Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique
#water
Poems about water seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
The Masks Of The Deep
They say the pacific ocean is clean.
On the surface,it does redeem.
Whales,sharks as people fish.
The water looked nice and clean.
Like no evil has been there at all.
Like it was always clean.
And it never had its one big fall.
Like a fish does swim and a crab crawl.
We enjoy the sights of all kinds of fish.
Some endangered ,too.
The surface of the water looked clean.
But the human eye it does fool.
Because deep down,the ocean can be dark.
If you just swim deep.
And your sanity,you try to keep.
...
On the surface,it does redeem.
Whales,sharks as people fish.
The water looked nice and clean.
Like no evil has been there at all.
Like it was always clean.
And it never had its one big fall.
Like a fish does swim and a crab crawl.
We enjoy the sights of all kinds of fish.
Some endangered ,too.
The surface of the water looked clean.
But the human eye it does fool.
Because deep down,the ocean can be dark.
If you just swim deep.
And your sanity,you try to keep.
...
#flowers
#nature
#sadness #water
#sadness #water
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HERE
Beauty in the sky
the feel of the earth
love of the ocean
together we are
together we can
feel the right
feel the good
Beauty in you
Beauty in me
Beauty in us
we,you,me
it's all here
right now
today
the feel of the earth
love of the ocean
together we are
together we can
feel the right
feel the good
Beauty in you
Beauty in me
Beauty in us
we,you,me
it's all here
right now
today
#earth
#sky
#water
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Joining You And That Little Friend Of Yours
Brian, I see that you're still in the
shower... and rubbing on that hard
rod. I hope that you do not
mind me getting naked
and joining you and
that little friend
of yours for
some hot
love.
shower... and rubbing on that hard
rod. I hope that you do not
mind me getting naked
and joining you and
that little friend
of yours for
some hot
love.
#dialogue
#fiction
#home
#sex
#water
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Stillness
I sit here looking at the burnt orange sunset
Reflecting off the flat pond
I am no painter with a brush and easel
My thoughts paint the scene
My words color it
May it be dark or light or somewhere in between
Still, I look at the stillness
I envy the quiet in this moment of dusk
To see peace and never have it
Like tempting you with the sweetest delicacy
Only a centimeter away and still never allowed to have it
Even the birds are quiet in this reflective peace
...
Reflecting off the flat pond
I am no painter with a brush and easel
My thoughts paint the scene
My words color it
May it be dark or light or somewhere in between
Still, I look at the stillness
I envy the quiet in this moment of dusk
To see peace and never have it
Like tempting you with the sweetest delicacy
Only a centimeter away and still never allowed to have it
Even the birds are quiet in this reflective peace
...
#water
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Undercurrent.
It feels like I’m swimming for my life,
around me, a large body of water,
and there are absolutely no signs of land in sight.
My arms and legs grow heavier
from exhaustion.
Fire is burning in my lungs, as I breathe
And while I think I’m breathing in fresh air
it doesn’t feel like oxygen, quite the opposite.
Something hot and unrelenting coils in my chest
even as I exhale.
suddenly feeling as though
I’m wading in the fiery lakes of hell.
“Keep swimming.” I think to myself.
The end has got to be near, ...
around me, a large body of water,
and there are absolutely no signs of land in sight.
My arms and legs grow heavier
from exhaustion.
Fire is burning in my lungs, as I breathe
And while I think I’m breathing in fresh air
it doesn’t feel like oxygen, quite the opposite.
Something hot and unrelenting coils in my chest
even as I exhale.
suddenly feeling as though
I’m wading in the fiery lakes of hell.
“Keep swimming.” I think to myself.
The end has got to be near, ...
#anxiety
#depression
#LifeStruggles #water
#LifeStruggles #water
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BE SOME PLACE ELSE
If you could just be able to go somewhere else, to escape for a righteous blessing. AS you become so invisible. TO the insanity from the negativity, and drama, and confusion of the world. 🌎 Where would you rather be, here amongst the deepness, of your own sanity. Feeling your spiritual pain leave your thoughts to find thyself, yet sometimes feeling still alone me myself and I. Yet you have a connection, to the outer limits of your own thoughts. ☺️ TO experience a good vibration within, this place far away from society. THAT only you can see and feel the inner vibes. Which...
#earth
#evolution
#StreamOfConsciousness
#universe
#water
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Crystaline water
Crystaline water
An old Friend's Poem," one of her best " 2017
Crystaline water
cleanse my cluttered mind
weaving your coarse
leave the chaos behind
Riparian retreat
where willows embrace
finger leaf trails
shows a rippling trace
In mirrored depths
your secrets abide
the predators hunt
the hunted, hide
Amorphous shadows
neath diaphonous stream
caught for a moment
by incandescent sunbeam
Prowling predator
a solitary pike
in the margins, motionless
an...
An old Friend's Poem," one of her best " 2017
Crystaline water
cleanse my cluttered mind
weaving your coarse
leave the chaos behind
Riparian retreat
where willows embrace
finger leaf trails
shows a rippling trace
In mirrored depths
your secrets abide
the predators hunt
the hunted, hide
Amorphous shadows
neath diaphonous stream
caught for a moment
by incandescent sunbeam
Prowling predator
a solitary pike
in the margins, motionless
an...
#metaphor
#mythology
#philosophical
#uplifting
#water
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Waves
Once a naive child
Sought after the sea
To feel as vivid blue
As the depths of it
Ventured in too far
Got swallowed by a wave
Trapped into the waters
Dissolving into them
Hence why I have no body
No place to keep my soul
Passed on all my sorrows
To waves crashing on the shore
Sought after the sea
To feel as vivid blue
As the depths of it
Ventured in too far
Got swallowed by a wave
Trapped into the waters
Dissolving into them
Hence why I have no body
No place to keep my soul
Passed on all my sorrows
To waves crashing on the shore
#sadness
#sea
#water
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Purples
Nature's best musicians sing
Over lakes and ponds and streams
Sweet and salty waters hum
My guitar strings gently strum
Let the melody of worlds
Convey her gentle sound through you
Drown in deep blues
Sing in strong reds
So that you might live in purples
Follow singing rivers ahead
Go where no man's ever tread
Stay until you lose yourself
Stay until you lose your self
Over lakes and ponds and streams
Sweet and salty waters hum
My guitar strings gently strum
Let the melody of worlds
Convey her gentle sound through you
Drown in deep blues
Sing in strong reds
So that you might live in purples
Follow singing rivers ahead
Go where no man's ever tread
Stay until you lose yourself
Stay until you lose your self
#birds
#emotions
#hope
#nature
#water
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Assistant to Power
Assistant to Power
You go to school and dig into law principles
I go to school I’m an Apprentice to a Master Plumber
We see each other in social situations
Blacked out pledging the fraternity of yourfamily
So I see you in the library but you’re reading the comics
I’m on the stone looking to master Plumbing
As time passes you’re clerking for the Supreme Court
I worked for all of this I Mastered Plumbing
You were drunk and sleeping, pulling down your pants now you’re on the Supreme Court ...
You go to school and dig into law principles
I go to school I’m an Apprentice to a Master Plumber
We see each other in social situations
Blacked out pledging the fraternity of yourfamily
So I see you in the library but you’re reading the comics
I’m on the stone looking to master Plumbing
As time passes you’re clerking for the Supreme Court
I worked for all of this I Mastered Plumbing
You were drunk and sleeping, pulling down your pants now you’re on the Supreme Court ...
#job
#sacrifice
#water
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Breathe a Breath
Breathe to me a breath I can share
Breath a breath that saves the earth
Climate will hurt us
if we are ignorant to the land
that burns us and quakes us and spins tornadoes
We should all agree living not dying
Is better than not existing even a little bit
So temperatures rise and we can’t lie
Bacon is burning breakfast on asphalt
Breathe a breathe that saves all of us
Plant a tree give oxygen to peoplekind
As fires burn the west 80 foot flames in Greece
No...
Breath a breath that saves the earth
Climate will hurt us
if we are ignorant to the land
that burns us and quakes us and spins tornadoes
We should all agree living not dying
Is better than not existing even a little bit
So temperatures rise and we can’t lie
Bacon is burning breakfast on asphalt
Breathe a breathe that saves all of us
Plant a tree give oxygen to peoplekind
As fires burn the west 80 foot flames in Greece
No...
#earth
#environment
#fire #water
#fire #water
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playing within
When the lights are dim
and the crowd’s all gone
keep the game alive
play on and on.
No need for a stage
or a roaring cheer
the heart of the game
is always here.
In the silence,
moves are made
passes thrown
in a hidden parade.
Invisible victories
unseen sweat
chasing dreams
with no regret.
Under the stars
with no eyes to see.
The spirit of play runs
wild and free.
Every shot a whisper
every goal a ghost.
In the quiet night
you’re playing the...
and the crowd’s all gone
keep the game alive
play on and on.
No need for a stage
or a roaring cheer
the heart of the game
is always here.
In the silence,
moves are made
passes thrown
in a hidden parade.
Invisible victories
unseen sweat
chasing dreams
with no regret.
Under the stars
with no eyes to see.
The spirit of play runs
wild and free.
Every shot a whisper
every goal a ghost.
In the quiet night
you’re playing the...
#fire
#identity
#silence
#water
#WritingPoetry
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DU Poetry : Poems About Water Seeking Honest Critique