Scifi Seeking Honest Critique Poems
#scifi
scifi seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
A Metallic Vision
Long long ago before I became a SCATTERBRAIN watching EVIL DEAD movies repeatedly, I was ACCUSED of VIOLENCE on HALLOWS EVE. The DIRTY ROTTEN IMBECILES (D.R.I.) who always needed an ATTITUDE ADJUSTMENT lived near the WATCHTOWER. They agreed with my METHOD OF DESTRUCTION (M.O.D.). We were SICK OF IT ALL, POSSESSED in bringing this faction down to their knees. A CORROSION OF CONFORMITY was happening in our towns and on our streets. If any DEFIANCE came their way, you were FORBIDDEN to enter their SACRED REICH. There needed to be LETHAL AGGRESSION. A FORCED ENTRY into their METAL CHURCH. We knew...
#dystopian
#music
#peace
#scifi
#war
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Zone
an incantation for the warrior spirits
let's cleave together
a soldier's advantage one and all joined
bending minds and projecting visions
a silent assault mixed magics
get in and out without detection
erase a trace of magic off of you
sweet lullabies with a surprise
lulling to sleep those jackals that would oppose you
enchanted territory let the music play
on an inaudible wavelength
let it flow through time and space
races of the Onyx Kingdom
make sure your warriors are in order
the Golden Kingdom...
let's cleave together
a soldier's advantage one and all joined
bending minds and projecting visions
a silent assault mixed magics
get in and out without detection
erase a trace of magic off of you
sweet lullabies with a surprise
lulling to sleep those jackals that would oppose you
enchanted territory let the music play
on an inaudible wavelength
let it flow through time and space
races of the Onyx Kingdom
make sure your warriors are in order
the Golden Kingdom...
#scifi
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2 Comments
greetings
greetings from the infernal vortex
hopeful thoughts inside the internal gloom
mischief stands up valiantly and makes introductions
sweet surrender under casual assault
it's the nature of the void
war is ever present and sarcasm is the only tongue they know
why waste niceties when you know that's not what you feel
aggressive is the tone with them
outsiders' smell of fear, it has a peculiar scent
it alerts them to spies
violence is always the first to be aware
he releases his dogs of war
the weaker of the...
hopeful thoughts inside the internal gloom
mischief stands up valiantly and makes introductions
sweet surrender under casual assault
it's the nature of the void
war is ever present and sarcasm is the only tongue they know
why waste niceties when you know that's not what you feel
aggressive is the tone with them
outsiders' smell of fear, it has a peculiar scent
it alerts them to spies
violence is always the first to be aware
he releases his dogs of war
the weaker of the...
#aliens
#scifi
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6 Comments
Will It Come To This?
Compelled by latest technology
this poet sees the necessity
to label each piece of my poetry
as “Certified AI Free”
or, for the sake of brevity
CAIF one can easily say
or quizas CIAL
(Say-E-Ah-L)
if I take advantage
of writing in my
favorite foreign language.
I want the reader to know that it's only me.
whom for my verse
should be venerated
better said, appreciated
okay, just tolerated
frankly I'd settle for read
Soon each poet
will have to invent
their own, custom language
until...
this poet sees the necessity
to label each piece of my poetry
as “Certified AI Free”
or, for the sake of brevity
CAIF one can easily say
or quizas CIAL
(Say-E-Ah-L)
if I take advantage
of writing in my
favorite foreign language.
I want the reader to know that it's only me.
whom for my verse
should be venerated
better said, appreciated
okay, just tolerated
frankly I'd settle for read
Soon each poet
will have to invent
their own, custom language
until...
#funny
#PopCulture
#scifi #technology
#scifi #technology
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2 Comments
alien
twinkling in the universes I wonder what manner am i
shining with other starlit beings
on a great voyage with time and space
touring the dimensions of enlightenment
my mind opens according to the guidelines of each dimension
to glean wisdom is a difficult thing
one planet to the next disagree on this very thought
sending their young starshine out to learn the nature of the cosmos
so many wonders to behold
we are but ambassadors of hope
greeting each other as we come and go
the galaxies are vast
we travel on a beam...
shining with other starlit beings
on a great voyage with time and space
touring the dimensions of enlightenment
my mind opens according to the guidelines of each dimension
to glean wisdom is a difficult thing
one planet to the next disagree on this very thought
sending their young starshine out to learn the nature of the cosmos
so many wonders to behold
we are but ambassadors of hope
greeting each other as we come and go
the galaxies are vast
we travel on a beam...
#aliens
#scifi
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2 Comments
quantum
yes I hear you gatekeepers I haven't responded because while your analysis is strong your emotions are flat my origins are of little importance since I understand fully how you operate there are many dimensions that are closed to you
you seem bent on extorting resources of planets that have nothing to do with you
taking technology and the most advanced people scientifically
what you fail to realize is the cosmos is alive and full of a deep ancient magic
and really doesn't care what your celestial council votes you know a little hocus pocus compared to the magics of...
you seem bent on extorting resources of planets that have nothing to do with you
taking technology and the most advanced people scientifically
what you fail to realize is the cosmos is alive and full of a deep ancient magic
and really doesn't care what your celestial council votes you know a little hocus pocus compared to the magics of...
#aliens
#scifi
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Where did all the woman go?
Where did all the woman go?
The supply of these creatures at one time was endless
Every one of them was special, original, beautiful & care-free
Their beauty & intelligence shined brightly
Their smell, their kisses, their playfulness, enlightened me throughout my life
The way they folded their legs
The ability to wear makeup & style their hair
Chivalry wasn't dead then
They once out numbered men on planet Earth
Then one day they all disappeared
All that are left are men & transgenders
What good is that?
What the fuck...
The supply of these creatures at one time was endless
Every one of them was special, original, beautiful & care-free
Their beauty & intelligence shined brightly
Their smell, their kisses, their playfulness, enlightened me throughout my life
The way they folded their legs
The ability to wear makeup & style their hair
Chivalry wasn't dead then
They once out numbered men on planet Earth
Then one day they all disappeared
All that are left are men & transgenders
What good is that?
What the fuck...
#earth
#philosophical
#politics
#scifi
#women
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8 Comments
logic
sweet little honey bear
carrying all this weight
falling into despair
sinking so far into the blue
in aquatic slumber
lest anyone trouble you
melancholy stranger
speaking a language of need
troubling the waters with doubt
beautiful girl awaken
it will only hurt for a moment
submerged in the quiet
you're missing your moments in the sun
curious about life
let your mind expand
in the depths, you are known
reading the thoughts of the ancients
you regard humanity with large suspect...
carrying all this weight
falling into despair
sinking so far into the blue
in aquatic slumber
lest anyone trouble you
melancholy stranger
speaking a language of need
troubling the waters with doubt
beautiful girl awaken
it will only hurt for a moment
submerged in the quiet
you're missing your moments in the sun
curious about life
let your mind expand
in the depths, you are known
reading the thoughts of the ancients
you regard humanity with large suspect...
#aliens
#love
#scifi #sea
#scifi #sea
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Savoir vivre
Nature’s natural’, he stated most naturally,
as if his own lazy savoir-faire
could penetrate through the aperture
of a creature not from anywhere near where nature’s natural resembled anything like this.
Incomprehensible, these lush vines and leaves and sensations of wind and rancid, of darkness and light and colors dancing.
as if his own lazy savoir-faire
could penetrate through the aperture
of a creature not from anywhere near where nature’s natural resembled anything like this.
Incomprehensible, these lush vines and leaves and sensations of wind and rancid, of darkness and light and colors dancing.
#aliens
#nature
#scifi #universe
#scifi #universe
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4 Comments
scifi
loving who you present
and who you secret away
under the cover of darkness, you don't reveal
I wonder if this makes you as lonely as me
hidden thoughts the world views as off-topic
is there room for the reality of things
since we are forced to wear these fictitious costumes
mine doesn't fit properly and anger burned mine right off
I feel claustrophobic wearing mine
bare in the world feels much better
my darkness rises and becomes the air around me
it says we were wondering
how long you were going to pretend to be...
and who you secret away
under the cover of darkness, you don't reveal
I wonder if this makes you as lonely as me
hidden thoughts the world views as off-topic
is there room for the reality of things
since we are forced to wear these fictitious costumes
mine doesn't fit properly and anger burned mine right off
I feel claustrophobic wearing mine
bare in the world feels much better
my darkness rises and becomes the air around me
it says we were wondering
how long you were going to pretend to be...
#scifi
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0 Comments
Sell Your Wife & Remodel Your Home
Across the street my neighbor was having his house updated
New siding, new windows, new roof, new garage door etc..
I said hey Scott
Your home is gonna look amazing
He said, "Thanks, Thanks!"
I said I haven't seen your wife
He said, "Yeah well, let's just say she went on a permanent vacation"
I said, "Really? Whereabouts?"
He said, "She went to visit family in California"
Oh OK
2 weeks later I find out from another neighbor, Phil that Scott sold his wife to the military
I said, "WHAT!!?" ...
New siding, new windows, new roof, new garage door etc..
I said hey Scott
Your home is gonna look amazing
He said, "Thanks, Thanks!"
I said I haven't seen your wife
He said, "Yeah well, let's just say she went on a permanent vacation"
I said, "Really? Whereabouts?"
He said, "She went to visit family in California"
Oh OK
2 weeks later I find out from another neighbor, Phil that Scott sold his wife to the military
I said, "WHAT!!?" ...
#aliens
#fiction
#greed
#scifi
#wife
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3 Comments
Saving Humanity
I jumped into my suit,
to prepare for the big boost.
Chills roll down my spine,
and nerves take over my mind.
Five, four, three, two, one, .......
body shaking, fear awakening.
Thrusters go and rockets flow.
Out of the atmosphere and into space.
The journey begins to stop humanities fate.
Passing stars at quantum speeds,
I explore planets in a stellar breeze.
Another planet under way,
a sense of something strange directly ahead.
A sort of lunatic fringe I see floating out in front of me.
...
to prepare for the big boost.
Chills roll down my spine,
and nerves take over my mind.
Five, four, three, two, one, .......
body shaking, fear awakening.
Thrusters go and rockets flow.
Out of the atmosphere and into space.
The journey begins to stop humanities fate.
Passing stars at quantum speeds,
I explore planets in a stellar breeze.
Another planet under way,
a sense of something strange directly ahead.
A sort of lunatic fringe I see floating out in front of me.
...
#aliens
#scifi
#ShortStory #universe
#ShortStory #universe
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