Tri-flection

Beautiful

thanks, miss. you're very kind. welcome

Wonderful, Beautiful reflections

Cheers, Jem

thanks most much for dropping by and leaving your brain print

I read this before my nap and woke up thinking about how great that first stanza is. The brilliance of it really stuck with me and then I came back to find you'd changed "her green eyes" to "a pair of green eyes" and taken away the venison line...I feel it takes something away from it although it is still amazing.
I feel the same about the last line, I liked paint better than make your skies blue.
The only problem I ever see with your work is that you edit too much when you need to leave it!
anyway, another one of your great works
always my pleasure to read you and learn from you.

shine on, craicman
:)

Miki

after some more reflection I've put it back towards the way it was originally with minimum changes, thanks for pointing out the changes were a bit shitty.

a most wonderful comment, Miki. thank you kindly  

Dear Craic, I'm really pleased you considered my thoughts. I had to say something because quite a few times I've read your work and come back later to comment, only to find some things I loved really changed, or worse; gone.
I have learned to read your poetry and let it simmer a bit before commenting because for some reason your poems always "brew" or get clearer after a few hours. I enjoy the unfolding of the meaning so much that I host an emotional mix of being impressed and learning from you and being a little jealous of your skill , lol
Anyway, on this occasion, I did take a nap and I was so absolutely impressed by the depth and brilliance in that first stanza..I kept thinking, --
needing the very words to give her that she herself is scaring away-and she does not just scare away the meat in them, but everything about them. What embodies them, not the words themselves. wow...
 
so this time when I came back and found that one of the best stanzas ever written in poetry in all time was gone! I had to at least lay down my protest.
 NOW I can add it! I think you ought to let me have a say when you want to chop your work ;)
 
I know I have rambled on, forgive me. I just felt you should know this as it is some very honest feedback on your work overall after a few years of reading :)  
 
love n light to you n yours  
Miki

ahh, Miki

I have been known to over edit, it's one of those things. bad habits and such. things generally balance out when an opinion from the wise is voiced.

personally I like the sheer brilliance of the second, but then my taste in my own words is somewhat questionable and biased one way or another

I'm happy you posted your protest , and hope you'll not pause to post in the event of another butchering

thanks most much, Missus. hat tip to the Moon clan  

i adore the shift in mood, rhythm & [slight] change in theme between these reflections, Eam...
... s3 in particular resonates deeply with me. the simplicity of the language belies something beautiful & complex

not a bone to pick with you here, Лапочка, loved it!

thank you, Koshka

I love that you love this, it is as you say built with simplicity which I thought was fitting for the ambiance I was trying to create so I'm glad it was picked up upon.

and glad there arr no bones to be picked :)'

thanks, most much, Koshka. delighted to have you  

AHhhh...Mo Chara,

There is something almost ethereal in the execution of this piece--especially in your second stanza. ( These lines so surely speak to the restlessness of my own spirit.)

Straightforward in its language....yet intertwined with intricate interpretations...

Your ink is always intriguing...your style creatively compelling--and this poem is no exception!

For me...breath-catching

Enchanted one

yes, they should say many things, as is the modus operandi of my scribings

thank you for the wonderful comment and for dropping by and leaving your brain print  

INTERESTING - LOVE THE FIRST STANZA.

very kind of you to shout, spank you very much

That first stanza is brilliant mate, a wonderful read

Cheers, St Noctem

much appreciate your saying, and your dropping by and leaving your brain print  

This poem, especially its third chapter, reads like the lyrics to a poignant and powerful pop song. I love the first verse, which creates a landscape and populates it with a divine metaphor for writing. The natural and cultural imagery (a la "dream-catcher" in chapter two) is rich and well-chosen. Thank you for the read.

many thanks, ol’ chum

heh, I suppose you are right about the lyrical aspect of it, especially the third. I didn’t plan it to be though, just came out like that

cheers for dropping by and leaving your thoughts

Awl inspyreeng

cheers, good fellow

much appreciate your visit and thoughts

there are so many good images in this! i want to sit on it and then come back and read again. then maybe i'll have a more coherent comment.

thanks, lady

this is one of the more personal writes,  kind of frustrating trying to get the three to sound right with limited words

I am realy happy that it reads like I wanted it to

thanks most much for dropping in and leaving your thoughts

Just don't know how you do it, Sir.  Three distinct stories and styles, but they drop sadly and softly together.

ah, lady K

I would love to furnish you with some kind of formula, but I really don't know how I do it either. I blame luck

thank you heaps and bunches for visiting and leaving your words

Haha well, plus the benefit of years of careful deliberation and discovery ... and it doesn't hurt that you actually have something to say    ;-)

Aww, this touched my heart hun,
I know this feeling when looking
into my children eyes. .

The ending especially, strummed
so deeply for me..

-Howlings

Miss Whelms of the howlings  

happy to have touched your heart. stuff like the above can attach itself to a heart for many a reason. its the luck of the thought chain I think.

very happy to see you here, lady,  and thank you most bunches for dropping by and leaving your footprint

So soft and beautiful that you can feel the words,
Amazing piece

Hullo

ahh yes,  one of the more softer offerings nearly lost to serial editing. you have impeccable taste and thank you for tasting me

beautiful very nicely expressed ...

Hullo, Lady

much thanks to you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts