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Her
Please God, don't leave me here.
You know I need her.
Please God, stop these tears,
You know I love her.
She's one person to the world but the world to me,
It's been said a million times but until today no one has meant it as thoroughly as I
She's absolutely everything I could ever want or need,
It's been said a million times but until today no one ever meant it just quite.
You know I'll take good care of her,
So why hold me back?
You know she's in good hands for sure,
So why risk her neck?
I NEED her, God, I'm begging you.
I've broken promises before,
But that was when I was hurt by you,
And before I knew HER.
You know I need her.
Please God, stop these tears,
You know I love her.
She's one person to the world but the world to me,
It's been said a million times but until today no one has meant it as thoroughly as I
She's absolutely everything I could ever want or need,
It's been said a million times but until today no one ever meant it just quite.
You know I'll take good care of her,
So why hold me back?
You know she's in good hands for sure,
So why risk her neck?
I NEED her, God, I'm begging you.
I've broken promises before,
But that was when I was hurt by you,
And before I knew HER.
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Re: Her
23rd Apr 2013 00:22am
OMG I HATE TOUCHSCREEN KEYBOARDS! I'm going to try to fix the typos right now.
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23rd Apr 2013 00:29am
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23rd Apr 2013 00:42am
Of course I can't give you her full name, but she is the same Michaela that I wrote 'Dear Michaela' about. If you haven't checked that one out, you totally should, I think it's one of my best. See, it's kind of funny, really. I post mostly dark poems, but my favorites to write are love poems. I like reading both pretty much equally, but there are a few dark poems that I've read that were REALLY good.
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23rd Apr 2013 00:43am
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23rd Apr 2013 6:09pm
Thanks once again, Jazz, for taking the time to read and analyze my poems.
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23rd Apr 2013 7:52am
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23rd Apr 2013 6:03pm
Thanks, Lilmiz. Yes, this is about the one we've been talking about. Lol.
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15th May 2013 11:25am
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Anonymous
23rd Apr 2013 9:39am
I can sense the desperation and pleading in your words and think it's quite adorable that you feel like it's never truly been felt at the depths you feel it...love the ending...
nice write angel :-)
nice write angel :-)
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I really have prayed like that before, it seems kind of stupid to make a deal with God when he gave you life and can take it away just as quickly... I wanna say, "God I love her," but something tells me he wouldn't take me seriously if I used his name in vain like that...
Thanks for the comments, Miki.
Thanks for the comments, Miki.
Re: Her
7th May 2013 2:03am
My mom read this and she really liked it. She did think (and secretly knows) he was writing about his mom. She loves me so very much. Of course, this must be true since it's Mom that actually wrote this on your site.
Love you!
Mom
Love you!
Mom
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1st Jul 2013 11:38pm