what makes an erotic poem erotic?
Ahavati
Tams
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Tams
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Seduced
I don't apologize that I'm not
I've no desire to surrender
my clean, unmarked skin
or eyes the color of water
during the rainy season
I'm not interested in releasing
Godiva hair from its porcelain clasp
like a bolt of Tatsumura silk
spreading flaxen over our hips
It doesn't concern me, time
falling through the hourglass
of shape, granules of minutes
shortening remaining days
I'm not desperate to submit-
guide an inseam of inches
with tailored fingers hoping
for a perfectly fitted match
Or lounge any given moment
the dull aching tenderness
of an internally inflicted bruise
healing naturally with rest
Nor can I be tempted, 'cept
by the Poem, its hardened
form masterfully critiqued
structured verbs, swollen nouns
plugging weak leaks tightly with
personifuckation, metaphors
of double meaning, dangling
against moist lips of thought
an element just beyond physical
grasp of my brain's plump hemispheres
spread wide, willing to accommodate
the most engorged Poetry ever revised
Enlarged imagery, fluidly alive between
my chambers, demoralizing syllabic
stress and iambic pentameter
for Free, (un)imaginable Verse
So, no; I'm not sorry to disappoint
your expectations with flippancy
over your obvious transparency
but you've confused my politeness-
my smile with a woman who'll succumb
to your desires with just one wink-
subservient to the cat-o-nine tails
cliché of your mundane vocabulary
Here's a clue - solitude is my Lover
contains more passion in one finger
than your entire being could muster;
so open a book; study poetry
Master the art of Love;
put on a clean shirt, tuck it in
Revere women with respect
then, though I'll never promise
perhaps. . . I'll pay attention
~
I've no desire to surrender
my clean, unmarked skin
or eyes the color of water
during the rainy season
I'm not interested in releasing
Godiva hair from its porcelain clasp
like a bolt of Tatsumura silk
spreading flaxen over our hips
It doesn't concern me, time
falling through the hourglass
of shape, granules of minutes
shortening remaining days
I'm not desperate to submit-
guide an inseam of inches
with tailored fingers hoping
for a perfectly fitted match
Or lounge any given moment
the dull aching tenderness
of an internally inflicted bruise
healing naturally with rest
Nor can I be tempted, 'cept
by the Poem, its hardened
form masterfully critiqued
structured verbs, swollen nouns
plugging weak leaks tightly with
personifuckation, metaphors
of double meaning, dangling
against moist lips of thought
an element just beyond physical
grasp of my brain's plump hemispheres
spread wide, willing to accommodate
the most engorged Poetry ever revised
Enlarged imagery, fluidly alive between
my chambers, demoralizing syllabic
stress and iambic pentameter
for Free, (un)imaginable Verse
So, no; I'm not sorry to disappoint
your expectations with flippancy
over your obvious transparency
but you've confused my politeness-
my smile with a woman who'll succumb
to your desires with just one wink-
subservient to the cat-o-nine tails
cliché of your mundane vocabulary
Here's a clue - solitude is my Lover
contains more passion in one finger
than your entire being could muster;
so open a book; study poetry
Master the art of Love;
put on a clean shirt, tuck it in
Revere women with respect
then, though I'll never promise
perhaps. . . I'll pay attention
~
Written by Ahavati
(Tams)
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Subtle and tasteful innuendo clothed in metaphor.
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For me the seperation is intensity...
Pornography seems to be immediate gratification a ways of getting to the meat and potatoes
The erotic has a fuller deeper connection to emotional substructures that dwell between human beings;
A flash art description of sex is just that
If I can envision the humanity of the characters and recognize myself inn them I can fully invest in the sexual and emotional development within the poem.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/358577-camp-with-me-and-count-the-stars/
Pornography seems to be immediate gratification a ways of getting to the meat and potatoes
The erotic has a fuller deeper connection to emotional substructures that dwell between human beings;
A flash art description of sex is just that
If I can envision the humanity of the characters and recognize myself inn them I can fully invest in the sexual and emotional development within the poem.
https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/358577-camp-with-me-and-count-the-stars/
PandoraUnleashed
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Anonymous said:<< post removed >>
Omgoodness...
I'm anything but a true poet, but have goals set for more elegance & form... especially with sonnets. At this point, I just "write". All any of us can do, is to keep striving for better. I've came a long way myself & do put my soul into though. For some, I wonder if they just slap the nastiest of words together without any thought. I know I'm the furthest from brilliancy, but 3/4 of that genre gets a facepalm with a big gasp out of me. 😶 Some pieces set up a motel room in the comment section too. Gag me.. 😏
Omgoodness...
I'm anything but a true poet, but have goals set for more elegance & form... especially with sonnets. At this point, I just "write". All any of us can do, is to keep striving for better. I've came a long way myself & do put my soul into though. For some, I wonder if they just slap the nastiest of words together without any thought. I know I'm the furthest from brilliancy, but 3/4 of that genre gets a facepalm with a big gasp out of me. 😶 Some pieces set up a motel room in the comment section too. Gag me.. 😏
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Anonymous said:<< post removed >>
A lot of people who attend DUP are here to socialize, using poetry as the catalyst.
And the increased viewings may be attributed to offsite factors, such as the Erotic Category being a wide open door to non-members and bots from other sites. DUP ranks incredibly well for searches for erotic poetry in Google.
A lot of people who attend DUP are here to socialize, using poetry as the catalyst.
And the increased viewings may be attributed to offsite factors, such as the Erotic Category being a wide open door to non-members and bots from other sites. DUP ranks incredibly well for searches for erotic poetry in Google.
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https://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/202401-blonde-widow/
A little flash of skin goes a long way.
A little flash of skin goes a long way.
greyblueyellow
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If I do a YouTube video called the meaning of love I might get 40 views if I call it vagina revealed I will get 1000 views
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greyblueyellow said:If I do a YouTube video called the meaning of love I might get 40 views if I call it vagina revealed I will get 1000 views
That doesn't really mean anything considering there are more videos about Love on YouTube than videos with content of an adult nature.
YouTube on the other hand does not cater to adult content. So there is far less of it in comparison. Less competition amongst video posters equals increased views for each video.
That doesn't really mean anything considering there are more videos about Love on YouTube than videos with content of an adult nature.
YouTube on the other hand does not cater to adult content. So there is far less of it in comparison. Less competition amongst video posters equals increased views for each video.
greyblueyellow
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When I put a video of me reading a poem on bitchute and I use a picture of me for the cover picture I may get 30 views if I put the same video with a cover picture of a really good looking teenage girls face I will get 300 views explain it
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greyblueyellow said:When I put a video of me reading a poem on bitchute and I use a picture of me for the cover picture I may get 30 views if I put the same video with a cover picture of a really good looking teenage girls face I will get 300 views explain it
Well, first you have to explain what Bitchute is and second, provide an accurate assessment of its participants as an audience.
Otherwise, I could just talk out of my ass and say you are ugly and scaring people away.
You also might want to explain what any of this has to do with erotic and pornographic poetry.
It sounds to me like you are trying to make a statement about society in general in regards to social preferences or behaviors.
Perhaps you might want to consider starting a New Thread about who is likely to get more views on their poetry on planet Earth in scenarios where an avatar is provided.
Well, first you have to explain what Bitchute is and second, provide an accurate assessment of its participants as an audience.
Otherwise, I could just talk out of my ass and say you are ugly and scaring people away.
You also might want to explain what any of this has to do with erotic and pornographic poetry.
It sounds to me like you are trying to make a statement about society in general in regards to social preferences or behaviors.
Perhaps you might want to consider starting a New Thread about who is likely to get more views on their poetry on planet Earth in scenarios where an avatar is provided.
New Ground
It was soft
like the underbelly of
a Beautiful Slug
His fingertips
slide over her
epidermal luster white
blazing a trail
only taking his time
to do it
She writhed and moaned
as another trail
felt from toes to the nape
of her neck
She knew NO more
stop
for he still had to
roll her over
and begin
anew.
like the underbelly of
a Beautiful Slug
His fingertips
slide over her
epidermal luster white
blazing a trail
only taking his time
to do it
She writhed and moaned
as another trail
felt from toes to the nape
of her neck
She knew NO more
stop
for he still had to
roll her over
and begin
anew.
Written by Tallen
(earth_empath)
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i am pretty certain i did not slate this spill for the Erotic theme and either a Mod or Reader did
Lots of spills that i post i don't think belongs. So it must be in the eye of the reader?
Lots of spills that i post i don't think belongs. So it must be in the eye of the reader?
greyblueyellow
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my videos have no competition - they are simply the best - yet the viewing figures are abysmal
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Some dude said something or other about this or that - and I know it happened. I accept that. However - it is a reality that click bait exists due to it's efficacy. As to Eroticism - the word of my moment is - Novelty. We seek it in everything - but we do not know what it is.
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greyblueyellow said:my videos have no competition - they are simply the best - yet the viewing figures are abysmalperhaps others do not share your opinion
of course click-bait exists
if you are happy with the quality of your videos/writing then there's no point trying to change it to get more views, nor any point bemoaning the fact some people prefer other material over yours.
some like your work? then they like it for what it is (cap'n obvious)
of course click-bait exists
if you are happy with the quality of your videos/writing then there's no point trying to change it to get more views, nor any point bemoaning the fact some people prefer other material over yours.
some like your work? then they like it for what it is (cap'n obvious)