Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Climate times(flyin high)
Flyin high in climate times
Gonna get an RV to see
Things not saw by my eyes
Mile marker 29 flys by
Pull into the campground
Stretch my legs and let go
As small talk goes all around
Back on the horse
Rubber on asphalt
Driving on an American Dream
Driving on an American Dream
Mountains stand tall in the distance
A frog hops into whitewater
I want to go to Hawaii
I can’t step onto the runway ...
Gonna get an RV to see
Things not saw by my eyes
Mile marker 29 flys by
Pull into the campground
Stretch my legs and let go
As small talk goes all around
Back on the horse
Rubber on asphalt
Driving on an American Dream
Driving on an American Dream
Mountains stand tall in the distance
A frog hops into whitewater
I want to go to Hawaii
I can’t step onto the runway ...
#earth
#fire
#tragedy #water
#tragedy #water
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Heavy 13
Feeling heavy 13
Feeling heavy carbon
I’m 13 into my fusion
Fusion fuels me I speed
Colliding with myself
I’m nuclear in you
My tension fuels me and
I’m spinning like a top
Symphony when we crash together
We crash and blow up the world
Fall into a rhythm like we’re in chic fil a
While my sins scream from the pew
Church of sins inside me
I’m feeling heavy carbon I’m 13
Hover above light carbon 12 doesn’t spark
Nuclear chemistry...
Feeling heavy carbon
I’m 13 into my fusion
Fusion fuels me I speed
Colliding with myself
I’m nuclear in you
My tension fuels me and
I’m spinning like a top
Symphony when we crash together
We crash and blow up the world
Fall into a rhythm like we’re in chic fil a
While my sins scream from the pew
Church of sins inside me
I’m feeling heavy carbon I’m 13
Hover above light carbon 12 doesn’t spark
Nuclear chemistry...
#earth
#fire
#water
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Fishermen
In the waves of the sea, a secret kept,
accept, from the sea, its surly murmur
and on moonlit nights, an enchanted dream.
The wind whispers stories of the past
and the stars shine in a starry sky.
Accept, from the sea, its surly murmur.
On the distant horizon, an unanchored boat
navigate in silence, destiny set
in the lonely sailor, heavy heart.
Accept, from the sea, its surly murmur.
In the walls, mysteries hanged
and the sirens sing a sacred song.
The headlight illuminates the desired path ...
accept, from the sea, its surly murmur
and on moonlit nights, an enchanted dream.
The wind whispers stories of the past
and the stars shine in a starry sky.
Accept, from the sea, its surly murmur.
On the distant horizon, an unanchored boat
navigate in silence, destiny set
in the lonely sailor, heavy heart.
Accept, from the sea, its surly murmur.
In the walls, mysteries hanged
and the sirens sing a sacred song.
The headlight illuminates the desired path ...
#art
#earth
#fire
#music
#water
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8 Comments
Let's meet at the beach
September sun, late summer still holding on
Days grow shorter, nights become long
Let's meet at the beach, we have free reign
Crowds have disappeared, less stress, less strain
A pleasant walk, you & I on the sand
Enjoying life's finer pleasures, please take my hand
The air is cooler, the ocean quite warm
Out in the distant sky, we see a brewing storm
Were not discouraged, we faced many storms throughout our run
We learn to trust more fully, and to us that's second to none
Days grow shorter, nights become long
Let's meet at the beach, we have free reign
Crowds have disappeared, less stress, less strain
A pleasant walk, you & I on the sand
Enjoying life's finer pleasures, please take my hand
The air is cooler, the ocean quite warm
Out in the distant sky, we see a brewing storm
Were not discouraged, we faced many storms throughout our run
We learn to trust more fully, and to us that's second to none
#beach
#rhyming
#storm
#summer
#water
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On A Float In The Water
Remington
went out to the pool and
saw twin blonde sisters Lorelai and
Kennedy laying naked on a float in the
water but does not know which sister
he should let himself start
humping first.
went out to the pool and
saw twin blonde sisters Lorelai and
Kennedy laying naked on a float in the
water but does not know which sister
he should let himself start
humping first.
#fiction
#friendship
#sex
#summer
#water
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BE, IN ALL THINGS BE (Sunday, 2-16-19, 1:30pm, Palm Springs, CA, while soaking in an outdoor, 105° Spa.)
be at ease
be in peace
be in stillness
be in calm
be in joy
be in love
be in light
be in awe
be in
all things
ever one
be love
be light
be joy
be calm
be still
be ease
be all
be one
be awe
in all
things
ever one
but above
and beyond
all else
above
just be
in all
things
always
true
to yourself
then
simply
always be
the truest
one and only
one
you and you ...
be in peace
be in stillness
be in calm
be in joy
be in love
be in light
be in awe
be in
all things
ever one
be love
be light
be joy
be calm
be still
be ease
be all
be one
be awe
in all
things
ever one
but above
and beyond
all else
above
just be
in all
things
always
true
to yourself
then
simply
always be
the truest
one and only
one
you and you ...
#inspirational
#night
#SelfReflection
#water
#winter
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PSYCHOACTIVE HALF MOON PRAYER (Monday, 6-10-19, 9:09pm; Palm Springs, California.)
another hot mid june
southern california desert
summer night
i walked outside
up to my condo apartment s pool
for my nightly two hour long
ritual hot spa soak
just after 4 hits
off my 420 vape pen
then upon looking up
into the velvety dark
vast deep bowl
of wide open
gaping night s sky above
i was immediately swallowed up
spellbound enamored completely
by and with
the luminous soft white milky salve
of smiling near half moon light s
frosted silvery bath
silently glazing it s ...
southern california desert
summer night
i walked outside
up to my condo apartment s pool
for my nightly two hour long
ritual hot spa soak
just after 4 hits
off my 420 vape pen
then upon looking up
into the velvety dark
vast deep bowl
of wide open
gaping night s sky above
i was immediately swallowed up
spellbound enamored completely
by and with
the luminous soft white milky salve
of smiling near half moon light s
frosted silvery bath
silently glazing it s ...
#marijuana
#MyInspiration
#SelfReflection
#spiritual
#water
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After He Stepped Out Of The Cabin
Rick stepped outside and
glanced at the sunset before
he suddenly heard a splash.
Then, he saw Maggie
taking a swim before she
dried off and went back inside.
glanced at the sunset before
he suddenly heard a splash.
Then, he saw Maggie
taking a swim before she
dried off and went back inside.
#fiction
#friendship
#sports
#summer
#water
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WHERE PEACEFUL WATERS FLOW
Have you ever been to a place that seems, like it can invoke your thoughts, as well as it has a strong hold on you. That is what is not man made, as it was created by nature and the GODS of the universe. THAT reaches pass where no man has ever traveled before in space 🚀 or time ⌚ For even as I sit here down where peaceful waters flow, as a running stream running through the mountains, below the trees of life. Yet it is necessary to understand what real tranquility looks like and feels like in the forest, as far as the eyes can see 👁️👁️ That flows...
#dialogue
#earth
#metaphor
#StreamOfConsciousness
#water
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Still-steel well
One a day in the past I was a well of fresh water
Once a days in the past I was vastness of life flowing gentle sweet strife
My walls ran deep tapping to the bottoms of the earth touching the living WATERS
The WATERS that came from me gave forth life to those who drank and they could live FOREVER
FOREVER did i yearn to birth and nourish life that was my ENDEAVOR
My walls clean to the bottom holding together what made you be,
I quenched the thirst of many yet when they drank they did not put thought or care to my walls
When I killed their thirsts they...
Once a days in the past I was vastness of life flowing gentle sweet strife
My walls ran deep tapping to the bottoms of the earth touching the living WATERS
The WATERS that came from me gave forth life to those who drank and they could live FOREVER
FOREVER did i yearn to birth and nourish life that was my ENDEAVOR
My walls clean to the bottom holding together what made you be,
I quenched the thirst of many yet when they drank they did not put thought or care to my walls
When I killed their thirsts they...
#death
#disappointment
#evolution
#regret
#water
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Neptune
My arms grew tired, I couldn't swim anymore
No one around to help me
A sharp pain within my core
I was drifting further & further out
The more I fought the current
I began to panic, I began to shout
The distant coastline was my last vision
Rip currents tired me out
I made my final decision
I stayed afloat until I had nothing else left
Neptune dragged me down
Drowning was the cause of death
No one around to help me
A sharp pain within my core
I was drifting further & further out
The more I fought the current
I began to panic, I began to shout
The distant coastline was my last vision
Rip currents tired me out
I made my final decision
I stayed afloat until I had nothing else left
Neptune dragged me down
Drowning was the cause of death
#dark
#death
#rhyming
#sea
#water
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Days Without Rain
In the days without rain
the pond is down.
The few trees that grow in it
bear witness to what the waterline
used to be.
Dragonflies while the day away
pretending to be acrobats
performing aerial feats for each other.
An occasional breeze sways the small stand
of cattails that grow near the edge.
Their mint-green leaves, long knives,
firm as canvas sails full of wind
on yacht race day.
A young frog sits in the shallows,
three-quarters submerged,
a meniscus outlines his exposed body.
He is still as...
the pond is down.
The few trees that grow in it
bear witness to what the waterline
used to be.
Dragonflies while the day away
pretending to be acrobats
performing aerial feats for each other.
An occasional breeze sways the small stand
of cattails that grow near the edge.
Their mint-green leaves, long knives,
firm as canvas sails full of wind
on yacht race day.
A young frog sits in the shallows,
three-quarters submerged,
a meniscus outlines his exposed body.
He is still as...
#animals
#fish
#nature
#trees
#water
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique