Poetry competition CLOSED 16th January 2016 8:42pm
WINNER
_shadoe_ (yiyi)
_shadoe_ (yiyi)
WINNER
Gahddess_Worship (Osomajestuoso)
Gahddess_Worship (Osomajestuoso)
Contrastive haiku
BoFantastic said:A Woman Is A Lion That Needs To Be Set Free
Work.
her booty hole stank
up the room. she don't use soap,
stank skank ass perfume.
Play.
she kneels to pray. her
mouth wrapped around my bible.
I baptized her thrice.
Thanks for your entry, BoFantastic! I like it a lot but have to point out that the rules only allow COLLABORATIONS! Please get yourself a partner and make him/her contribute to your entry and edit it fitting the rules. Thank you!
Work.
her booty hole stank
up the room. she don't use soap,
stank skank ass perfume.
Play.
she kneels to pray. her
mouth wrapped around my bible.
I baptized her thrice.
Thanks for your entry, BoFantastic! I like it a lot but have to point out that the rules only allow COLLABORATIONS! Please get yourself a partner and make him/her contribute to your entry and edit it fitting the rules. Thank you!
Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
(a Hepcat61 & Jade-Pandora collaboration)
Buddha
the one who sees all
namu amida butsu
crane on utmost branch
(geoff)
only the tree sees
the crane standing in its hair
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Dharma
emptied to be filled
namu amida butsu
sun in morning fog
(geoff)
morning fog muting
hiding day's new sun in vain
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Sangha
encompassing all
namu amida butsu
a wind in wheat fields
(geoff)
prayer flags' wing'd message
sending proof that wind exists
nen nen fu ri shin
. (jade)
http://i48.photobucket.com/albums/f248/jadepandora/nepal_prayer_flags%20FINAL%20335%20x%20471.png
Namu Amida Butsu means "Total reliance upon the compassion of Amida Buddha."
Nen Nen Fu Ri Shin means "Thought after thought are not separate from mind."
(a Hepcat61 & Jade-Pandora collaboration)
Buddha
the one who sees all
namu amida butsu
crane on utmost branch
(geoff)
only the tree sees
the crane standing in its hair
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Dharma
emptied to be filled
namu amida butsu
sun in morning fog
(geoff)
morning fog muting
hiding day's new sun in vain
nen nen fu ri shin
(jade)
Sangha
encompassing all
namu amida butsu
a wind in wheat fields
(geoff)
prayer flags' wing'd message
sending proof that wind exists
nen nen fu ri shin
. (jade)
http://i48.photobucket.com/albums/f248/jadepandora/nepal_prayer_flags%20FINAL%20335%20x%20471.png
Namu Amida Butsu means "Total reliance upon the compassion of Amida Buddha."
Nen Nen Fu Ri Shin means "Thought after thought are not separate from mind."
Chiyo said:Thank you, Jade, for accepting our suggestion!
I'm happy with that solution and hope you and Geoff don't mind since it's fair for every participant this way!
Thanks again for all the great entries so far!
Ahh, sweet Chi, we didn't mind at all, and wanted to do the right thing by the rules & you & the others participating, all along. Now all is back on track! 💗😄👌
I'm happy with that solution and hope you and Geoff don't mind since it's fair for every participant this way!
Thanks again for all the great entries so far!
Ahh, sweet Chi, we didn't mind at all, and wanted to do the right thing by the rules & you & the others participating, all along. Now all is back on track! 💗😄👌
Dear contributers to the competition Contrastive Haiku, we now have the results from the jury, consisting of
Vee, LobodeSanPedro, applepie77 and Miss Chi.
Each of the jurors had to fill in her or his opinion in form of points from 1-10 according to the predefined criteria, using a uniform spreadsheet. Furthermore each of the jurors made a nice little statement on one of her or his favourite team or poem. As we only had two teams which entered the competition the decisions made were both manageable as to the small number of entries and difficult because of the small number of entries .
I’d like to thank both teams, shadoe and Gahddess_Worship and Jade-Pandora and Geoff for entering their elaborate and profound haiku.
Jade, unfortunately we couldn’t accept your first entry because it was way too long and it would have been unfair to allow it in the comp. Because it is a great piece, emanating sex and humour at the same time I asked you to leave it in so that people can enjoy it. Thank you, Jade!
I enjoyed the range and the diversity of themes shadoe’s and G_W’s entries showed. They fulfilled every criteria of contrastive haiku, which was the task. They even left out the headline since there are no headlines intended for haiku, my fault that I put it on the list of rules. Though this criteria didn’t influence the judging. Next time I host a comp I’ll think more about it in advance, this one wasn’t well thought-out. I’d like to apologize for it.
What I liked about Jade’s and Geoff’s entry was the most classical approach to haiku. I loved the language and the Japanese input along with the translation. Each haiku was elegantly presented!
BoFantastic, I’m sorry you didn’t make it into the comp since you haven’t presented your entry collaborating with a partner. Unfortunately you decided not to react to my request to look for a pal. That’s a pity.
So now we’re going to approach the outcome of this competition. The winners are:
Shadoe and Gahddess_ Worship = 462 points. (I asked for a second trophy for G_W. We'll see if it works!)
Jade-Pandora and Geoff achieved 370 points.
Congratulations! Thank you everyone for participating! It was an entire pleasure for me!
I also like to thank my wonderful jurors for their love for poetry and for their being considerate and fair.
The following statements are what they wanted you to know about the reasons for their decisions:
Vee
Shadoe/Gw..2nd entry:
It captures perfectly the essence of a true haiku; nature with metaphorical suggestion to human emotions. The first part (shadoe) sets the stage with beautiful gentle strokes and the second verse (GW) weaves exquisite imagery transforming the notes into timeless wonder.
The collaboration comes across effortless with ease just as Haiku is in traditional sense, simple and elegant. The contrast between seasons and imagery is flawless giving the perfect balance in an unrefined way; A Masterpiece!
applepie77
Well, it's been a very close decision, but I think the oscar goes to.....
"bound and suspended
she weeps, stripped down to the soul
by nine tailed kisses
[shadoe]
*
Cupping swollen breasts
sweet moans sing through smiling lips
riding passion's wave
[Gahddess Worship]"!!!
This is a beautiful example of "bad vs. vanilla".
The second place is dedicated to Jade-Pandora and hepcat61 with their
Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
(a Hepcat61 & Jade-Pandora collaboration)
Lobo:
What I enjoyed most about the duo shadoe & Gahddess_Worship: Firstly, I like the fact they explored different topics with each offering, from erotica, to the eternal dance of winter. The writers made a noted effort to provide a decided contrast within each piece while maintaining a continuity that made it all work. My personal favorite was their piece on the curtain call of summer in contrast to winter on center stage. Wonderful metaphorical references that made me feel these seasonal performances. Bravo! My only note for change: the second verse doesn't need capitalization, as most haiku don't, and it would add for continuity with the first.
Vee, LobodeSanPedro, applepie77 and Miss Chi.
Each of the jurors had to fill in her or his opinion in form of points from 1-10 according to the predefined criteria, using a uniform spreadsheet. Furthermore each of the jurors made a nice little statement on one of her or his favourite team or poem. As we only had two teams which entered the competition the decisions made were both manageable as to the small number of entries and difficult because of the small number of entries .
I’d like to thank both teams, shadoe and Gahddess_Worship and Jade-Pandora and Geoff for entering their elaborate and profound haiku.
Jade, unfortunately we couldn’t accept your first entry because it was way too long and it would have been unfair to allow it in the comp. Because it is a great piece, emanating sex and humour at the same time I asked you to leave it in so that people can enjoy it. Thank you, Jade!
I enjoyed the range and the diversity of themes shadoe’s and G_W’s entries showed. They fulfilled every criteria of contrastive haiku, which was the task. They even left out the headline since there are no headlines intended for haiku, my fault that I put it on the list of rules. Though this criteria didn’t influence the judging. Next time I host a comp I’ll think more about it in advance, this one wasn’t well thought-out. I’d like to apologize for it.
What I liked about Jade’s and Geoff’s entry was the most classical approach to haiku. I loved the language and the Japanese input along with the translation. Each haiku was elegantly presented!
BoFantastic, I’m sorry you didn’t make it into the comp since you haven’t presented your entry collaborating with a partner. Unfortunately you decided not to react to my request to look for a pal. That’s a pity.
So now we’re going to approach the outcome of this competition. The winners are:
Shadoe and Gahddess_ Worship = 462 points. (I asked for a second trophy for G_W. We'll see if it works!)
Jade-Pandora and Geoff achieved 370 points.
Congratulations! Thank you everyone for participating! It was an entire pleasure for me!
I also like to thank my wonderful jurors for their love for poetry and for their being considerate and fair.
The following statements are what they wanted you to know about the reasons for their decisions:
Vee
Shadoe/Gw..2nd entry:
It captures perfectly the essence of a true haiku; nature with metaphorical suggestion to human emotions. The first part (shadoe) sets the stage with beautiful gentle strokes and the second verse (GW) weaves exquisite imagery transforming the notes into timeless wonder.
The collaboration comes across effortless with ease just as Haiku is in traditional sense, simple and elegant. The contrast between seasons and imagery is flawless giving the perfect balance in an unrefined way; A Masterpiece!
applepie77
Well, it's been a very close decision, but I think the oscar goes to.....
"bound and suspended
she weeps, stripped down to the soul
by nine tailed kisses
[shadoe]
*
Cupping swollen breasts
sweet moans sing through smiling lips
riding passion's wave
[Gahddess Worship]"!!!
This is a beautiful example of "bad vs. vanilla".
The second place is dedicated to Jade-Pandora and hepcat61 with their
Haiku/Senryu Renga: CHANTINGS
(a Hepcat61 & Jade-Pandora collaboration)
Lobo:
What I enjoyed most about the duo shadoe & Gahddess_Worship: Firstly, I like the fact they explored different topics with each offering, from erotica, to the eternal dance of winter. The writers made a noted effort to provide a decided contrast within each piece while maintaining a continuity that made it all work. My personal favorite was their piece on the curtain call of summer in contrast to winter on center stage. Wonderful metaphorical references that made me feel these seasonal performances. Bravo! My only note for change: the second verse doesn't need capitalization, as most haiku don't, and it would add for continuity with the first.
miss chi, thank you for being such a gracious hostess...
... extending gratitude to the judges for their time & critiques
this was truly humbling, as miss jade & mister cat are formidable poets [&] i personally loved their entry
danke [again]
... extending gratitude to the judges for their time & critiques
this was truly humbling, as miss jade & mister cat are formidable poets [&] i personally loved their entry
danke [again]
Miss Chi, thank you so much for this marvelous comp! I am honored to to stand in the same grove with these old growth poets. The only thing missing is a piece from you "La reina de Haiku." I always enjoy writing with Katja. But I'll admit to a little laziness. She always leads off...I am a good cavalier...I always let the prima ballerina lead :)
