Poems About the Night Seeking Honest Critique
#night
Poems about the night seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Flight
**** flight *****
here comes the time again
for ethereal flowers to fly
for the poet to watch and sigh,
to only behold without asking why?
here's a dandelion about to fade away
the music dissolving into atmosphere
with the slightest touch of the breeze
and your heart takes flight overseas
carried aloft, into heaven's relief
stripped from any mundane grief
entranced the feel, a delightful sheer
and quietly the dark leaves the night
a bright tide, then illuminates the light ...
here comes the time again
for ethereal flowers to fly
for the poet to watch and sigh,
to only behold without asking why?
here's a dandelion about to fade away
the music dissolving into atmosphere
with the slightest touch of the breeze
and your heart takes flight overseas
carried aloft, into heaven's relief
stripped from any mundane grief
entranced the feel, a delightful sheer
and quietly the dark leaves the night
a bright tide, then illuminates the light ...
#dawn
#morning
#night
#spring
#summer
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april songs (Theme 3): attitudes of life 1
april song 21—all my fears
some days i hide behind my pillow, scared
of phantoms that have mocked my life and jeered.
i tremble when cold night begins to creep
into the quiet recess of my sleep.
for shapes and sounds are not what they appear:
their minion songs and dances are severe.
but bogeyman shall die a sudden death,
for i shall strangulate his parting breath.
my father says his substance is surreal:
gross emptiness is easy to repeal.
tonight, i shall be waiting in my bed
to show him who’s alive and...
some days i hide behind my pillow, scared
of phantoms that have mocked my life and jeered.
i tremble when cold night begins to creep
into the quiet recess of my sleep.
for shapes and sounds are not what they appear:
their minion songs and dances are severe.
but bogeyman shall die a sudden death,
for i shall strangulate his parting breath.
my father says his substance is surreal:
gross emptiness is easy to repeal.
tonight, i shall be waiting in my bed
to show him who’s alive and...
#anxiety
#fear
#LifeCycle
#NaPoWriMo2024
#night
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Please Say Yes tonight
This is the new version of "Don't Say No Tonight."
Darling, I’ve fallen in love with you
You have full control of my heart
I told you my greatest desire
Oh baby, I belong to you exclusively
My heart will love you endlessly
If words were powerful enough,
You’d be my ladylove today
Come to me before I fall apart
Darling, please say yes tonight
All I’m asking for is your love
I’ve revealed my feelings for you,
So I’ll wait patiently while you decide
Darling, I’ve fallen in love with you
You have full control of my heart
I told you my greatest desire
Oh baby, I belong to you exclusively
My heart will love you endlessly
If words were powerful enough,
You’d be my ladylove today
Come to me before I fall apart
Darling, please say yes tonight
All I’m asking for is your love
I’ve revealed my feelings for you,
So I’ll wait patiently while you decide
#FallingInLove
#love
#night #passion
#night #passion
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Nyctophobia
When an impressionable child
darkness I could not abide
Every night when out went the light
petrified I lay in bed
Feeling so vulnerable, so isolated,
Left alone, with no protector
for they were fast asleep
or gone to heaven.
My only safe haven,
an impervious blanket fortress.
When overcome by fear
of creeping, crawling, slithering things;
the gnarly monster hands
reaching up from under the bed
my skinny neck to wring
I would frantically dive
deep under the covers.
Where, yes, it was darker still ...
darkness I could not abide
Every night when out went the light
petrified I lay in bed
Feeling so vulnerable, so isolated,
Left alone, with no protector
for they were fast asleep
or gone to heaven.
My only safe haven,
an impervious blanket fortress.
When overcome by fear
of creeping, crawling, slithering things;
the gnarly monster hands
reaching up from under the bed
my skinny neck to wring
I would frantically dive
deep under the covers.
Where, yes, it was darker still ...
#anxiety
#fear
#NaPoWriMo2024
#night
#peace
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Floating adrift
I speak to you every single day
Through my lyrics, my rhythms
The messages I convey
You may think that I don’t notice you you see
When in-fact you’re all around me
You’re all I can and do see
I’m floating adrift and it’s hard to land
I’m drifting though a dream and
It’s not consciously planned
Don’t you dare sit there and try to pretend
That we can’t both see
Where this is gonna end
Why don’t you just sit tight
Whilst I illuminate your night
From the dark, from the dust...
Through my lyrics, my rhythms
The messages I convey
You may think that I don’t notice you you see
When in-fact you’re all around me
You’re all I can and do see
I’m floating adrift and it’s hard to land
I’m drifting though a dream and
It’s not consciously planned
Don’t you dare sit there and try to pretend
That we can’t both see
Where this is gonna end
Why don’t you just sit tight
Whilst I illuminate your night
From the dark, from the dust...
#dreams
#NaPoWriMo2024
#night
#support
#WritingPoetry
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Clandestine Mission
As I held my breath to LISTEN,
all was still, except the GLISTEN
of moonlight on the door. These ARE
the ways that I could make or MAR
my task. My cloak provided SLIGHT
protection from the freezing NIGHT.
Crept past the barn where horses NEIGH
and quickly loaded up the DRAY.
Now read this from a different angle:
take the capitalised words; untangle;
the eight initials you will find
will surely put you in the mind
of why I was above suspicion
as my plan came to fruition.
What was I?
[Clue: C C V V C C C C]
all was still, except the GLISTEN
of moonlight on the door. These ARE
the ways that I could make or MAR
my task. My cloak provided SLIGHT
protection from the freezing NIGHT.
Crept past the barn where horses NEIGH
and quickly loaded up the DRAY.
Now read this from a different angle:
take the capitalised words; untangle;
the eight initials you will find
will surely put you in the mind
of why I was above suspicion
as my plan came to fruition.
What was I?
[Clue: C C V V C C C C]
#moon
#NaPoWriMo2024
#night #secrets
#night #secrets
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Winds blow
Wings aglow,
In the night they glance, so free,
Winds ablow,
Stars above that softly glow,
Butterflies in twilight's trance,
Bats in flight, in starry chance,
Wings aglow.
In the night they glance, so free,
Winds ablow,
Stars above that softly glow,
Butterflies in twilight's trance,
Bats in flight, in starry chance,
Wings aglow.
#dark
#dreams
#night
#stars
#wind
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Little Stars
Fireflies shine
Like little Stars
Dressing up
The night
Like little Stars
Dressing up
The night
#stars
#night
#nature
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8 Comments
The voices
I say goodnight to my beloved friends.
And pray the best for them.
And let the voices slowly leave as they drift into dreams of greater things.
But then,
The soft sad voices start to sing.
And my mind rolls to lull into sleep, awake but lost in steamy streets.
They don't know what I think when they leave.
But I do.
They don't think when I leave.
But I do.
I drift into the deep dark of evil marked flashes and slow meltdowns of mindlessness.
What if I leave.
What if I don't come back?
And so I remember to breathe again, and air...
And pray the best for them.
And let the voices slowly leave as they drift into dreams of greater things.
But then,
The soft sad voices start to sing.
And my mind rolls to lull into sleep, awake but lost in steamy streets.
They don't know what I think when they leave.
But I do.
They don't think when I leave.
But I do.
I drift into the deep dark of evil marked flashes and slow meltdowns of mindlessness.
What if I leave.
What if I don't come back?
And so I remember to breathe again, and air...
#friendship
#night
#memories #SelfReflection
#memories #SelfReflection
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Olive Trees, Lunar Eclipse, Cowardice
Olive Trees, Lunar Eclipse, Uselessness.
They say 'Seek out higher ground before sunset,
let the eye scan west as the Sun is skipped
over our skyline, into the unending abyss.'
Let it envelope you, in the cold, seven fifty five,
while someone else's seven fifty five consists
of bombs and starvation and grief and bloodshed.
We are inconsequential, we are entitled,
nothing like keys awaiting their ancestral home.
Our dalliance with life is trivial,
and yet, by some grace, reaching into the darkness,
the split second touch with an...
They say 'Seek out higher ground before sunset,
let the eye scan west as the Sun is skipped
over our skyline, into the unending abyss.'
Let it envelope you, in the cold, seven fifty five,
while someone else's seven fifty five consists
of bombs and starvation and grief and bloodshed.
We are inconsequential, we are entitled,
nothing like keys awaiting their ancestral home.
Our dalliance with life is trivial,
and yet, by some grace, reaching into the darkness,
the split second touch with an...
#dreams
#moon
#night
#sleep
#nightmares
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Betrayal
The Day I returned
Awakened
Harmony divided
In my faith
Past memories
God is who I hate
Searching the betrayal
Shadows of light
Silent Tomorrow's
Endless night's
Awakened
Harmony divided
In my faith
Past memories
God is who I hate
Searching the betrayal
Shadows of light
Silent Tomorrow's
Endless night's
#betrayal
#night
#religion
#spiritual
#rhyming
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12 Comments
Whispers of the Azure Sea
Beneath the meeting of sky and sea,
A realm of wonder, where dreams roam free.
Endless azure, canvas vast and wide,
Whispers of adventure, secrets to confide.
Sailors' tales in salty air do weave,
Islands shrouded in mist, where mermaids cleave.
Glimmering sirens, songs that pierce the heart,
Guiding ships to shores where legends start.
Celestial vessels, masts aglow with stardust's light,
Sail through constellations in the dead of night.
Galaxies unfurl, fate's silken thread,
Comets streak across the heavens, where...
A realm of wonder, where dreams roam free.
Endless azure, canvas vast and wide,
Whispers of adventure, secrets to confide.
Sailors' tales in salty air do weave,
Islands shrouded in mist, where mermaids cleave.
Glimmering sirens, songs that pierce the heart,
Guiding ships to shores where legends start.
Celestial vessels, masts aglow with stardust's light,
Sail through constellations in the dead of night.
Galaxies unfurl, fate's silken thread,
Comets streak across the heavens, where...
#motivational
#inspirational
#sea
#sky
#night
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DU Poetry : Poems About the Night Seeking Honest Critique