Poetry competition CLOSED 12th June 2017 2:03am
WINNER
composedWITHrazors (Blade Artist)
composedWITHrazors (Blade Artist)
RUNNERS-UP:
crimsin
and dustyjjewels
Broken hearted
This is good so close to my heart 😊
dustyjjewels said:Gone For Good
You want to know how I've been
How I managed through the storm
Be ready to feel my deepest pain
As I narrate to you in poetry form
How that Goddess blessed my world
With a love so true,divine
How she made a warm and tender soul
From a cold solitary mind
It all started by the beach
I'd gone to see the waves of the sea
To remind myself of how violent and turbulent
This pathetic life of mine have been
As I watched on before me appeared
The sweetest thing I've ever seen
She took me on a journey in her conversation
To a beautiful place I've never been
Thus we became thick as thieves
She my girl and I her man
We'd share promising and rosy dreams
Expressing our love in the best ways we can
Alas a third party soon appeared
Changes occurred and rumours flew
I tried to curtail and keep my jealousy in check
Hoping what I was hearing wasn't true
But I was seeing the gifts coming in
The dates,the visits and the telephone calls
Gradually the changes in her became so glaring
And pretence couldn't help me no more
Day and night we argued and fought
My greatest fear was about getting real
I dropped my pride and pleaded with her
To remember how far we've come on my knees
But her heart was already somewhere else
Nothing I did could save what we shared
Now I had to come to terms
With all the emotional horrors I feared
Eventually one night she left with him
All I could do was to drink and weep
Pondering where to go from here
And the priceless jewel I couldn't keep
Sometimes I pray for her eventual return
Looking to heaven as I pray to the Lord
Days turned to weeks and weeks to months
My expectant heart was blessed with no reward
Years later I accepted my fate
And snapped out of that depressed mood
Now whenever they ask of the girl I once loved
I tell them "she's gone for good"
dustyjjewels said:Gone For Good
You want to know how I've been
How I managed through the storm
Be ready to feel my deepest pain
As I narrate to you in poetry form
How that Goddess blessed my world
With a love so true,divine
How she made a warm and tender soul
From a cold solitary mind
It all started by the beach
I'd gone to see the waves of the sea
To remind myself of how violent and turbulent
This pathetic life of mine have been
As I watched on before me appeared
The sweetest thing I've ever seen
She took me on a journey in her conversation
To a beautiful place I've never been
Thus we became thick as thieves
She my girl and I her man
We'd share promising and rosy dreams
Expressing our love in the best ways we can
Alas a third party soon appeared
Changes occurred and rumours flew
I tried to curtail and keep my jealousy in check
Hoping what I was hearing wasn't true
But I was seeing the gifts coming in
The dates,the visits and the telephone calls
Gradually the changes in her became so glaring
And pretence couldn't help me no more
Day and night we argued and fought
My greatest fear was about getting real
I dropped my pride and pleaded with her
To remember how far we've come on my knees
But her heart was already somewhere else
Nothing I did could save what we shared
Now I had to come to terms
With all the emotional horrors I feared
Eventually one night she left with him
All I could do was to drink and weep
Pondering where to go from here
And the priceless jewel I couldn't keep
Sometimes I pray for her eventual return
Looking to heaven as I pray to the Lord
Days turned to weeks and weeks to months
My expectant heart was blessed with no reward
Years later I accepted my fate
And snapped out of that depressed mood
Now whenever they ask of the girl I once loved
I tell them "she's gone for good"
Wow 😳 an amazing write, thank you 😊
OxyMoronicMe said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/236780-murder-me-love/
OxyMoronicMe said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/236780-murder-me-love/
These poems are amazing, thank you 😊
Zach_of_all_trades said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/273306-not-fit-for-consumption/
Zach_of_all_trades said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/273306-not-fit-for-consumption/
Thank you for write I've got many hard decisions to make 😊
eswaller said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/273541-heartbreak-effect/
eswaller said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/273541-heartbreak-effect/
Another good one thank you 😊
diddi said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/32750-outside-the-light/
diddi said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/32750-outside-the-light/
Never thought of it like that good write 😊
snugglebuck said:http://i1290.photobucket.com/albums/b536/1willybugger/sick%20heart_zpsj6r2oh9s.png
Maybe a broken heart hurts for a reason.
Your heart may function like your stomach.
You see a custard pie at the deli, it looks so good, and you order a slice. It tastes divine. Now you’re so in love with that custard pie and can't wait to experience it again.
Going home, 'with pie on your mind,' you decide to take a blissful nap.
Suddenly you awake! You’re in terrible pain. It’s like there's a rat inside you trying to chew its way out. Standing up, you’re overwhelmed by the nausea. You run to the toilet and vomit so hard, not only do you puke the custard pie out, but nearly expel your intestines as well. Exhausted, you kneel before the porcelain altar and promise God, no matter how tempting, you'll never eat another slice of pie from that deli again.
I think our hearts may function like our stomachs. Eating something that’s not good for you, your stomach reacts painfully and makes you expel the tainted dish. Your heart may hurt for the same reason, so you reject tainted love before it does anymore damage. And like the deli where you bought that bad custard pie, you learn never to visit that same lover again.
When your heart hurts, listen. It may be trying to tell you something.
snugglebuck said:http://i1290.photobucket.com/albums/b536/1willybugger/sick%20heart_zpsj6r2oh9s.png
Maybe a broken heart hurts for a reason.
Your heart may function like your stomach.
You see a custard pie at the deli, it looks so good, and you order a slice. It tastes divine. Now you’re so in love with that custard pie and can't wait to experience it again.
Going home, 'with pie on your mind,' you decide to take a blissful nap.
Suddenly you awake! You’re in terrible pain. It’s like there's a rat inside you trying to chew its way out. Standing up, you’re overwhelmed by the nausea. You run to the toilet and vomit so hard, not only do you puke the custard pie out, but nearly expel your intestines as well. Exhausted, you kneel before the porcelain altar and promise God, no matter how tempting, you'll never eat another slice of pie from that deli again.
I think our hearts may function like our stomachs. Eating something that’s not good for you, your stomach reacts painfully and makes you expel the tainted dish. Your heart may hurt for the same reason, so you reject tainted love before it does anymore damage. And like the deli where you bought that bad custard pie, you learn never to visit that same lover again.
When your heart hurts, listen. It may be trying to tell you something.
And now she is dying in your arms
You've asked, cried with no sleep
When will it happen? I want! I need!
You waited for her and now she is
Dying right in front your knees!
How could it be you are the one
To kill her, suck away the charm
She had, the glow in her eyes
Was there love among the lies?
You'd say I did all my best
To keep the heartbeat in her chest,
To love, to carry but one day
My needs have gained more weight
"My own", "for me", "for my joy"
I trained her to become my toy
To please me when I need and how
Turned to devil suddenly somehow
Her blood is on your hands but
She's not leaving. To be apart
From you is her greatest fear
What is it for you? One tear?
Or not at all? Will you hear
Her last weak heartbeat near?
Her quiet "I love you" she says
Eyes closed forever on her face,
Breath has stopped on those words
Will you feel like a hundred swords
Pierced your flesh at once?
She felt like that million times
When you left her used, alone
Even then she loved, wasn't gone
Even now she loves but her blood
Is cold already, heart has stopped
She can't say but her spirit does:
"I'll be here, my love will last!"
And you stay watching it all ends
Too late to hold and break defence,
Too late to kiss and bring to life
Too late for: "Oh, one day, sometime"
When will it happen? I want! I need!
You waited for her and now she is
Dying right in front your knees!
How could it be you are the one
To kill her, suck away the charm
She had, the glow in her eyes
Was there love among the lies?
You'd say I did all my best
To keep the heartbeat in her chest,
To love, to carry but one day
My needs have gained more weight
"My own", "for me", "for my joy"
I trained her to become my toy
To please me when I need and how
Turned to devil suddenly somehow
Her blood is on your hands but
She's not leaving. To be apart
From you is her greatest fear
What is it for you? One tear?
Or not at all? Will you hear
Her last weak heartbeat near?
Her quiet "I love you" she says
Eyes closed forever on her face,
Breath has stopped on those words
Will you feel like a hundred swords
Pierced your flesh at once?
She felt like that million times
When you left her used, alone
Even then she loved, wasn't gone
Even now she loves but her blood
Is cold already, heart has stopped
She can't say but her spirit does:
"I'll be here, my love will last!"
And you stay watching it all ends
Too late to hold and break defence,
Too late to kiss and bring to life
Too late for: "Oh, one day, sometime"
Written by LanaW
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Thank you for your words here there are some really good ones 😊
LanaW said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/270066-and-now-she-is-dying-in-your-arms/
LanaW said:https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/270066-and-now-she-is-dying-in-your-arms/
EpicUtester69 said:
In the running for sure, I loved the way it flowed.
Thank you.
I had to take down the other that you answered to, and reenter it here as a copy/paste. I hope this doesn't inconvenience you. ~Jade
B r o k e n
Have you eaten, child?
"No my love, it's too soon."
Have you water?
"No my love, I drank it
all in the night."
You have fever, child!
"Yes my love, but
water will not quell it."
I would keep near while you
refill your cup.
"I can wait. I don't want the
water while you are here."
I should leave so you will
get your rest.
"I will not rest if you go, for
I am broken with desire."
I will stop loving you.
"I will go on loving you
as I always have."
In the running for sure, I loved the way it flowed.
Thank you.
I had to take down the other that you answered to, and reenter it here as a copy/paste. I hope this doesn't inconvenience you. ~Jade
B r o k e n
Have you eaten, child?
"No my love, it's too soon."
Have you water?
"No my love, I drank it
all in the night."
You have fever, child!
"Yes my love, but
water will not quell it."
I would keep near while you
refill your cup.
"I can wait. I don't want the
water while you are here."
I should leave so you will
get your rest.
"I will not rest if you go, for
I am broken with desire."
I will stop loving you.
"I will go on loving you
as I always have."
Most welcome and thank you for reenter it here it's very good 😊
Jade-Pandora said:
Thank you.
I had to take down the other that you answered to, and reenter it here as a copy/paste. I hope this doesn't inconvenience you. ~Jade
B r o k e n
Have you eaten, child?
"No my love, it's too soon."
Have you water?
"No my love, I drank it
all in the night."
You have fever, child!
"Yes my love, but
water will not quell it."
I would keep near while you
refill your cup.
"I can wait. I don't want the
water while you are here."
I should leave so you will
get your rest.
"I will not rest if you go, for
I am broken with desire."
I will stop loving you.
"I will go on loving you
as I always have."
Jade-Pandora said:
Thank you.
I had to take down the other that you answered to, and reenter it here as a copy/paste. I hope this doesn't inconvenience you. ~Jade
B r o k e n
Have you eaten, child?
"No my love, it's too soon."
Have you water?
"No my love, I drank it
all in the night."
You have fever, child!
"Yes my love, but
water will not quell it."
I would keep near while you
refill your cup.
"I can wait. I don't want the
water while you are here."
I should leave so you will
get your rest.
"I will not rest if you go, for
I am broken with desire."
I will stop loving you.
"I will go on loving you
as I always have."
Dirge of a broken heart
Love is to give and share
to hold to keep to declare
but as the golden circle
that binds do break
dew drops from aching hearts
fall unheeded on deeply furrowed souls
to ache to hurt in exquisite pain
knowing not how to love again
Holding on to strangers' hands
willing to hope and feel again
but nary a sound the heart do gain
how far or further still the willingness
to say to talk to speak to tell
the feelings once felt
When one love's hand touches
though it ends in betrayal
Meander the crack in hearts do break
cracking like frozen ice in the antarctic
following the falling leaves of autumn
dead and helpless in its descent
watching him with his new love
a nail in love's coffin hammered
while within dying heart screams.
to hold to keep to declare
but as the golden circle
that binds do break
dew drops from aching hearts
fall unheeded on deeply furrowed souls
to ache to hurt in exquisite pain
knowing not how to love again
Holding on to strangers' hands
willing to hope and feel again
but nary a sound the heart do gain
how far or further still the willingness
to say to talk to speak to tell
the feelings once felt
When one love's hand touches
though it ends in betrayal
Meander the crack in hearts do break
cracking like frozen ice in the antarctic
following the falling leaves of autumn
dead and helpless in its descent
watching him with his new love
a nail in love's coffin hammered
while within dying heart screams.
Written by Grace
(IDryad)
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Early June
appreciate who is there.
for once it’ll soon be over.
When your friendships wear and tear,
Nobody is lucky as a clover.
There are ones who are there,
Smiling from ear to ear,
If we’re a lucky pair,
I am always here.
For I admire you dear,
My one and only love
Even if you are drear,
I think the god above
No matter how dangerous,
or whatever path you take,
I’m here and adventurous,
Even though there’s heartbreak.
I gave you time,
and agreed to leave you alone.
I made the rhyme,
So my thoughts weren’t ever shown.
For you, my dear,
Everything will be okay.
Every second I can’t be near
Remember, I’m here all the way
You made me high
and grin with glee
yet everything will die,
And we’ll live in misery.
The birds may fly,
the fish may swim
I’ll stay here and cry,
Without your lovely hymn.
for once it’ll soon be over.
When your friendships wear and tear,
Nobody is lucky as a clover.
There are ones who are there,
Smiling from ear to ear,
If we’re a lucky pair,
I am always here.
For I admire you dear,
My one and only love
Even if you are drear,
I think the god above
No matter how dangerous,
or whatever path you take,
I’m here and adventurous,
Even though there’s heartbreak.
I gave you time,
and agreed to leave you alone.
I made the rhyme,
So my thoughts weren’t ever shown.
For you, my dear,
Everything will be okay.
Every second I can’t be near
Remember, I’m here all the way
You made me high
and grin with glee
yet everything will die,
And we’ll live in misery.
The birds may fly,
the fish may swim
I’ll stay here and cry,
Without your lovely hymn.
Written by jakeundefined
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Case of the Ex
K.Caliber
Let me tell about this bitch
She that ex that never wants you happy
She manipulative jealous and catty
Every time I find a little peace she
Come Knockin like "waddup zaddy"
I just wanna live leave me alone Dee Dee
She play too much fuckin with my mind
Jealous of my girl, she knows I'm in love but got me thinkin I'm blind
Dee got me second guessing everything
I told her that I wanna marry my girl
I don't need you no more especially after all shit you put me through
She laughed like "nigga you stupid, yea she love you but you wanna give this chick you're last name and she ain't IN love with you"
Now Dee Dee got me emotionally fucked lookin at my girl like I'm in love with you but you can't say the same
Yet you state you're ready to carry my last name
Dee a hurtful bitch
Type to kick a nigga while he's down and shit
Type to remind a nigga of pain from the past and shit
Like "So shawty not in love with you but at least y'all slam dance on the reg. Oh wait nevermind wasn't she on some shit for the last 2 and half weeks
Tellin you you were gettin the cheeks but instead you had to settle for givin her head, and you in the bathroom, Porn Hub witcha man in hand GotDamn lmao, nigga you act like you ain't seen this episode before last bitch that played that role had you changing diapers on a baby that wasn't yours"
Now she got mentally fucked lookin at my girl
Like if it ain't my dick then who's dick you on
I should emotionally detach but if I don that everything will go wrong,
but Dee planted the seed it takes some time to grow but how long
The more I think of reasons for it not be true Dee just says "different artist same song"
She tryin fuck up my happiness
And makes too much damn sense
I send messages that explain exactly how I feel about her
All I really get is that she loves what comes with me and honestly that hurts
And make matters worse
She states you only get 3 real loves in life
Her roster has K, Matt, and Jordon
I don't even know if I'm 4th and I'm sittin here wantin her as my wife
I stay quiet and keep this to myself cuz I've learned my feelings ain't important
I don't wanna be a wolf with a heart colder than the winter
But Dee has a way the words and somehow always ends up as the winner
Why does it seem as she has a mindset
That my happiness is something she has to hinder
But what if Dee is actually tryin to show me something I was truly blind to
What if my girl now sees me as a rebound
Sees me as the total package but still views me as a fuckin clown
She may not wanna take me from the kids since our connection is so profound
Pissed at the fact that Dee could be right
And this is a re-aired episode
Should I change the channel or follow the yellow brick road
Should I tell my girl everything I'm being told
Dee Dee is depression and this shit is gettin old
Bitch I just wanna know one thing
Is you hatin or helpin?
I look at baby girl as blessin
And ya interference got me second guessin
I know you fuckin with me is addin to her stress
And now her stress got me stressin
You the reason I'm always drained
You the reason I've been pained
You got me feeling like just cuz she ain't fuckin me she runnin game
So what happens? I begin to detach which in return Makes her think the same
So now she'll question every dame and I'll feel like she'll bust it open for every lame in your phone
I can't stay happy for shit
She thinking I'm them past niggas
I'm thinkin she them past bitches
We both suffer from depression
Dee Dee the side hoe just fuckin us both
Dee got her tellin me all the shit that my mind I understands but makes my heart wanna cuss
Her past relationships make me nauseous
Knowin she was in love wit niggas who did her dirty makes me wanna off shit
Selfish feelin like that love I deserve that
If she was bald I would give her hair off my damn back
I'm in love but she just loves me so if I was hit bleedin reachin for my life would she pick up and let that gun clap
Prolly not
I wouldn't blame her though
She love me so she'll miss me if I go
But she'll move on
Mother of 3 so baby gotta be strong
I need her in my life
She gotta be this crazy nigga's wife
Dee prolly got her think that she shouldn't get comfortable this nigga gonna leave
A girlfriend with 3 kids this nigga prolly can't breath
I love him but fear fallin in love with him
because of the way that I loved them
I was done dirty so my love is prolly a sin
He's everything I wanted in those men
But the way my life setup I wasn't meant to win
I can't fully understand why he gave me his heart like its a gem
That's a responsibility I wasn’t prepared for
He came outta nowhere
These walls of protection won't allow me to give him more
And I want to, he deserves that
He's the total package supportive, loving, and a super dad
He loves the fuck outta my kids
If anyone or anything threatened harm our way I know for a fact he'll probably split few wigs
I don't wanna drive him away
honestly never had man love me in every way
I'm stressing tryin to figure out how to be me but make sure he's gonna stay
I wanna complain but it might drive him insane
Feelin like shit cuz I'm not fully over my past
It's to a point where I feel like I'm tellin Keith you can kiss my ass
But that's not the case I wish God provided a "how get over him" class
I need him in my life
I gotta be this crazy nigga's wife
Dee Dee gloats, I did it again placed doubt in his mind he'll struggle to keep it in check
Because he loves her in every aspect
That I know as a fact
I cant stand seeing him happy
I'll put any idea in his head to make his day crappy
She wrote him "her confession"
Hmm So let me bring up past issues to have his mind tell his heart this is a repeated lesson
Fastest way to make Keith miserable
Is to confuse him in the emotional
This operation is so precise it's surgical
See Caliber your Insecurities will keep me close you
I just hope she's not strong enough to push thru it
I'm hatin on her and helpin myself
I'm curse and your blessin
So nigga I hope that answers your question
I hope you know you'll always love depression
K.Caliber
Let me tell about this bitch
She that ex that never wants you happy
She manipulative jealous and catty
Every time I find a little peace she
Come Knockin like "waddup zaddy"
I just wanna live leave me alone Dee Dee
She play too much fuckin with my mind
Jealous of my girl, she knows I'm in love but got me thinkin I'm blind
Dee got me second guessing everything
I told her that I wanna marry my girl
I don't need you no more especially after all shit you put me through
She laughed like "nigga you stupid, yea she love you but you wanna give this chick you're last name and she ain't IN love with you"
Now Dee Dee got me emotionally fucked lookin at my girl like I'm in love with you but you can't say the same
Yet you state you're ready to carry my last name
Dee a hurtful bitch
Type to kick a nigga while he's down and shit
Type to remind a nigga of pain from the past and shit
Like "So shawty not in love with you but at least y'all slam dance on the reg. Oh wait nevermind wasn't she on some shit for the last 2 and half weeks
Tellin you you were gettin the cheeks but instead you had to settle for givin her head, and you in the bathroom, Porn Hub witcha man in hand GotDamn lmao, nigga you act like you ain't seen this episode before last bitch that played that role had you changing diapers on a baby that wasn't yours"
Now she got mentally fucked lookin at my girl
Like if it ain't my dick then who's dick you on
I should emotionally detach but if I don that everything will go wrong,
but Dee planted the seed it takes some time to grow but how long
The more I think of reasons for it not be true Dee just says "different artist same song"
She tryin fuck up my happiness
And makes too much damn sense
I send messages that explain exactly how I feel about her
All I really get is that she loves what comes with me and honestly that hurts
And make matters worse
She states you only get 3 real loves in life
Her roster has K, Matt, and Jordon
I don't even know if I'm 4th and I'm sittin here wantin her as my wife
I stay quiet and keep this to myself cuz I've learned my feelings ain't important
I don't wanna be a wolf with a heart colder than the winter
But Dee has a way the words and somehow always ends up as the winner
Why does it seem as she has a mindset
That my happiness is something she has to hinder
But what if Dee is actually tryin to show me something I was truly blind to
What if my girl now sees me as a rebound
Sees me as the total package but still views me as a fuckin clown
She may not wanna take me from the kids since our connection is so profound
Pissed at the fact that Dee could be right
And this is a re-aired episode
Should I change the channel or follow the yellow brick road
Should I tell my girl everything I'm being told
Dee Dee is depression and this shit is gettin old
Bitch I just wanna know one thing
Is you hatin or helpin?
I look at baby girl as blessin
And ya interference got me second guessin
I know you fuckin with me is addin to her stress
And now her stress got me stressin
You the reason I'm always drained
You the reason I've been pained
You got me feeling like just cuz she ain't fuckin me she runnin game
So what happens? I begin to detach which in return Makes her think the same
So now she'll question every dame and I'll feel like she'll bust it open for every lame in your phone
I can't stay happy for shit
She thinking I'm them past niggas
I'm thinkin she them past bitches
We both suffer from depression
Dee Dee the side hoe just fuckin us both
Dee got her tellin me all the shit that my mind I understands but makes my heart wanna cuss
Her past relationships make me nauseous
Knowin she was in love wit niggas who did her dirty makes me wanna off shit
Selfish feelin like that love I deserve that
If she was bald I would give her hair off my damn back
I'm in love but she just loves me so if I was hit bleedin reachin for my life would she pick up and let that gun clap
Prolly not
I wouldn't blame her though
She love me so she'll miss me if I go
But she'll move on
Mother of 3 so baby gotta be strong
I need her in my life
She gotta be this crazy nigga's wife
Dee prolly got her think that she shouldn't get comfortable this nigga gonna leave
A girlfriend with 3 kids this nigga prolly can't breath
I love him but fear fallin in love with him
because of the way that I loved them
I was done dirty so my love is prolly a sin
He's everything I wanted in those men
But the way my life setup I wasn't meant to win
I can't fully understand why he gave me his heart like its a gem
That's a responsibility I wasn’t prepared for
He came outta nowhere
These walls of protection won't allow me to give him more
And I want to, he deserves that
He's the total package supportive, loving, and a super dad
He loves the fuck outta my kids
If anyone or anything threatened harm our way I know for a fact he'll probably split few wigs
I don't wanna drive him away
honestly never had man love me in every way
I'm stressing tryin to figure out how to be me but make sure he's gonna stay
I wanna complain but it might drive him insane
Feelin like shit cuz I'm not fully over my past
It's to a point where I feel like I'm tellin Keith you can kiss my ass
But that's not the case I wish God provided a "how get over him" class
I need him in my life
I gotta be this crazy nigga's wife
Dee Dee gloats, I did it again placed doubt in his mind he'll struggle to keep it in check
Because he loves her in every aspect
That I know as a fact
I cant stand seeing him happy
I'll put any idea in his head to make his day crappy
She wrote him "her confession"
Hmm So let me bring up past issues to have his mind tell his heart this is a repeated lesson
Fastest way to make Keith miserable
Is to confuse him in the emotional
This operation is so precise it's surgical
See Caliber your Insecurities will keep me close you
I just hope she's not strong enough to push thru it
I'm hatin on her and helpin myself
I'm curse and your blessin
So nigga I hope that answers your question
I hope you know you'll always love depression
