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Come rain, come shine..
Shuddering, I breathe in
tasting the midnight air.
Clearing my mind
the air, refreshing within.
Head bowed, hands in pockets.
The rain pressing down on me
why am I here..
in the cold and wet.
When I could be..
home again.
The air I exhale
appears before me
and settles on my left cheek.
Leaving a pleasent tingle
the longer I remain
the black of the darkness deepens
and the rain pressing down even more.
Turning my back to
the desolate train station.
I feel the time slipping away
like the rain drops on my cheek
merged within a tear.
It drops to the concrete
lost within the storm and sent to the seas.
Never to return again.
tasting the midnight air.
Clearing my mind
the air, refreshing within.
Head bowed, hands in pockets.
The rain pressing down on me
why am I here..
in the cold and wet.
When I could be..
home again.
The air I exhale
appears before me
and settles on my left cheek.
Leaving a pleasent tingle
the longer I remain
the black of the darkness deepens
and the rain pressing down even more.
Turning my back to
the desolate train station.
I feel the time slipping away
like the rain drops on my cheek
merged within a tear.
It drops to the concrete
lost within the storm and sent to the seas.
Never to return again.
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Re: Come rain, come shine..
Anonymous
9th Apr 2013 12:56pm
Deep observation.... but did I something?
Though easily visualized and great write. Do you have those myki cards for public transport?
Though easily visualized and great write. Do you have those myki cards for public transport?
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re: Re: Come rain, come shine..
9th Apr 2013 12:56pm
Re: Come rain, come shine..
Anonymous
9th Apr 2013 1:41pm
perfecting your craft evan
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re: Re: Come rain, come shine..
10th Apr 2013 5:36am
Re: Come rain, come shine..
9th Apr 2013 2:53pm
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10th Apr 2013 5:36am
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9th Apr 2013 5:46pm
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Re: Come rain, come shine..
9th Apr 2013 6:29pm
I feel the time slipping away
like the rain drops on my cheek
merged within a tear.
It drops to the concrete
lost within the storm and sent to the seas
The whole write is Great and Dark, But that up there---Ahhh that was truly bleak indeed!!!
like the rain drops on my cheek
merged within a tear.
It drops to the concrete
lost within the storm and sent to the seas
The whole write is Great and Dark, But that up there---Ahhh that was truly bleak indeed!!!
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re: Re: Come rain, come shine..
10th Apr 2013 8:37am
Anonymous
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10th Apr 2013 12:05pm
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re: Re: Come rain, come shine..
10th Apr 2013 12:37pm
Yeah, there's definitely more than meets the eye. The tear is my regret, the rain washes it away. And I lose that regret I've held onto for so long, lost within the rain, within the storm.
re: Re: Come rain, come shine..
11th Apr 2013 2:54am
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19th Apr 2013 3:00am
Hahaha well, you go ahead and attempt to do better, but you have barely any understanding of the English language, that will hinder you.
Re: Come rain, come shine..
26th Apr 2013 1:19am
I feel the time slipping away
like the rain drops on my cheek
merged within a tear.
It drops to the concrete
love these words! I bet there is song in you, with the above as your chorus
enjoyed the read
like the rain drops on my cheek
merged within a tear.
It drops to the concrete
love these words! I bet there is song in you, with the above as your chorus
enjoyed the read
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re: Re: Come rain, come shine..
Thank you Deborahlee, maybe there is, when one takes your voice away, you'll rarely sing along.. I suppose.