Scifi Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#scifi
scifi seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
The blue alien
The blue alien
If ever there was an alien form
Blue jellyfish sailing around in swarms
They floated from down on parachutes
Millions of years hence to land in the gloop
Founding, a habitat
In the muddy dark morass
They held a secret long unknown
The envy of all living forms
The gift of perpetuity
to clone, gain longevity
retrace the steps from death to birth
reproduce, and then disperse
transparency so complex
Medusa a Gorgon an unearthly flesh
Just aliens waiting with just one swish
Holding the grail to...
If ever there was an alien form
Blue jellyfish sailing around in swarms
They floated from down on parachutes
Millions of years hence to land in the gloop
Founding, a habitat
In the muddy dark morass
They held a secret long unknown
The envy of all living forms
The gift of perpetuity
to clone, gain longevity
retrace the steps from death to birth
reproduce, and then disperse
transparency so complex
Medusa a Gorgon an unearthly flesh
Just aliens waiting with just one swish
Holding the grail to...
#scifi
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King of the Road
A traveling wiz kid
Shit kicker
Gathering speed
Push button magic
Cyclone launch
Over the edge
Asphalt rising
Hotdogging
Driving into the interstellar highway
Eatin dust!
Neptune’s convoy or the boogie van
Velvet interior, hell on wheels
His freedom of choice
Picking up his trapeze freak, sea hag
At the space farm
She once owned a Coyote Duster
A super shooter, strato-streak machine
Currently lugs around in a Falcon
White dice
The two are missing links
From a...
Shit kicker
Gathering speed
Push button magic
Cyclone launch
Over the edge
Asphalt rising
Hotdogging
Driving into the interstellar highway
Eatin dust!
Neptune’s convoy or the boogie van
Velvet interior, hell on wheels
His freedom of choice
Picking up his trapeze freak, sea hag
At the space farm
She once owned a Coyote Duster
A super shooter, strato-streak machine
Currently lugs around in a Falcon
White dice
The two are missing links
From a...
#universe
#rainbow
#cars
#ShortStory
#scifi
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Echo Dot
my thoughts become convoluted
as they enter my mind at such a pace as to make my mind spin
my brain cannot organize them all, in a timely fashion
faster than the speed of light they manifest in my mind
I believe by telepathic thought
I try to record what is seemingly beamed in
old memories, things I have forgotten from other lives
and things I've never known at all
keeper of visions I release the energy into the world
relaying a message I believe isn't just for me
I get angry when I get confused, as this weakens my stance ...
as they enter my mind at such a pace as to make my mind spin
my brain cannot organize them all, in a timely fashion
faster than the speed of light they manifest in my mind
I believe by telepathic thought
I try to record what is seemingly beamed in
old memories, things I have forgotten from other lives
and things I've never known at all
keeper of visions I release the energy into the world
relaying a message I believe isn't just for me
I get angry when I get confused, as this weakens my stance ...
#angels
#aliens
#scifi
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Don't Know How Long She's Been In The Frozen Food Section
A scientific expedition finds
a naked female humanoid
inside the iceberg they
were examining.
a naked female humanoid
inside the iceberg they
were examining.
#snow
#fiction
#dialogue
#mystery
#scifi
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Immortal Love 2
I was the only being existing on earth with immortal love.
For millennia, I sought true love that could not die,
But this kind of love did not exist on the planet.
The love of the daughters of earth could not last forever.
They were mortals and I was an immortal being.
I knew that the love I had been searching for would come one day.
I awaited the arrival of a compatible being with love like mine.
How I wanted to get out of this dying world.
Then at last, I saw an advanced starship descending slowly.
An alien...
For millennia, I sought true love that could not die,
But this kind of love did not exist on the planet.
The love of the daughters of earth could not last forever.
They were mortals and I was an immortal being.
I knew that the love I had been searching for would come one day.
I awaited the arrival of a compatible being with love like mine.
How I wanted to get out of this dying world.
Then at last, I saw an advanced starship descending slowly.
An alien...
#love
#universe
#aliens
#scifi
#travel
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2 Comments
Progeny
alpha waves are affected sending synapses misfiring
the message is translated as an act of war
communications in
visuals stimulate thoughts
radio signals cause a disturbance
complex chaos ensues
I communicate with beings I can't see
it disrupts my alpha rhythms
so I block them out
the mind won't accept what the eyes can't see
telepathy, some beings communicate mind-to-mind
are part of a collective thought
they are here and can appear as human
they have no problem assimilating our language
because they...
the message is translated as an act of war
communications in
visuals stimulate thoughts
radio signals cause a disturbance
complex chaos ensues
I communicate with beings I can't see
it disrupts my alpha rhythms
so I block them out
the mind won't accept what the eyes can't see
telepathy, some beings communicate mind-to-mind
are part of a collective thought
they are here and can appear as human
they have no problem assimilating our language
because they...
#aliens
#scifi
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Hidden Memories The Regress
my tapestry of hidden memories
rise within me bringing back to memory past lives
a place of visions
a place where I can breathe
I regress into nothingness
to the void before time existed
like a space mermaid, I swim
echoing high and low seeking the others
swimming so deep into the abyss that I tire
I cover myself with the dark and anchor in to rest
waking from startling visions of what is to be
first, I was awake and aware I was
using sonar-like pings
I send them out on the waves in space
then wait to...
rise within me bringing back to memory past lives
a place of visions
a place where I can breathe
I regress into nothingness
to the void before time existed
like a space mermaid, I swim
echoing high and low seeking the others
swimming so deep into the abyss that I tire
I cover myself with the dark and anchor in to rest
waking from startling visions of what is to be
first, I was awake and aware I was
using sonar-like pings
I send them out on the waves in space
then wait to...
#universe
#aliens
#scifi
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8 Comments
Not The Weight Loss Miracle He Had In Mind
Norman created a formula
that might make him become thinner.
But after he gulped down,
he felt strong pains and blacked
out. When he woke up,
he looked at the
mirror. He
is now
She.
that might make him become thinner.
But after he gulped down,
he felt strong pains and blacked
out. When he woke up,
he looked at the
mirror. He
is now
She.
#science
#fiction
#transgender
#sensual
#scifi
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Future Human ( Box Head )
Not pretty
Possibly functional
Still in development
Technology in control
Produced without sex
Human ?
Stay tuned
Possibly functional
Still in development
Technology in control
Produced without sex
Human ?
Stay tuned
#technology
#humankind
#art #scifi
#art #scifi
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18 Comments
Green Cheese
I could get lost in space. Couldn't you?
Just to see beyond the midnight blue?
To listen with oscilloscopic ears
for music from all the well rung spheres,
and survey every crater on the moon
to Saturn and Jupiter's far-flung tune!
I'd fly through every luminous cloud,
(that makes each galaxy astro proud)
on the steampunk aether triplane wings
that angels use with quantum physic strings
for halo headlights through dark matter fog
and a big brain activated Captain's log...
since all those places sound great, to me, ...
Just to see beyond the midnight blue?
To listen with oscilloscopic ears
for music from all the well rung spheres,
and survey every crater on the moon
to Saturn and Jupiter's far-flung tune!
I'd fly through every luminous cloud,
(that makes each galaxy astro proud)
on the steampunk aether triplane wings
that angels use with quantum physic strings
for halo headlights through dark matter fog
and a big brain activated Captain's log...
since all those places sound great, to me, ...
#universe
#steampunk
#scifi
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Experiment That We Had Conducted
Xenogeneic experiment that we had
conducted on Jessica resulted in her
walking around naked and wanting to get
it on with the very first person that she sees.
conducted on Jessica resulted in her
walking around naked and wanting to get
it on with the very first person that she sees.
#science
#fiction
#addiction
#sensual
#scifi
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Klingon Legends: The Forgotten Gods of Karklon Gamma
- Klingon Legends: The Forgotten Gods of Karklon Gamma -
The planet named, in the language of Federation Standard, as Karklon Gamma... was considered to be a forbidden world for any star ship to approach... it was at the outermost fringes of the neutral zone that was set up between the worlds of the Federation and those of the Klingon Empire. It was owned by the Klingon Empire, technically, and was protected by the Imperial Klingon Defense Forces since as far off and back into history as anyone could remember. It was, however, not marked on any star maps that did with a good...
The planet named, in the language of Federation Standard, as Karklon Gamma... was considered to be a forbidden world for any star ship to approach... it was at the outermost fringes of the neutral zone that was set up between the worlds of the Federation and those of the Klingon Empire. It was owned by the Klingon Empire, technically, and was protected by the Imperial Klingon Defense Forces since as far off and back into history as anyone could remember. It was, however, not marked on any star maps that did with a good...
#secrets
#family
#aliens
#passion
#scifi
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