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Crumbs, Get Some
My expression is blank
not in the mood to frown
smiling is just not my thing
I see spots
some say iron deficiency
I say, aliens are landing
"what do you want from me"
that question bugs the hell out of me,
because I never have an answer
turn the lights on or turn them off
having thought about it, they both come at a cost
I find myself perplexed by the switch
boats float and hope fucking sinks
that's me speaking positively
and basically how I feel about everything
if empty doesn't even begin to explain
neither shall I,
the hate train and my thoughts collide
sometimes they lead you somewhere
and sometimes they are all that is left,
crumbs, you just got some
not in the mood to frown
smiling is just not my thing
I see spots
some say iron deficiency
I say, aliens are landing
"what do you want from me"
that question bugs the hell out of me,
because I never have an answer
turn the lights on or turn them off
having thought about it, they both come at a cost
I find myself perplexed by the switch
boats float and hope fucking sinks
that's me speaking positively
and basically how I feel about everything
if empty doesn't even begin to explain
neither shall I,
the hate train and my thoughts collide
sometimes they lead you somewhere
and sometimes they are all that is left,
crumbs, you just got some
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Re: Crumbs, Get Some
Anonymous
19th Apr 2013 4:46pm
"Thank you, ma'am. May I have some more, please?"
Not sure how this completely unrelated piece jarred that bastardized classic line into my brain, but there ya go.
Love how you can express so much - in speaking of emptiness. Must be the sarcasm. But you've got the gift, Nikki. Can't help but to enjoy gawking at your train wrecks ;)
Not sure how this completely unrelated piece jarred that bastardized classic line into my brain, but there ya go.
Love how you can express so much - in speaking of emptiness. Must be the sarcasm. But you've got the gift, Nikki. Can't help but to enjoy gawking at your train wrecks ;)
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19th Apr 2013 5:25pm
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19th Apr 2013 6:37pm
Re: Crumbs, Get Some
19th Apr 2013 7:17pm
sweet little bit(ter)of
crumbcake
ayieeeeee...dear, you Must look at Thee Bright Side !
Give yOur sorrows to Thee Lord, & wappy'happy delusion w'ill love you forever wit
A Light So Bright that it'll render ye stone-blind.
Aaaaahhhhhhhhhhhmen!
crumbcake
ayieeeeee...dear, you Must look at Thee Bright Side !
Give yOur sorrows to Thee Lord, & wappy'happy delusion w'ill love you forever wit
A Light So Bright that it'll render ye stone-blind.
Aaaaahhhhhhhhhhhmen!
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Re: Crumbs, Get Some
19th Apr 2013 7:20pm
Re: Crumbs, Get Some
19th Apr 2013 7:24pm
Mannnn, I'm exactly in that place today.
"I see spots
some say iron deficiency
I say, aliens are landing"
They're coming to take me away, ha ha... (to the funny farm where life is beautiful all the time, and I'll be happy to see those nice young men in their clean white coats...)
"I see spots
some say iron deficiency
I say, aliens are landing"
They're coming to take me away, ha ha... (to the funny farm where life is beautiful all the time, and I'll be happy to see those nice young men in their clean white coats...)
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Re: Crumbs, Get Some
19th Apr 2013 8:45pm
Love this Nikkie ...
You need to do a theatrical presentation of spoken word to this !
It would be Kick ass!
lOVE THIS!
FIRE
You need to do a theatrical presentation of spoken word to this !
It would be Kick ass!
lOVE THIS!
FIRE
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Re: Crumbs, Get Some
19th Apr 2013 11:14pm
Re: Crumbs, Get Some
20th Apr 2013 1:25am
Much agreed with sister Phoenix! Sooo many of your works could be set to vid or theatre sketches. This one feels like the kind of opener that draws an audience in, showing an interactive performance. I dig it!
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Re: Crumbs, Get Some
20th Apr 2013 2:32am
I agree with everyone else comments!
They all said what I would have tried to say with few lines.
You already know, you have a unique talent! No one can duplicate your style. Amazing! :))
They all said what I would have tried to say with few lines.
You already know, you have a unique talent! No one can duplicate your style. Amazing! :))
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Re: Crumbs, Get Some
23rd Apr 2013 7:44am
Wow, that was really awesome I really don't know what to say except wow!
sabbath
sabbath
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