Short Story Seeking Honest Critique
#ShortStory
My thoughts as a writer
Ideas and thoughts travel through the ocean
They dry up when they reach the shore
Next time I'll bottle them up
On sale at the nearest grocery store
There's no truth on what is revealed
How many times can I say it's fiction
My stories are as real as our identities
Elaborate hoaxes without restriction
Many are self absorbed
Some looking for relief
I do this to provoke & instigate
Surprise & horrify is my belief
A completed story
It's a jab & punch right to your face
Next time you...
They dry up when they reach the shore
Next time I'll bottle them up
On sale at the nearest grocery store
There's no truth on what is revealed
How many times can I say it's fiction
My stories are as real as our identities
Elaborate hoaxes without restriction
Many are self absorbed
Some looking for relief
I do this to provoke & instigate
Surprise & horrify is my belief
A completed story
It's a jab & punch right to your face
Next time you...
#fiction
#LifeAsAWriter
#nonfiction #ShortStory
#nonfiction #ShortStory
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Spaced Out & Abused (Part 2)
I get dressed
She lays there staring at me
She asks where I’m going
I don’t reply
I pull back my leg and kick her squarely in the ribs
She screams
Her hands cover the area I just kicked
Her legs draw up into the fetal position
I kick her in the side of the head
Feels like dog-meat under my boot
She is moaning now
Sounds like stifled sobs, sounds like a wounded animal
Dumb animal pain
I am seeing bright blue flashes in front of my eyes
I start kicking her again and again
I’m floating
I’m not in the room anymore ...
She lays there staring at me
She asks where I’m going
I don’t reply
I pull back my leg and kick her squarely in the ribs
She screams
Her hands cover the area I just kicked
Her legs draw up into the fetal position
I kick her in the side of the head
Feels like dog-meat under my boot
She is moaning now
Sounds like stifled sobs, sounds like a wounded animal
Dumb animal pain
I am seeing bright blue flashes in front of my eyes
I start kicking her again and again
I’m floating
I’m not in the room anymore ...
#abuse
#despair
#drugs
#ShortStory
#violence
63 reads
6 Comments
Antisocial
I like to be around you for about 24 to 48 hours and then I get sick of you
I don't like it when you tell me that you like me and want to spend more time with me
I keep my distance
On a certain level, you make me sick
Even your smell repels me
You see how I am on the third day
I don't want to know anything about your life
I like the girls the others don't touch
The ones that get called stupid
They're not as stupid as you might think
They know me
They know I'm a loner
They know why I come around
They know I'm only good for one...
I don't like it when you tell me that you like me and want to spend more time with me
I keep my distance
On a certain level, you make me sick
Even your smell repels me
You see how I am on the third day
I don't want to know anything about your life
I like the girls the others don't touch
The ones that get called stupid
They're not as stupid as you might think
They know me
They know I'm a loner
They know why I come around
They know I'm only good for one...
#apathy
#fiction
#loneliness
#sex
#ShortStory
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4 Comments
Garbage pickup is on Tuesday's and Friday's
Jessica's husband became alarmed when he woke up one morning in 2000 and could not find his wife. Police arrived to find that the couple had filled nearly every inch of their home in Michigan. From floor to ceiling with stacks of clothing, dishes, boxes, newspapers, books and miscellaneous debris. After a ten-hour search, officers finally found Jessica buried under an enormous pile of trash, with a telephone in her hand. The husband was able to piece together what had probably happened: Jessica had a number of health problems, and was very likely trying to call for help when one of the...
#death
#dirty
#fiction
#ignorance
#ShortStory
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2 Comments
He flushed himself to death
A homeless man in New York found a manhole in Brooklyn that was just out of the way enough to offer him some privacy, so he routinely used it as a toilet. One day he lost his balance and was found dead at the bottom of the sewer. Draws down, face up.
#death
#funny
#homelessness
#ignorance
#ShortStory
80 reads
12 Comments
Use a ladder instead
After her sister & mother haven't heard from Chrissy for several days, her family reported the petite 33 year old missing. Fifteen days after filing the missing persons report, the mother & sister noticed a foul odor in the house. Following their noses, they found Chrissy wedged behind a 6-foot bookcase. She had fallen headfirst and became trapped behind the bookcase when she tried to adjust her television set, which sat on the top shelf.
#fiction
#ignorance
#ShortStory
#dark
#death
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My friend Ron Delet
Do you know him?
I went to school with Ron Delet
Do you know him?
met in the 8th grade during gym
Amazing with stories & poems
one day he didn't make it home
Do you know him?
I went to school with Ron Delet
Do you know him?
met in the 8th grade during gym
Amazing with stories & poems
one day he didn't make it home
Do you know him?
#fiction
#friendship
#mystery
#rhyming
#ShortStory
63 reads
11 Comments
Video Nasties
a horror story
1989
After he killed her, he returned her library books.
They were piled on a stand by Mary-Anne's armchair, which faced the walnut-encased television set. John liked to watch his videotapes on that, and now with her gone, he'd be able to more often.
If you get away with it...
I will, he snapped back in his thoughts. He shovelled the books into a bag, but not before one last disgusted grimace at them. The Sheikh's English Bride. The Millionaire's Harlot. Love on Ward 7. Kissing in the Common Room. She had no taste, no...
1989
After he killed her, he returned her library books.
They were piled on a stand by Mary-Anne's armchair, which faced the walnut-encased television set. John liked to watch his videotapes on that, and now with her gone, he'd be able to more often.
If you get away with it...
I will, he snapped back in his thoughts. He shovelled the books into a bag, but not before one last disgusted grimace at them. The Sheikh's English Bride. The Millionaire's Harlot. Love on Ward 7. Kissing in the Common Room. She had no taste, no...
#evil
#horror
#ShortStory #violence
#ShortStory #violence
84 reads
2 Comments
On the set...Take Two!!
#dialogue
#porn
#sex
#ShortStory
#uplifting
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12 Comments
Something needed to be done
The board review came to a decision
They found him sane
One doctor felt otherwise
Doctor knew that he fooled the board and staff
The doctor pleaded with the medical board
They saw nothing wrong
The ex girlfriend was always afraid of him
He went psycho on her a few times
For no apparent reason
She would have liked to do normal things couples would do
Instead, she had to worry when something so small and minute would agitate him
He didn't like that she was talking to her brother
He thought her & her brother were secretly in love ...
They found him sane
One doctor felt otherwise
Doctor knew that he fooled the board and staff
The doctor pleaded with the medical board
They saw nothing wrong
The ex girlfriend was always afraid of him
He went psycho on her a few times
For no apparent reason
She would have liked to do normal things couples would do
Instead, she had to worry when something so small and minute would agitate him
He didn't like that she was talking to her brother
He thought her & her brother were secretly in love ...
#fiction
#girlfriend
#MentalHealth
#murder
#ShortStory
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8 Comments
A Bewildering Emergency
Look out!
They're coming for you
Who is it?
Why me??
I'm perfectly healthy
How did I get here?
What happened?
I'm on this table, motionless
I can hear & see but I can't talk or move
It's like I'm in some sort of comatose state
I can see the nurses & doctors talking but i don't see their mouths moving
They continue to look towards me
I see a few shake their heads
One of the nurses has this large needle
She's walking towards me
I don't like this one bit
There's no way I can stop or defend myself ...
They're coming for you
Who is it?
Why me??
I'm perfectly healthy
How did I get here?
What happened?
I'm on this table, motionless
I can hear & see but I can't talk or move
It's like I'm in some sort of comatose state
I can see the nurses & doctors talking but i don't see their mouths moving
They continue to look towards me
I see a few shake their heads
One of the nurses has this large needle
She's walking towards me
I don't like this one bit
There's no way I can stop or defend myself ...
#fiction
#mystery
#scary #ShortStory
#scary #ShortStory
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Get me a cold beer, or else!!
During the 1990's a severe winter storm kept temperatures in the 20's and thousands of homes in Amarillo Texas, without power for several days. It was perhaps a combination of cabin fever and alcohol that led one woman to shoot her 73 year old husband to death in the kitchen of their home. He gave her a can of warm beer. It had occurred to neither one of them to chill a six-pack on the back porch!
#alcohol
#death
#relationships
#ShortStory
#winter
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