Poems About Sacrifice Seeking Honest Critique
#sacrifice
LunasChild8
Poem Published
19th Dec 2024 1:05am
19th Dec 2024 1:05am
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The ocean waves keep crashing on the shore
I’ve been told to accept less, but I want more
The moonlight is the only guide that I need; a steady comfort to protect me when I bleed
I write my own destiny; this is what I swore.
Love hurts, but loneliness kills
My goal has been accomplished with the blood that I’ve spilt.
Come and push me into the water; let it ooze in my pores
Even when my lips say “stop”, I keep on wanting more
I’m told that I ask too much, that I should accept what I have
I don’t expect empty souls to ever understand. ...
I’ve been told to accept less, but I want more
The moonlight is the only guide that I need; a steady comfort to protect me when I bleed
I write my own destiny; this is what I swore.
Love hurts, but loneliness kills
My goal has been accomplished with the blood that I’ve spilt.
Come and push me into the water; let it ooze in my pores
Even when my lips say “stop”, I keep on wanting more
I’m told that I ask too much, that I should accept what I have
I don’t expect empty souls to ever understand. ...
#faith
#hope
#rhyming
#sacrifice
#strength
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oldmanG
Poem Published
24th Nov 2024 9:48am
24th Nov 2024 9:48am
Getting Paid
We’re getting paid
We both wake up before the rooster calls
Do our routine don’t want to be late for school
Bell rings class is ending
Head for the locker room where I’m the One
You are in the state championship I’m trying too
All the sudden I’m in the papers and screens
We are colliding with greatness on different pay scales
I am better than you I bring more fans to watch me
You are excellent but not as good as me
And you will disagree
You are a tree that gives me shade but I...
We both wake up before the rooster calls
Do our routine don’t want to be late for school
Bell rings class is ending
Head for the locker room where I’m the One
You are in the state championship I’m trying too
All the sudden I’m in the papers and screens
We are colliding with greatness on different pay scales
I am better than you I bring more fans to watch me
You are excellent but not as good as me
And you will disagree
You are a tree that gives me shade but I...
#men
#motivational
#sacrifice
#sports
#women
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summultima
uma
uma
Poem Published
23rd Nov 2024 8:12am
23rd Nov 2024 8:12am
Ophelia
rues of my maddening hue
trails unto thus beckoning
brook- I drown in melancholic
ecstasy, freeing your demons
trails unto thus beckoning
brook- I drown in melancholic
ecstasy, freeing your demons
#death
#freedom
#identity
#love
#sacrifice
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oldmanG
Poem Published
21st Nov 2024 1:55pm
21st Nov 2024 1:55pm
Assistant to Power
Assistant to Power
You go to school and dig into law principles
I go to school I’m an Apprentice to a Master Plumber
We see each other in social situations
Blacked out pledging the fraternity of yourfamily
So I see you in the library but you’re reading the comics
I’m on the stone looking to master Plumbing
As time passes you’re clerking for the Supreme Court
I worked for all of this I Mastered Plumbing
You were drunk and sleeping, pulling down your pants now you’re on the Supreme Court ...
You go to school and dig into law principles
I go to school I’m an Apprentice to a Master Plumber
We see each other in social situations
Blacked out pledging the fraternity of yourfamily
So I see you in the library but you’re reading the comics
I’m on the stone looking to master Plumbing
As time passes you’re clerking for the Supreme Court
I worked for all of this I Mastered Plumbing
You were drunk and sleeping, pulling down your pants now you’re on the Supreme Court ...
#job
#sacrifice
#water
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MidnightSonneteer
Poem Published
17th Oct 2024 5:29pm
17th Oct 2024 5:29pm
Thanatomaniacs
Too much they think about impending death
when they might instead embrace life and love
just like the poets do with every breath
that all life lovers have ever heard of.
So close your ears to the man with the gun
who prattles on about caliber force.
He! He...is the devil we should shun
and all of his weapon loving discourse
confirming to us that he thinks it's neat
to blast his brothers into kingdom dumb
as smoking piles of once human meat
certain to upset his once happy mum!
Life by and for the sword is...
when they might instead embrace life and love
just like the poets do with every breath
that all life lovers have ever heard of.
So close your ears to the man with the gun
who prattles on about caliber force.
He! He...is the devil we should shun
and all of his weapon loving discourse
confirming to us that he thinks it's neat
to blast his brothers into kingdom dumb
as smoking piles of once human meat
certain to upset his once happy mum!
Life by and for the sword is...
#hypocrisy
#lies
#sacrifice #tragedy
#sacrifice #tragedy
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Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
9th Oct 2024 7:27pm
9th Oct 2024 7:27pm
Ishtar's Feast
It's all for Ishtar, the sacrifice will soon be complete
He needs to find a virgin, for his Egyptian bloody feast
He's gonna rip out her tongue, slice off her face, gouge out her eyes
The blood will continue to flow
When it drips from her beautiful mouth
Getting ready for the ghastly blood feast
He's obsessed with her death, obsessed with her blood, obsessed with her demise,
a great big blood feast
He's gonna cut out her heart, rip out her spleen, pull out her liver
the blood keeps flowing
All that pure blood
It's so...
He needs to find a virgin, for his Egyptian bloody feast
He's gonna rip out her tongue, slice off her face, gouge out her eyes
The blood will continue to flow
When it drips from her beautiful mouth
Getting ready for the ghastly blood feast
He's obsessed with her death, obsessed with her blood, obsessed with her demise,
a great big blood feast
He's gonna cut out her heart, rip out her spleen, pull out her liver
the blood keeps flowing
All that pure blood
It's so...
#historical
#horror
#sacrifice
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4 Comments
not_accounted_for
Poem Published
7th Oct 2024 3:06am
7th Oct 2024 3:06am
To All The People I've Known Before
I've got to know some people, they're nice.
Made a few friends once or twice.
But years they keep on fading
And my life just goes on changing.
The years they kept on slipping past.
The friends I made, they never last.
I had to push them further away
For my future, they couldn't stay.
But does future come in front of
The spell love casts?
I wish I could look back
And see them once more
Because the fact is
those people I adored.
Maybe I could
In another life.
I made an opportunity, ...
Made a few friends once or twice.
But years they keep on fading
And my life just goes on changing.
The years they kept on slipping past.
The friends I made, they never last.
I had to push them further away
For my future, they couldn't stay.
But does future come in front of
The spell love casts?
I wish I could look back
And see them once more
Because the fact is
those people I adored.
Maybe I could
In another life.
I made an opportunity, ...
#dreams
#loneliness
#MovingOn
#risk
#sacrifice
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fianaturie8
Fia Naturie
Fia Naturie
Poem Published
6th Oct 2024 3:08am
6th Oct 2024 3:08am
The Spider and her lover the Fly
Spider
I have been sitting here for hours, spinning my silken threads, waiting for him to fly by.
He has promised me countless numbers of times that tonight will be the night that he will visit me. I made sure that the threads were glistening in their finest diamonds and my legs. Oh my legs are as sexy as can be. There are eight long and lean made for flexibility. To entice and invite him into my web, you see.
Fly
How do I get wrapped up with these crazy dames? I mean I flew past one time and she caught me. The romp with the twists and the turns....
I have been sitting here for hours, spinning my silken threads, waiting for him to fly by.
He has promised me countless numbers of times that tonight will be the night that he will visit me. I made sure that the threads were glistening in their finest diamonds and my legs. Oh my legs are as sexy as can be. There are eight long and lean made for flexibility. To entice and invite him into my web, you see.
Fly
How do I get wrapped up with these crazy dames? I mean I flew past one time and she caught me. The romp with the twists and the turns....
#FirstLove
#obsession
#sacrifice
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oldmanG
Poem Published
4th Oct 2024 5:47am
4th Oct 2024 5:47am
Suddenly it Happens
It happened to sudden
I didn’t see it coming
It crept up on me and stained my family
Lost one that I love
I can’t breathe I’m hyperventilating
Just lowered one I love
But it happens real sudden
Before you can get your balance
Doesn’t make it any easier
I just lost someone that I love and adore
Didn’t think it be this soon
So I am not prepared for this
But don’t get down everyone has their day
Think about how you used to laugh and sing about
Don’t know how to end this song
Because...
I didn’t see it coming
It crept up on me and stained my family
Lost one that I love
I can’t breathe I’m hyperventilating
Just lowered one I love
But it happens real sudden
Before you can get your balance
Doesn’t make it any easier
I just lost someone that I love and adore
Didn’t think it be this soon
So I am not prepared for this
But don’t get down everyone has their day
Think about how you used to laugh and sing about
Don’t know how to end this song
Because...
#karma
#love
#sacrifice #support
#sacrifice #support
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oldmanG
Poem Published
3rd Oct 2024 1:36pm
3rd Oct 2024 1:36pm
Sleep Dream
Send me off on petals made of metal
I lay wake I’m not dreaming
You go to sleep I look after you
I try to sleep but awake is calling me
You go to sleep when I’m not looking
I dream you sleep within me
I wake up screaming while you sleep next to me
I’m dreaming for both of us
You wake while I roll over and tuck under covers
Coffee is brewing while I’m sleeping
Your caffeine keeps me alive
Pulsing in my veins you arouse me
I sleep while you work awake
...
I lay wake I’m not dreaming
You go to sleep I look after you
I try to sleep but awake is calling me
You go to sleep when I’m not looking
I dream you sleep within me
I wake up screaming while you sleep next to me
I’m dreaming for both of us
You wake while I roll over and tuck under covers
Coffee is brewing while I’m sleeping
Your caffeine keeps me alive
Pulsing in my veins you arouse me
I sleep while you work awake
...
#dreams
#love
#patience #sacrifice
#patience #sacrifice
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oldmanG
Poem Published
1st Oct 2024 4:28am
1st Oct 2024 4:28am
Te Te Te TENNESSEE
Te Te Te TENNESSEE
This is the land where we come from
Democracy dyin in the Sun
Run for a seat and get elected
Stand in the well and get ejected
Just for standing with the people
Who put me in place
decided my race
Te Te Te Tennessee
Little justice for me if I live in Tennessee
Injustice killin our babies
God forbid if I stand up
Rising sun of Tennessee
Democracy dies in the valley
This will not stand in the Sun
9 yrs old and in a pine box
Seems like Te Te...
This is the land where we come from
Democracy dyin in the Sun
Run for a seat and get elected
Stand in the well and get ejected
Just for standing with the people
Who put me in place
decided my race
Te Te Te Tennessee
Little justice for me if I live in Tennessee
Injustice killin our babies
God forbid if I stand up
Rising sun of Tennessee
Democracy dies in the valley
This will not stand in the Sun
9 yrs old and in a pine box
Seems like Te Te...
#apathy
#hate
#sacrifice #sadness
#sacrifice #sadness
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cabcool
Poem Published
22nd Sep 2024 4:38pm
22nd Sep 2024 4:38pm
compromise
The purpose of human life is to serve, and to show compassion
and the will to help others.”—Albert Schweitzer
it is unwise
to compromise
the truth,
whether the time
be of your prime
or youth.
the ways of man,
whether by plan
or chance,
mark well from birth,
upon the earth,
his dance.
it is unkind
to wear a blind
passport
to shield the eye
from those who cry:
in short,
turn not aside
those who must ride
the storm;
reach out and bless
those who know less ...
and the will to help others.”—Albert Schweitzer
it is unwise
to compromise
the truth,
whether the time
be of your prime
or youth.
the ways of man,
whether by plan
or chance,
mark well from birth,
upon the earth,
his dance.
it is unkind
to wear a blind
passport
to shield the eye
from those who cry:
in short,
turn not aside
those who must ride
the storm;
reach out and bless
those who know less ...
#CallToAction
#choices
#kindness
#LifeGoals
#sacrifice
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