Poetry competition CLOSED 21st March 2012 3:37pm
WINNER
Antarctica
Antarctica
RUNNERS-UP:
Scattered_Thoughts
and grasshopper
What do you REALLY know?
Anti-Gavity poem ( the beging is the end )
As the warmth of the anthracite subsided I am ashes. Cremated
Cartelized vessels nothing at all pours.
No longer seeing anything but darkness surround by for walls: a ceiling, and a grid.
I can not move for I am no longer as a whole.
As a puzzle; broken up and missing pieces.
I start steaming; frying but 11 hours I have to go.
I sit here all alone with a white sheet over my heart and soul.
I hear not what they say.
I only wondering if I'm dead.
The read my last rights this can not be true.
I was struggling to stay alive with every breath they gave.
The zapped me a few times I jumped.
Their was people everywhere.
Where am I? I do not know these people.
I did what I had to do.
I could not take this life any more.
I looked down it was such a far drop from the bridge.
I climbed up on the girder on the side.
I cry all the way to the bridge.
The hurt was too intense to take anymore.
I decided that I have to take myself in control.
I got in my car and thought to myself "self" I need to do this.
I came home pissed as hell, I can't take society anymore.
Everything went wrong today I thought.
Reviewing my day as I walked.
The bell summers hook let out:summer was here.
I worried and stared at the ticking hands.
I tap with my pencil all thru class.
Something was a miss already.
I woke up from a horrible dream.
9:30 time to go to bed.
Finished my homework..
As the warmth of the anthracite subsided I am ashes. Cremated
Cartelized vessels nothing at all pours.
No longer seeing anything but darkness surround by for walls: a ceiling, and a grid.
I can not move for I am no longer as a whole.
As a puzzle; broken up and missing pieces.
I start steaming; frying but 11 hours I have to go.
I sit here all alone with a white sheet over my heart and soul.
I hear not what they say.
I only wondering if I'm dead.
The read my last rights this can not be true.
I was struggling to stay alive with every breath they gave.
The zapped me a few times I jumped.
Their was people everywhere.
Where am I? I do not know these people.
I did what I had to do.
I could not take this life any more.
I looked down it was such a far drop from the bridge.
I climbed up on the girder on the side.
I cry all the way to the bridge.
The hurt was too intense to take anymore.
I decided that I have to take myself in control.
I got in my car and thought to myself "self" I need to do this.
I came home pissed as hell, I can't take society anymore.
Everything went wrong today I thought.
Reviewing my day as I walked.
The bell summers hook let out:summer was here.
I worried and stared at the ticking hands.
I tap with my pencil all thru class.
Something was a miss already.
I woke up from a horrible dream.
9:30 time to go to bed.
Finished my homework..
What i see is a person who's life sucks and then the commit siucude and go to hell. Am i right? there are soo many ways that you could read into this poem. can we have a hint? I mean we have homework to childbirth to alien abduction in Antartica. Everyone is all over the board. Requesting hint
Anonymous
I think it is about 2 or 3 things as well, one of them being and it being centered around-getting arrested??? Maybe I am Waaaay wrong, but I agree that it is well written. Peace x
Because you write about the bright lights and seeing the moon for the last time.. UFO coming! They abduct you then inject you with drugs.. Then you write about the rhythm.. I don't think i have to explain that. Aliens rape this person in this poem
