Make it Subtle Erotica
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Poetry Contest Description
This comp is for those who write erotica and involves a rewrite of one your most descriptive erotic poem uploaded on DU
I want you to take the most descriptive of your erotic poems, e.g. one where you’ve given a blow by blow of the sexual act and REWRITE it making the overall poem SUBTLE EROTICA.
Add the link to the poem you’ve rewritten or copy it underneath the rewrite making sure the date of original upload is mentioned.
✔ Comp is for writers of erotica
✔ REWRITE your most descriptive erotic poem that’s been previously uploaded on DU and make it SUBTLE
✔ Add the link to said poem or copy it UNDERNEATH the rewritten one making sure the date of original upload is mentioned
Add the link to the poem you’ve rewritten or copy it underneath the rewrite making sure the date of original upload is mentioned.
✔ Comp is for writers of erotica
✔ REWRITE your most descriptive erotic poem that’s been previously uploaded on DU and make it SUBTLE
✔ Add the link to said poem or copy it UNDERNEATH the rewritten one making sure the date of original upload is mentioned
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http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/156365-in-her-darkest-place/
in her darkest place
(apologies to Shakespeare)
this is your desire, to taste another woman’s passion
upon my brooding serpent? to see if it bears the same
richness as your own contumelious vanity, when you
purl it’s venom, in this place where our spirits have sinned.
is it not enough to be full of a man’s streaming rage, a
swirling, boiling pool in your moribund pudenda?
you need to devour the tender petals of ecstasy and bliss
with your ferine mouth, to eat love and drink carnality,
to fill all of your inner self, until there is no room for a
breakable heart, a condemned soul. and when you have
usurped and swallowed every corrupt drop,
would I kiss your mouth then?
there is no poetry in lovemaking for you. there is no
lovemaking: it is merely prostitution.
is it the vileness that you crawl for,
the humiliation?
dear Love: ‘brace all of sweet and sorrow –
how dolorous the Fates! how dire!
that we must fornicate the night entire
till it be morrow…
in her darkest place
(apologies to Shakespeare)
this is your desire, to taste another woman’s passion
upon my brooding serpent? to see if it bears the same
richness as your own contumelious vanity, when you
purl it’s venom, in this place where our spirits have sinned.
is it not enough to be full of a man’s streaming rage, a
swirling, boiling pool in your moribund pudenda?
you need to devour the tender petals of ecstasy and bliss
with your ferine mouth, to eat love and drink carnality,
to fill all of your inner self, until there is no room for a
breakable heart, a condemned soul. and when you have
usurped and swallowed every corrupt drop,
would I kiss your mouth then?
there is no poetry in lovemaking for you. there is no
lovemaking: it is merely prostitution.
is it the vileness that you crawl for,
the humiliation?
dear Love: ‘brace all of sweet and sorrow –
how dolorous the Fates! how dire!
that we must fornicate the night entire
till it be morrow…
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Thanks for starting off this comp John... :-)
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Clarification: Do you mean this is for those who primarily write erotica, or is it for anyone who has written erotica here for comps and otherwise?
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LobodeSanPedro said:Clarification: Do you mean this is for those who primarily write erotica, or is it for anyone who has written erotica here for comps and otherwise?
It is for anyone who has written and uploaded an erotic poem on DU...
BUT the poem they are rewriting MUST have been uploaded on DU and MUST be quite explicit.
It is for anyone who has written and uploaded an erotic poem on DU...
BUT the poem they are rewriting MUST have been uploaded on DU and MUST be quite explicit.
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http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/235206-scratching-post/
In the back row of the glassed off section
the husband watched my reflection
stare at his wife
mesmerized by the space between her
upper thighs
Oh,
realize he is on to me
I dont avert my eyes
He coerces her to sit
soon she is up again
tending her offspring
Facing the preacher
holding a baby
She rests her buttocks
on a pew's armrest
pushing it hard into her crotch
from behind
In the back row of the glassed off section
the husband watched my reflection
stare at his wife
mesmerized by the space between her
upper thighs
Oh,
realize he is on to me
I dont avert my eyes
He coerces her to sit
soon she is up again
tending her offspring
Facing the preacher
holding a baby
She rests her buttocks
on a pew's armrest
pushing it hard into her crotch
from behind
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http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/244401-sex-lesson-1/
Sex Lesson #1 ! extreme content !
I grabbed Sara as she was walking home
She kicked and fought but I still got her
After stalking her it's now time to begin
She needs to be taught lesson number one
Her ivory skin so smooth and soft
Her nipples poked out and aroused
Her crying makes me grin
She's a cripple who has never been loved
I take a vibrator out and start playing softly
She squirms and gasps "Stop I don't like it."
"I'll make you like it Sara." I whisper silently
A teardrop falls down her cheek and I smile
The dildo is next and I ram it that tight pussy
She crys harder now and battles against me
"You want to fight we can fight." I whisper
I pry off my pants and sit on her chest
I shove my rod in her mouth with a smile
She sucks only because I slap her face
I pound my love with the dildo deeper
This makes her fuck my cock faster
Tongue swirling around my head
"That's right my bitch." I laugh
One more stroke lead her to Cum
A high pitch squeal and More tears flow
I teabag her face as she sobs in pain
One more pound and she will be fed
A train of cum squirting down her throat
The sound of her gagging makes me proud
"Swallow it my Cunt, you just survived Lesson Number One.
Sex Lesson #1 ! extreme content !
I grabbed Sara as she was walking home
She kicked and fought but I still got her
After stalking her it's now time to begin
She needs to be taught lesson number one
Her ivory skin so smooth and soft
Her nipples poked out and aroused
Her crying makes me grin
She's a cripple who has never been loved
I take a vibrator out and start playing softly
She squirms and gasps "Stop I don't like it."
"I'll make you like it Sara." I whisper silently
A teardrop falls down her cheek and I smile
The dildo is next and I ram it that tight pussy
She crys harder now and battles against me
"You want to fight we can fight." I whisper
I pry off my pants and sit on her chest
I shove my rod in her mouth with a smile
She sucks only because I slap her face
I pound my love with the dildo deeper
This makes her fuck my cock faster
Tongue swirling around my head
"That's right my bitch." I laugh
One more stroke lead her to Cum
A high pitch squeal and More tears flow
I teabag her face as she sobs in pain
One more pound and she will be fed
A train of cum squirting down her throat
The sound of her gagging makes me proud
"Swallow it my Cunt, you just survived Lesson Number One.
RainC_Tara
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Subtly Rough
Cognitive images draw intense murals of his hands
grasping hips that gently shifted downward
gripping, then gyrated atop his powerful symbol
where the snugness of my sanctuary was tailor-made for his
regal perfection, all the while I was painting his throbbing mischief
with my feverish hysteria.
I wanted it rough, raw and chaotic enough to be
force fed the full throttle of thick.
Lips eagerly waiting for his widened smile,
tongue aching with anticipation to taste his essence,
while my larynx begged for his liquid surrender to…
coat my throat, smoothly.
Head held with such tenderness pulling it in unison
with every thrusts I greedily accepted.
Humming on his majestic eagerness.
His groans created an admired melody…. startling an
atmosphere that never heard the sounds of a passionate
composition being born.
Retracting from symphony slurps and joyful gags of reflex…
the only time I was content and comfortable with no air.
I could feel his stare,
as I licked every inch of what was once taboo.
Fortifying my position, subtle submission
joining of souls pleasing each other in formation,
where both pair of my lips were being utilized-
passionately, simultaneously.
Every time he licked the seam of my wet promise
he could taste my antiquity living there.
And every time I drew him in like carnal nicotine,
sucked and puff as his glaze settled in the corners of my mouth
like an perennial edge I would never forget,
I could feel myself getting high, staying wasted,
and becoming addicted to wanting it….
rough....
yet, subtle.
Rain~
Sometimes I like It Rough
November, 29, 2015
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/222862-sometimes-i-like-it-rough/
*….sometimes I like it rough, less classy
on those days when hoarse and raw resembles my mood*
Snug fit leads to confined hips,
caressed and licked quivering clit.
Clenched.
Messy cheeks, surges released with every moaned need
forced tactically on my knees
feenin’ to taste, begging to slurp
mesmerized by his glistening head dripping smiles
(I’m craving to suck)
Shaft stiffened within lungs,
the firmer he grips my head, the deeper he travels
towards the back of my throat, making me….
......wetter
Thrusting in my mouth while sharing fornicated lines
“Choke on it!”
…and I do, like a whore, gagging for more
wanting to lick balls and taint, I’m no saint,
but his g-spot is the spot my tongue wants to paint
*....sometimes, I like it rough, a little trashy
on those day when spontaneous fucking becomes a
tamed tabooed climax*
Flipped and folded in strategized position
where both sets of my lips are simultaneously being
worked over, between 6 to 9 minutes
*Did you catch that?*
I’m ready to get penetrated and spanked.
Legs flanked, against frail and clammy thighs
yoni sighs pleasure each time his tip slowly enters,
restriction and friction upon every re-entry …
Pull and push until seeds are coaxed out by…
constricted wet-walls.
Residue from sweet butter-nut love juice decorates my lips
oozing sluggishly with each squeeze of cock
‘I won’t waste a drop’
*….sometimes, I like it rough…..
just because…*
Rain~
Cognitive images draw intense murals of his hands
grasping hips that gently shifted downward
gripping, then gyrated atop his powerful symbol
where the snugness of my sanctuary was tailor-made for his
regal perfection, all the while I was painting his throbbing mischief
with my feverish hysteria.
I wanted it rough, raw and chaotic enough to be
force fed the full throttle of thick.
Lips eagerly waiting for his widened smile,
tongue aching with anticipation to taste his essence,
while my larynx begged for his liquid surrender to…
coat my throat, smoothly.
Head held with such tenderness pulling it in unison
with every thrusts I greedily accepted.
Humming on his majestic eagerness.
His groans created an admired melody…. startling an
atmosphere that never heard the sounds of a passionate
composition being born.
Retracting from symphony slurps and joyful gags of reflex…
the only time I was content and comfortable with no air.
I could feel his stare,
as I licked every inch of what was once taboo.
Fortifying my position, subtle submission
joining of souls pleasing each other in formation,
where both pair of my lips were being utilized-
passionately, simultaneously.
Every time he licked the seam of my wet promise
he could taste my antiquity living there.
And every time I drew him in like carnal nicotine,
sucked and puff as his glaze settled in the corners of my mouth
like an perennial edge I would never forget,
I could feel myself getting high, staying wasted,
and becoming addicted to wanting it….
rough....
yet, subtle.
Rain~
Sometimes I like It Rough
November, 29, 2015
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/222862-sometimes-i-like-it-rough/
*….sometimes I like it rough, less classy
on those days when hoarse and raw resembles my mood*
Snug fit leads to confined hips,
caressed and licked quivering clit.
Clenched.
Messy cheeks, surges released with every moaned need
forced tactically on my knees
feenin’ to taste, begging to slurp
mesmerized by his glistening head dripping smiles
(I’m craving to suck)
Shaft stiffened within lungs,
the firmer he grips my head, the deeper he travels
towards the back of my throat, making me….
......wetter
Thrusting in my mouth while sharing fornicated lines
“Choke on it!”
…and I do, like a whore, gagging for more
wanting to lick balls and taint, I’m no saint,
but his g-spot is the spot my tongue wants to paint
*....sometimes, I like it rough, a little trashy
on those day when spontaneous fucking becomes a
tamed tabooed climax*
Flipped and folded in strategized position
where both sets of my lips are simultaneously being
worked over, between 6 to 9 minutes
*Did you catch that?*
I’m ready to get penetrated and spanked.
Legs flanked, against frail and clammy thighs
yoni sighs pleasure each time his tip slowly enters,
restriction and friction upon every re-entry …
Pull and push until seeds are coaxed out by…
constricted wet-walls.
Residue from sweet butter-nut love juice decorates my lips
oozing sluggishly with each squeeze of cock
‘I won’t waste a drop’
*….sometimes, I like it rough…..
just because…*
Rain~
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Muffled Mewling ! extreme content !
Shh... baby, don't make me have to stop
Wrapping and unwrapping
These fingers
In that sweet candy cave
Oh how I love the taste
As I slide it across my mouth
Have you suck on that lollipop
Choke as its pushed deeper down your throat
Oh baby, you're just not listening
As you’re moaning at the taste
And we need to stop him from hearing
Me lose sight of my long fingers
In and out, covering
My mouth in sweet nectar, pummeling
My long cream-filled candy stick
Must I cover that mouth
While I force my cream inside
Of that tight, dripping sugar cove
Oh how I love seeing you lose control
Love hearing your muffled screams
As I start to feed you relentlessly
What a disobedient little girl you are
Forcing me to shut you up
With a hand to your throat
As I watch you build up
Shaking, nipples hard
And now the walls are now crumbling
Oh, you've made me do it
Little girl
You leave me no choice
But to choke you with these candy rocks
Shut that pretty mouth up
Deny you that sweet sensation
As I force you to swallow my sugar stalk
Look at you, baby
Clawing
Arching
Begging
Pleading
For me to finish what I started
My dirty little girl
He's just outside now
And I know that's how you like it
What will it be, my princess
Would you like for me to turn you
Eat you from behind
While I choke you
Or do you want me on top
Hand over your mouth
As I pin you under me
Taste that sweet syrup and
Lick you till I want to stop
Or maybe you'll prefer it
If I watched you suck this lollipop
While I watch you stir that cherry
Between your fingers
Either way
You're finishing desert, princess
And unless you want to be punished
You'll keep quiet.
... Didn't know how subtle i was supposed to be, but i gave it a shot
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/243790-muffled-mewling/
Shh... baby, don't make me have to stop
Wrapping and unwrapping
These fingers
In that sweet candy cave
Oh how I love the taste
As I slide it across my mouth
Have you suck on that lollipop
Choke as its pushed deeper down your throat
Oh baby, you're just not listening
As you’re moaning at the taste
And we need to stop him from hearing
Me lose sight of my long fingers
In and out, covering
My mouth in sweet nectar, pummeling
My long cream-filled candy stick
Must I cover that mouth
While I force my cream inside
Of that tight, dripping sugar cove
Oh how I love seeing you lose control
Love hearing your muffled screams
As I start to feed you relentlessly
What a disobedient little girl you are
Forcing me to shut you up
With a hand to your throat
As I watch you build up
Shaking, nipples hard
And now the walls are now crumbling
Oh, you've made me do it
Little girl
You leave me no choice
But to choke you with these candy rocks
Shut that pretty mouth up
Deny you that sweet sensation
As I force you to swallow my sugar stalk
Look at you, baby
Clawing
Arching
Begging
Pleading
For me to finish what I started
My dirty little girl
He's just outside now
And I know that's how you like it
What will it be, my princess
Would you like for me to turn you
Eat you from behind
While I choke you
Or do you want me on top
Hand over your mouth
As I pin you under me
Taste that sweet syrup and
Lick you till I want to stop
Or maybe you'll prefer it
If I watched you suck this lollipop
While I watch you stir that cherry
Between your fingers
Either way
You're finishing desert, princess
And unless you want to be punished
You'll keep quiet.
... Didn't know how subtle i was supposed to be, but i gave it a shot
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/243790-muffled-mewling/
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Just Lay There
Let me show you what you want.
Just lay there. ...
You watch me take off my clothes.
Just lay there. ...
While I take my purple panties off
Just lay there. ...
Watch me stretch my legs over your shoulders.
Just lay there. ...
Feel me slide my pussy down your chest.
Just lay there. ...
Please do not move.
Just lay there. ...
Feel my nails scratch down your body.
Just lay there. ...
Feel me straddle your hips.
Just lay there. ...
Hear me moan as your cock firmly
Stretch's me open.
Just lay there. ...
Im taking control of your cock.
Sshhh just lay there. ...
Watch me ride your iron throne.
As I squirt my cum down your cock
I scratch my nails deep into your chest.
As I lay there. ..
You start fucking me again
As I lay there. ...
Your cumming deep within me
As you know I am cumming again.
Written by Forgotten_Mom71 (Trisha)
Published 5th July 2016 5:49am
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http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/242929-just-lay-there/
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You watch me undress
Just lay there
You notice Im wearing your favorite color of panties
Just lay there
Watching my legs spread wide on each side of your shoulders
Just lay there
As I slide my bare bottom down your chest
Just lay there
Feel my nails scratch down your chest
Just lay there
Feel me straddle your groin
Just lay there
Hear my voice as you slowly open my tight slit
Just lay there
Im taking control of your iron sword
Just lay there
As I orgasm while dripping wet down your throne
I dig my nails deep into your chest
Sshh just lay there
You make love to me again
As I lay there
You get off deep inside me
As I lay there multi orgasms
overcome me
As we lay as lovers
forevermore
Trish. ...
Let me show you what you want.
Just lay there. ...
You watch me take off my clothes.
Just lay there. ...
While I take my purple panties off
Just lay there. ...
Watch me stretch my legs over your shoulders.
Just lay there. ...
Feel me slide my pussy down your chest.
Just lay there. ...
Please do not move.
Just lay there. ...
Feel my nails scratch down your body.
Just lay there. ...
Feel me straddle your hips.
Just lay there. ...
Hear me moan as your cock firmly
Stretch's me open.
Just lay there. ...
Im taking control of your cock.
Sshhh just lay there. ...
Watch me ride your iron throne.
As I squirt my cum down your cock
I scratch my nails deep into your chest.
As I lay there. ..
You start fucking me again
As I lay there. ...
Your cumming deep within me
As you know I am cumming again.
Written by Forgotten_Mom71 (Trisha)
Published 5th July 2016 5:49am
likes 8 reading list entries 3 comments 16 reads 635
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/242929-just-lay-there/
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
You watch me undress
Just lay there
You notice Im wearing your favorite color of panties
Just lay there
Watching my legs spread wide on each side of your shoulders
Just lay there
As I slide my bare bottom down your chest
Just lay there
Feel my nails scratch down your chest
Just lay there
Feel me straddle your groin
Just lay there
Hear my voice as you slowly open my tight slit
Just lay there
Im taking control of your iron sword
Just lay there
As I orgasm while dripping wet down your throne
I dig my nails deep into your chest
Sshh just lay there
You make love to me again
As I lay there
You get off deep inside me
As I lay there multi orgasms
overcome me
As we lay as lovers
forevermore
Trish. ...
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can we enter more than one poem?
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slowly i kiss his eyes
down to his cheeks
my lips move
and taste the sweets
on his lips
our tongue moves
like a sword inside
and make a real battle
we don't know who would won
my finger slides
and unzip her pants
and his manhood
stand like a knight
a knight who would fight
the fight we want tonight
the fight between two of us
the fight of making love
he spread my legs
and taste the glory inside
a yummy nectar
that you always loved
i'm begging you
come on top of me
spread my legs wide
and fuck me so hardly...
slowly i kiss his eyes
down to his cheeks
my lips move
and taste the sweets
on his lips
our tongue moves
like a sword inside
and make a real battle
we don't know who would won
my finger slides
and unzip her pants
and his manhood
stand like a knight
a knight who would fight
the fight we want tonight
the fight between two of us
the fight of making love
he spread my legs
and taste the glory inside
a yummy nectar
that you always loved
i'm begging you
come on top of me
spread my legs wide
and fuck me so hardly...
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Intimate Leisure
She lay on the bed , she was undressed
Hoping that he'd respond to her request.
Greeting her with kiss and embrace
Caressing breasts and her secret place
A close touch, a cry of joy
As he his manhood did deploy
Their bodies close as they can go
Enjoying the intimate feelings so
Erupting with a wild sensation
Joy, love and profound elation
He continued with the flow;
Repeated sensations made her glow
When at last he needed a rest
She put her toy to the test
Resulting in a deeper feeling
Both, by now, their senses reeling.
To conclude this personal deed
He deposits his male seed
They both agreed it was a pleasure
A good way to spend ones leisure
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/244631-sexual-ride/
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