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dreaming journey
you never insisted
never made any demands
you just tried to get to know me
and just appreciated me
well I'm far away from you
that's why I'm alone during the day
and i dream of you at night
in which I find myself
playing in that snowy sheet
where I look with wonder
at this white dream world of mine
in this white world I consider myself lucky
And you... are watching my actions
in the same black coat..
sometimes silly n sometimes serious
and your dog is walking in
circles around me
my eyes look vibrant
and bright like galaxy
my face is shining with
a different glow
I'm filling my lungs with
clean, cool air
and when I look at you,
my tingling lips crave
a passionate and gentle kiss
n I promise to be with
each other forever
the silence of the night falls
I don't want to wish you
"good night"..but
I can't run away from reality
you left, n I couldn't stop you
in a moonlit night
my tears silently froze
in the snow...
never made any demands
you just tried to get to know me
and just appreciated me
well I'm far away from you
that's why I'm alone during the day
and i dream of you at night
in which I find myself
playing in that snowy sheet
where I look with wonder
at this white dream world of mine
in this white world I consider myself lucky
And you... are watching my actions
in the same black coat..
sometimes silly n sometimes serious
and your dog is walking in
circles around me
my eyes look vibrant
and bright like galaxy
my face is shining with
a different glow
I'm filling my lungs with
clean, cool air
and when I look at you,
my tingling lips crave
a passionate and gentle kiss
n I promise to be with
each other forever
the silence of the night falls
I don't want to wish you
"good night"..but
I can't run away from reality
you left, n I couldn't stop you
in a moonlit night
my tears silently froze
in the snow...
Published 2nd May 2024
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2nd May 2024 2:05pm
Exquisite writing dimpy
Can feel your yearning and desire ....
Well crafted, dreamlike and extraordinary...
RL AWARD
BIG
Can feel your yearning and desire ....
Well crafted, dreamlike and extraordinary...
RL AWARD
BIG
3rd May 2024 2:56am
dear artist
I wanted you to feel my words and the emotions hidden in them... I wanted my words touch your heart...💌
I wanted you to feel my words and the emotions hidden in them... I wanted my words touch your heart...💌
2nd May 2024 2:08pm
I love the true Romance Dimpy, and this one is quite the perfect example.
from the black/white era of H.Bogart and L.Baccall..
thanks for sharing
from the black/white era of H.Bogart and L.Baccall..
thanks for sharing
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2nd May 2024 4:38pm
Breathless. This is truly a timeless piece that will resonate for a very long time. Love it. Fia xoxo
3rd May 2024 3:06am
Thanks fia for such amazing words... I'm glad that you liked my words that much...
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3rd May 2024 3:08am
Hello there
Thank you so much for your beautiful response... I appreciate your visit..
Thank you so much for your beautiful response... I appreciate your visit..
2nd May 2024 6:24pm
As the picture is evocative of England in the 1940s, post WWII, I could'n't help being reminded of the movie of Noel Coward's play "Brief Encounter", and the poem seems to be the words of someone who had a love unfulfilled by the man she met then left.
3rd May 2024 3:11am
Hi SS..I liked your words, by the way he didn't just leave me and go away... he had to go...thank you
3rd May 2024 3:42pm
So it was based on your personal experience. better him out of your life than staying in it. In "Brief Encounter", the couple who meet on a train are not married to each other and have a brief affair but ultimately the lady decides she wants to stay with her own husband, leading to them parting amicably.
3rd May 2024 2:06am
The dream quality in this is so vibrant that the reader can see the tears glistening at the end. Beautifully written!
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3rd May 2024 4:16am
beautiful. a lot of the metaphors here are relatable. getting so good at hitting home runs. keep on!
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7th May 2024 5:20am
A wonderful write dimpy. The image kind of took me back to a couple of college kids back in the 50s just experiencing each other. That innocence that is portrayed in those old 50s shows, you know when making out in the car at some lookout point was a huge deal.
LJ
LJ
7th May 2024 6:59pm
Hey Lj
I am happy that my poem reminded you something... Well I love it...romance in the car....
I am happy that my poem reminded you something... Well I love it...romance in the car....
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