Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Riding The Wave Until It Crashes
Pieces of me.
Pieces of he,
evaporating.
We are not the same, things have changed.
All about me
never about he.
Unblinking, unthinking, rapidly sinking.
Falling into a sea of me
leaving he, far behind.
Pieces of he,
evaporating.
We are not the same, things have changed.
All about me
never about he.
Unblinking, unthinking, rapidly sinking.
Falling into a sea of me
leaving he, far behind.
#water
#unicorns
#apathy
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Urging Him To Come Over
Colin
walked to the pool
and saw Julia in a
blue bikini urging him to
come over and join her at that one spot.
walked to the pool
and saw Julia in a
blue bikini urging him to
come over and join her at that one spot.
#friendship
#summer
#water
#fiction
#dating
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That's It! I'm Calling The Police!
Kathryn was showering herself outside.
Then, she turned and spotted Jonathan videotaping.
She covered up and ran.
Then, she turned and spotted Jonathan videotaping.
She covered up and ran.
#anger
#home
#water
#fiction
#sensual
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she loved the river
Life is like the river, sometimes it sweeps you gently along and
sometimes the rapids come out of nowhere.”―Emma Smith
she loved the river,
the whispering, lisping river.
there skinny-dipped
under the curtain of its depths,
when no one was around.
fish popping out huge eyes,
attracted by her nippled elegance
and marvelled by her gently rippled dance.
she moved the river, ...
sometimes the rapids come out of nowhere.”―Emma Smith
she loved the river,
the whispering, lisping river.
there skinny-dipped
under the curtain of its depths,
when no one was around.
fish popping out huge eyes,
attracted by her nippled elegance
and marvelled by her gently rippled dance.
she moved the river, ...
#river
#water
#nature
#fate
#tragedy
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Mahogany
It's that quiet whisper
Allow me to esoterically caress the path to that enlightenment
In my company
Easing the tip of your hard seduction into my sensations space
You fit inside the paradox of me so tight
Unlocking the dimensions of my Pandora Box
Dip inside, yes take that stream deeper, lose control in the saturated essence of my mental ravine
I do like the way you stroke your quill, when you brushing all over the peaks of my curiosity
Tempting my in the wet liaison unclothed of his psyche to psyche
...
Allow me to esoterically caress the path to that enlightenment
In my company
Easing the tip of your hard seduction into my sensations space
You fit inside the paradox of me so tight
Unlocking the dimensions of my Pandora Box
Dip inside, yes take that stream deeper, lose control in the saturated essence of my mental ravine
I do like the way you stroke your quill, when you brushing all over the peaks of my curiosity
Tempting my in the wet liaison unclothed of his psyche to psyche
...
#sun
#water
#lover
#sensual
#seductive
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I Am The Ocean
because today I am water
because salt is more than wounds
because Pisces brands me on a Sunday
because gulls cackle like covens
because I’ve tattooed wild selkie skin
because I’ve never drowned on land
because submergence is risk
[I crave risk]
because I stuffed a message in a bottle
because wet paper feels like kelp
because I am holy, holier still
because God is humble at sundown
because I am late night thunder
because I am a lighthouse of warnings
because my skull is a clifftop suicide
because I am...
because salt is more than wounds
because Pisces brands me on a Sunday
because gulls cackle like covens
because I’ve tattooed wild selkie skin
because I’ve never drowned on land
because submergence is risk
[I crave risk]
because I stuffed a message in a bottle
because wet paper feels like kelp
because I am holy, holier still
because God is humble at sundown
because I am late night thunder
because I am a lighthouse of warnings
because my skull is a clifftop suicide
because I am...
#sea
#water
#confessional #SelfReflection
#confessional #SelfReflection
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The Ballad Of No-Man Pam
Let me start by saying
I liked her.
It was as simple as that.
There were billions of people in the world,
and I liked maybe five,
but she was one—
complex and undignified,
farted with meaning in her beat-up car,
as the fog rolled in
and you were never entirely sure
where menthol vape met air biscuit.
We swam once a week together,
poured ourselves into awkward Lycra
and willed each other towards water.
Shy of babysitters, her...
I liked her.
It was as simple as that.
There were billions of people in the world,
and I liked maybe five,
but she was one—
complex and undignified,
farted with meaning in her beat-up car,
as the fog rolled in
and you were never entirely sure
where menthol vape met air biscuit.
We swam once a week together,
poured ourselves into awkward Lycra
and willed each other towards water.
Shy of babysitters, her...
#motherhood
#friendship
#water
#disability
#Autism
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Coastal navigation
Gigantic sea of forgotten
silent sea that does not bring
your voice in the turbulent waves
sea of island eyes on fire
that doesn't imitate the sound of your voice
sea that limits the roof of your mouth
and swallow your voice mythologically
like a desert island lighthouse
human marks of desert sonar
quasar pulse and virus analysis
sea that salts the throat
sea that stretches the rope
chained from anchored boats
in the deep brown
from the...
silent sea that does not bring
your voice in the turbulent waves
sea of island eyes on fire
that doesn't imitate the sound of your voice
sea that limits the roof of your mouth
and swallow your voice mythologically
like a desert island lighthouse
human marks of desert sonar
quasar pulse and virus analysis
sea that salts the throat
sea that stretches the rope
chained from anchored boats
in the deep brown
from the...
#river
#sea
#beach
#water
#nature
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Lake
John is 11 years old
He eats tadpole's from the lake
Parents think he’s strange
He eats tadpole's from the lake
Parents think he’s strange
#water
#nature
#haiku
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When She Got Back To The Beach
Susan stepped from the water.
Robert saw that she had lost something.
That something was her bikini.
Robert saw that she had lost something.
That something was her bikini.
#beach
#water
#fiction
#ignorance
#sensual
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Haiku #15
The full moon shines
Reflects in the calm water
Crows are silent
Reflects in the calm water
Crows are silent
#birds
#moon
#night
#water
#nature
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Forensic water
As I breathe autonomously
I slip through the vengeance
Of her belittled sentiment
I want to move forward
Envy is the begging of cancer
You can treat it by burning it
With laser treatment
Maybe that's why she's forensic
I'm forensic because my lust
For art is a second tongue
That bilingually makes me laugh
At times when needed
Ever think of times when you've been
Forensic like water that shimmers
On your body as you qualify
For been a star in this rock n roll lipcurl
For he is forensic,...
I slip through the vengeance
Of her belittled sentiment
I want to move forward
Envy is the begging of cancer
You can treat it by burning it
With laser treatment
Maybe that's why she's forensic
I'm forensic because my lust
For art is a second tongue
That bilingually makes me laugh
At times when needed
Ever think of times when you've been
Forensic like water that shimmers
On your body as you qualify
For been a star in this rock n roll lipcurl
For he is forensic,...
#anger
#lust
#water
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique