Drugs Poems Seeking Honest Critique
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Poetry about drug use and addiction (alcohol, medication and recreational drugs)
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Bryan Gray
Bryan Gray
Poem Published
27th Aug 2024 3:22am
27th Aug 2024 3:22am
the last ambulance
end of eyes
and of a dusk drawl
civil twilight for hair
sodium rain
when a day is done
destroyer in vein
you're not dead
but you teach me
how to mourn your passing
one ambulance
at a time
and of a dusk drawl
civil twilight for hair
sodium rain
when a day is done
destroyer in vein
you're not dead
but you teach me
how to mourn your passing
one ambulance
at a time
#addiction
#alcohol
68 reads
3 Comments
RyanBlackborough
Poem Published
9th Sep 2024 9:05pm
9th Sep 2024 9:05pm
Pin cushion
Success is drawing blood.
Follow in my tracks.
There's no rush.
I'm not missing.
Just off the straight and narrow.
Open to facilitate.
Steadfast to invigorate.
There are drawbacks
But I take the plunge.
Time passed as pastime.
Days blend differently.
Its not my daily grind.
But it helps to get by.
Follow in my tracks.
There's no rush.
I'm not missing.
Just off the straight and narrow.
Open to facilitate.
Steadfast to invigorate.
There are drawbacks
But I take the plunge.
Time passed as pastime.
Days blend differently.
Its not my daily grind.
But it helps to get by.
#drugs
50 reads
6 Comments
slipalong
Poem Published
7th Sep 2024 8:31pm
7th Sep 2024 8:31pm
Hope that help will come?
Tap left on, of self thats drained
a mesh of scars to dull the pain
to fool yourself and feel the numb
a fading dream that help will come!
Feel winter chill in summers heat
as black clouds o`r the mind do creep
I fight and fight, but just succumb
and prey alone that help will come
Wild dragon lives within my veins
when exatacy is short attained
the dollar bill, its laughs in fun
my urgent screams that help will come
Rocket fire to a distopian abyss
caverns and maze is where I now exist
who`ll throw a rope...
a mesh of scars to dull the pain
to fool yourself and feel the numb
a fading dream that help will come!
Feel winter chill in summers heat
as black clouds o`r the mind do creep
I fight and fight, but just succumb
and prey alone that help will come
Wild dragon lives within my veins
when exatacy is short attained
the dollar bill, its laughs in fun
my urgent screams that help will come
Rocket fire to a distopian abyss
caverns and maze is where I now exist
who`ll throw a rope...
#addiction
55 reads
0 Comments
Nowhere_
HaleyJade
HaleyJade
Poem Published
4th Sep 2024 1:48pm
4th Sep 2024 1:48pm
Shooting for the scars
Discusted by my self
Mirrors make me cringe
Cant stand my own reflection
So I left on a binge.
Suspended in a void
breaking the rules
Yet I just keep pushing
Disappearing from view
I’ve been foolish this far.
Deceit creeping among shadows,
bitterness and toxicity
Leading my way through the shallows
Now completely alone.
Trapped by myself in this uninhabitable zone
The longer I’m here, despair finds me faster. As if from nowhere, stopping abruptly in place.
A Sitting duck, rudely splashed in the face,...
Mirrors make me cringe
Cant stand my own reflection
So I left on a binge.
Suspended in a void
breaking the rules
Yet I just keep pushing
Disappearing from view
I’ve been foolish this far.
Deceit creeping among shadows,
bitterness and toxicity
Leading my way through the shallows
Now completely alone.
Trapped by myself in this uninhabitable zone
The longer I’m here, despair finds me faster. As if from nowhere, stopping abruptly in place.
A Sitting duck, rudely splashed in the face,...
#addiction
#drugs
#heroin #temptation
#heroin #temptation
86 reads
0 Comments
Nil
Poem Published
1st Sep 2024 6:19pm
1st Sep 2024 6:19pm
Being Comatose
#apathy
#boredom
#frustration
35 reads
1 Comment
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
23rd Aug 2024 11:56am
23rd Aug 2024 11:56am
Take a trip
Birds swim
Fish fly
Reptiles talk
Insects cry
The sun is black
Fire is chill
Humans have respect
Mind altering pills
Fish fly
Reptiles talk
Insects cry
The sun is black
Fire is chill
Humans have respect
Mind altering pills
#drugs
#rhyming
#satirical
106 reads
6 Comments
ClovenTongue34
Poem Published
23rd Aug 2024 6:48am
23rd Aug 2024 6:48am
Exploitation
What are our sins but practice for betrayal
When the grass is always greener where it’s septic
Following in broken patterns like trying to reinvent the wreckage
Innovating evils of the ways we’re duped to entice
Mind platform to a thousand thoughts
Sex sells but the fantasy is overpriced
Dreaming in technicolor nightmares
Charming monsters conceal their scare
Enchanted by the beauty at the surface
The void entreats eyes gazing into darkness with a blank stare
Mind canvas to shades and the messes made
Perception the...
When the grass is always greener where it’s septic
Following in broken patterns like trying to reinvent the wreckage
Innovating evils of the ways we’re duped to entice
Mind platform to a thousand thoughts
Sex sells but the fantasy is overpriced
Dreaming in technicolor nightmares
Charming monsters conceal their scare
Enchanted by the beauty at the surface
The void entreats eyes gazing into darkness with a blank stare
Mind canvas to shades and the messes made
Perception the...
#addiction
#corruption
#LifeStruggles
#porn
#sex
115 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
12th Aug 2024 11:59pm
12th Aug 2024 11:59pm
High School Prostitute
#abuse
#DomesticViolence
#drugs
#sex
#teens
66 reads
4 Comments
Chere-Rene13
Poem Published
12th Aug 2024 11:43pm
12th Aug 2024 11:43pm
Residue of Substance
A ziplock bag presence crystal gems...A paradox of hidden. Curiosity questioning this novelty in hand. A war of personal choice. Not claiming pity. Self-destruction, free will of decision, fortitude I gave. Decorate is my tombstone heart, a veteran standing in his grave. Cold rains slashing old age. Knowing I the enemy novice of once young...Must pay the dues to earn the death of a fool. Dirge is the sadden hum that rains. For cold hail is the bullets to even karamics score.
#dark
#emptiness
116 reads
4 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
12th Aug 2024 11:41am
12th Aug 2024 11:41am
Deprieved Fiend
Ghetto calling
So hungry
So thirsty
So tired
On fire
Calling your name
Rancid stench
Glass shard womb
The atmosphere suffocates
The voices
The fear
Monkey climbing up your leg
If the shoe fits, curl up and die in it
So hungry
So thirsty
So tired
On fire
Calling your name
Rancid stench
Glass shard womb
The atmosphere suffocates
The voices
The fear
Monkey climbing up your leg
If the shoe fits, curl up and die in it
#addiction
#poverty
#support
135 reads
8 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
10th Aug 2024 8:57pm
10th Aug 2024 8:57pm
Moving Still
Their cars were motionless
Their home was drab
Their intensity was addiction
They once tried going to rehab
They failed miserably
Handling it with no care
Their appearance was alarming
Entering their house was extremely rare
Their sex was frustrating
Both were failing
He was dry & She was limp
Their health was ailing
Reality was a nightmare
Death surrounds their vision
The Grim Reaper is watching
Motionless people can create a collision
Their home was drab
Their intensity was addiction
They once tried going to rehab
They failed miserably
Handling it with no care
Their appearance was alarming
Entering their house was extremely rare
Their sex was frustrating
Both were failing
He was dry & She was limp
Their health was ailing
Reality was a nightmare
Death surrounds their vision
The Grim Reaper is watching
Motionless people can create a collision
#addiction
#dark
#death
#emptiness
#rhyming
86 reads
8 Comments
ExercisingDemons
Poem Published
9th Aug 2024 6:45pm
9th Aug 2024 6:45pm
Bottling Woe Is Me
Bottoms of bottles are mainly saliva
since my soul drips as bits
like passing, shattering ships steered towards
poison aiming to kill inside ya,
or rather inside of me
My wounds too wet to be seen bleeding,
my throat too stretched
to be busy
screening
out
that elixir
of upset, I'm wrecked
by
those 26 ounce pillars ...
since my soul drips as bits
like passing, shattering ships steered towards
poison aiming to kill inside ya,
or rather inside of me
My wounds too wet to be seen bleeding,
my throat too stretched
to be busy
screening
out
that elixir
of upset, I'm wrecked
by
those 26 ounce pillars ...
#alcohol
#LifeCycle
122 reads
2 Comments
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