Poetry competition CLOSED 7th January 2012 6:56pm
WINNER
Scalpel_Rape
Scalpel_Rape
RUNNERS-UP:
diddi
and emo1
dark, angry peotry competion
Insane
Haunted of twisted thoughts with in my head
Turned inside out and backwards
Plugged up and trapped
in a revolution started by myself
Tortured by my own presence
Destroyed visions of reconciliation
unites with all that lies inside
Poisoned with corrupted solitude
Left alone to fight the insanity
dwelling upon the anguish
and misery
The war will never end
Victory will never prevail
Then end of time is the only escape
Haunted of twisted thoughts with in my head
Turned inside out and backwards
Plugged up and trapped
in a revolution started by myself
Tortured by my own presence
Destroyed visions of reconciliation
unites with all that lies inside
Poisoned with corrupted solitude
Left alone to fight the insanity
dwelling upon the anguish
and misery
The war will never end
Victory will never prevail
Then end of time is the only escape
Anonymous
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Anonymous
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raorrick said:You're right. Thank you for the feed back. I hope to get better in time. Everyone here is an inspiration.
I think this piece is good , also a good thing for writing is the confidence to share it , once you do that as long as someone doesn't unfairly pull it to bits it gets easier each time and of course the positive comments spur you on , as sharing your minds eye as such isn't always easy , especially when it's open for criticism this is well done and I hope to read a lot more of your writings , you have it going on and that should be utilised to all it's potential .
I think this piece is good , also a good thing for writing is the confidence to share it , once you do that as long as someone doesn't unfairly pull it to bits it gets easier each time and of course the positive comments spur you on , as sharing your minds eye as such isn't always easy , especially when it's open for criticism this is well done and I hope to read a lot more of your writings , you have it going on and that should be utilised to all it's potential .
diddi said:[quote-55301-raorrick]You're right. Thank you for the feed back. I hope to get better in time. Everyone here is an inspiration.
I think this piece is good , also a good thing for writing is the confidence to share it , once you do that as long as someone doesn't unfairly pull it to bits it gets easier each time and of course the positive comments spur you on , as sharing your minds eye as such isn't always easy , especially when it's open for criticism this is well done and I hope to read a lot more of your writings , you have it going on and that should be utilised to all it's potential .[/quote]
I struggle expressing gratitude without sounding cliche or cheesy, but I am very grateful for your message. Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and then to send encouragement. It is very thoughtful of you and it means a lot.
I think this piece is good , also a good thing for writing is the confidence to share it , once you do that as long as someone doesn't unfairly pull it to bits it gets easier each time and of course the positive comments spur you on , as sharing your minds eye as such isn't always easy , especially when it's open for criticism this is well done and I hope to read a lot more of your writings , you have it going on and that should be utilised to all it's potential .[/quote]
I struggle expressing gratitude without sounding cliche or cheesy, but I am very grateful for your message. Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and then to send encouragement. It is very thoughtful of you and it means a lot.
raorrick said:[quote-55305-diddi][quote-55301-raorrick]You're right. Thank you for the feed back. I hope to get better in time. Everyone here is an inspiration.
I think this piece is good , also a good thing for writing is the confidence to share it , once you do that as long as someone doesn't unfairly pull it to bits it gets easier each time and of course the positive comments spur you on , as sharing your minds eye as such isn't always easy , especially when it's open for criticism this is well done and I hope to read a lot more of your writings , you have it going on and that should be utilised to all it's potential .[/quote]
I struggle expressing gratitude without sounding cliche or cheesy, but I am very grateful for your message. Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and then to send encouragement. It is very thoughtful of you and it means a lot. [/quote]
no problem at all your welcome :)
I think this piece is good , also a good thing for writing is the confidence to share it , once you do that as long as someone doesn't unfairly pull it to bits it gets easier each time and of course the positive comments spur you on , as sharing your minds eye as such isn't always easy , especially when it's open for criticism this is well done and I hope to read a lot more of your writings , you have it going on and that should be utilised to all it's potential .[/quote]
I struggle expressing gratitude without sounding cliche or cheesy, but I am very grateful for your message. Thank you for taking the time to read my piece and then to send encouragement. It is very thoughtful of you and it means a lot. [/quote]
no problem at all your welcome :)
Goodnight World (SP Summerscales)
The ferris wheel
is in black and white
I can feel
the air is tight
as it turns
under a solar eclipse
that still burns
now the day is night .
Slow motion sounds
echoes of a fist
that pounds
lips gently kiss
goodnight to a done sound
were all dead
hello hell hounds
hydrated heads
implode to a new found
earthen beds uproot the
soil of black
as bones walk around
into shape they crack
judgement day
is abound
there is no way
of ever going back
The ferris wheel
is in black and white
I can feel
the air is tight
as it turns
under a solar eclipse
that still burns
now the day is night .
Slow motion sounds
echoes of a fist
that pounds
lips gently kiss
goodnight to a done sound
were all dead
hello hell hounds
hydrated heads
implode to a new found
earthen beds uproot the
soil of black
as bones walk around
into shape they crack
judgement day
is abound
there is no way
of ever going back
Anonymous
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thanks heheh
here's a youtube link to that poem if want to see 
http://youtu.be/EV35ws-s38s
thanks heheh
here's a youtube link to that poem if want to see http://youtu.be/EV35ws-s38s
Anonymous
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torture anyone?
strap you in.
dont want you to run away.
why gag you?
i like to hear you scream.
start with the feet.
ripping out each toe nail,
one by one they must come out.
break the bones.
take a sledgehammer to you,
tibia and fibula shattered,
bone fragments sticking out of you flesh.
i take a drill and start in on you knee.
drilling a whole strait through.
oh your femur is next!
what fun this shall be,
its the strongest bone in your body.
i take my knife and start in,
just little cuts for now.
i take a hammer and beat it,
breaking it in so many spots.
the pelvis.
i take a cinder block and drop it on you.
i hear the pleasing crushing sound,
you ribs are next,
i must be careful with these,
i wouldn't want to crush you heart just yet.
so i take a screw driver and with the dull end i start in.
one be one they snap and break.
your arms i break them with my hands.
i snap then like a twig.
just snap them over my knee.
the best part.
your skull. oh what to do with it.
how should i break it?
i know i have the perfect plan.
i shall bash it against the wall like you deserve,
it what you caused me to do so many nights.
i cant sleep while your still alive.
so lets have some fun shall we.
strap you in.
dont want you to run away.
why gag you?
i like to hear you scream.
start with the feet.
ripping out each toe nail,
one by one they must come out.
break the bones.
take a sledgehammer to you,
tibia and fibula shattered,
bone fragments sticking out of you flesh.
i take a drill and start in on you knee.
drilling a whole strait through.
oh your femur is next!
what fun this shall be,
its the strongest bone in your body.
i take my knife and start in,
just little cuts for now.
i take a hammer and beat it,
breaking it in so many spots.
the pelvis.
i take a cinder block and drop it on you.
i hear the pleasing crushing sound,
you ribs are next,
i must be careful with these,
i wouldn't want to crush you heart just yet.
so i take a screw driver and with the dull end i start in.
one be one they snap and break.
your arms i break them with my hands.
i snap then like a twig.
just snap them over my knee.
the best part.
your skull. oh what to do with it.
how should i break it?
i know i have the perfect plan.
i shall bash it against the wall like you deserve,
it what you caused me to do so many nights.
i cant sleep while your still alive.
so lets have some fun shall we.
