
a fist upon the light
closes slowly
and death belongs
only
by thy own hand.
Growls are heard
through the floor
as a light begs
for no more
rattled that this
cannot is a have not
cage.
Sustenance
is lingering
so it is forgone.
Light dims
curls within itself
folded among kisses
Bliss of death
witching hour
I find paradise
was found, bleak
midday Sun hovered
upon a Husk.
Eclipsed forever
as a light moved on.[b]
the edge beckoning
dripping in pools
as black mirrors stain.
The scry to get free
tepid hands turn cold.
They race patience
slowly biting fringes
of the cold steel care
hours of that dust
over there, in the corner.
Wall and fiber gleam
as the dust gathers
a fist upon the light
closes slowly
and death belongs
only
by thy own hand.
Growls are heard
through the floor
as a light begs
for no more
rattled that this
cannot is a have not
cage.
Sustenance
is lingering
so it is forgone.
Light dims
curls within itself
folded among kisses
Bliss of death
witching hour
I find paradise
was found, bleak
midday Sun hovered
upon a Husk.
Eclipsed forever
as a light moved on.[b]
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Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 6:43am
The odd thing for me is I just watched the PBS series about the "Dust Bowl". Your words really weigh heavily on me even if you subject you are referring to has nothing to do with the all that dust in the 3Oies.
That first stanza gives me chills!
That first stanza gives me chills!
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re: Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 2:14pm
I Love that subject in time...odd and harsh...i could not imagine....this was a cancer write...
thank You for the kind words Jazz!!!
thank You for the kind words Jazz!!!
re: re: Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 4:25pm
Ah thanks for clarification. I do have the suspicion that with all the chemicals and pesticides put into the ground, dust that fierce again would probably result in cancer for many...
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24th Apr 2013 4:41pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 6:44am
You had me hooked @:
"An ardent mass licks
the edge beckoning
dripping in pools
as black mirrors stain."
I just love the way you ink, Gabe!:)
You have such a yielding way of inking with power!
"An ardent mass licks
the edge beckoning
dripping in pools
as black mirrors stain."
I just love the way you ink, Gabe!:)
You have such a yielding way of inking with power!
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24th Apr 2013 2:14pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
Anonymous
24th Apr 2013 9:44am
This piece is heavy in metaphor and clever play..I love the darkness woven throughout with such an observational stance from the writer. To me, the most moving and amazing part is
Bliss of death
witching hour
I find paradise
was found, bleak
midday Sun hovered
upon a Husk.
but, that said-I really like the entire thing. write on Soula :-)
Bliss of death
witching hour
I find paradise
was found, bleak
midday Sun hovered
upon a Husk.
but, that said-I really like the entire thing. write on Soula :-)
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re: Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 2:16pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
Anonymous
24th Apr 2013 11:25am
Excellent flowing dark write soul!
strider
strider
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re: Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 2:16pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 12:56pm
Life and death comes for us anytime, Soul. Its a perpetual shadow that dogs our every step in life. Good write, sir.
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24th Apr 2013 2:17pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 1:46pm
Excellent work Soul, great pic too, I'm in the middle finger signal mood today lol.
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24th Apr 2013 2:18pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
awesome sd. you had me with the title. gr8 fn title man. the last full stanza is def my fav. sounded a bit sarcastic there or atleast a lil salty....and you know i love that ish. gr8 pic too man. well put 2g...
well done bro....
well done bro....
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24th Apr 2013 2:19pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 2:24pm
It reads like a piece by Poe, twists and turns dark and darker. nice work Soul.
Red
Red
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24th Apr 2013 4:09pm
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 2:55pm
Digging this dark side of the soul man !!! My favorite line would be
"a fist upon the light
closes slowly
and death belongs
only
by thy own hand"
But the whole poem works very well. Very nice job !
"a fist upon the light
closes slowly
and death belongs
only
by thy own hand"
But the whole poem works very well. Very nice job !
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re: Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
24th Apr 2013 4:10pm
Lol Thanks Tony Glad You dig it!!!
i let myself venture there once in a while...too often i would get depressed lol
i let myself venture there once in a while...too often i would get depressed lol
Re: EQUAL OPPORTUNITY DESTROYER
27th Apr 2013 3:01pm
Man, your imagery kills me! It is quite rare; yet is pure and powerful.
Good work, Soul.
Good work, Soul.
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27th Apr 2013 4:00pm