Poems About Myself Seeking Honest Critique
#myself
Poems about myself seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
MYSTERIOUS_GIRL
Lizzy_3164
Lizzy_3164
Poem Published
4th Nov 2024 2:46am
4th Nov 2024 2:46am
DO MY PICTURES LIE
What if i told you my pictures lie
That what you see on the outside is an illusion
That if the camera could capture the truth
You'd see many tears falling down my cheeks
~
If only the flash brought you within this mind
Then you'd witness the darkness here inside
How the shadows are my only sanctuary
That the light has not been able to build a home
~
You'd see the walls of my own design
The ones i originally built to keep the darkness in
Blissfully unaware that i would get trapped too
I guess that's the price i paid for...
That what you see on the outside is an illusion
That if the camera could capture the truth
You'd see many tears falling down my cheeks
~
If only the flash brought you within this mind
Then you'd witness the darkness here inside
How the shadows are my only sanctuary
That the light has not been able to build a home
~
You'd see the walls of my own design
The ones i originally built to keep the darkness in
Blissfully unaware that i would get trapped too
I guess that's the price i paid for...
#myself
#SelfReflection
109 reads
5 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
27th Oct 2024 4:22am
27th Oct 2024 4:22am
I cry too much even
I cry too much even
When I don’t why and talk too much
But you won’t stop me from spreading
My Truth it’s my True even if you can’t see
Everything you’d imagine but it’s my dream
Can’t slip between the covers of my soul
I know just which way to go
Stand upon my demons and say
Stand down I can’t see them
They are blemishes of my life
But they don’t say who I Am
But I wear them like a badge of honor
Who I am and who I want to become
Step aside all the hate ...
When I don’t why and talk too much
But you won’t stop me from spreading
My Truth it’s my True even if you can’t see
Everything you’d imagine but it’s my dream
Can’t slip between the covers of my soul
I know just which way to go
Stand upon my demons and say
Stand down I can’t see them
They are blemishes of my life
But they don’t say who I Am
But I wear them like a badge of honor
Who I am and who I want to become
Step aside all the hate ...
#confessional
#mirror
#myself
70 reads
0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
25th Oct 2024 4:45am
25th Oct 2024 4:45am
Teeth
Alien Predator within me
My teeth are sinking into my core
My tail is razor sharp but predator has weapons
Teeth to teeth Jaw to jaw pull us both under me
Going down the depths of misery
Still clamped jaw to jaw and soul to devil
Stretcher lifts me up takes me
Back down where I started in me
Eyes are closed I feel my sins
Building a coffin of my deeds
Predator alive alien within me breathing
We are predators of innocence
Get you close enough to sink in
My...
My teeth are sinking into my core
My tail is razor sharp but predator has weapons
Teeth to teeth Jaw to jaw pull us both under me
Going down the depths of misery
Still clamped jaw to jaw and soul to devil
Stretcher lifts me up takes me
Back down where I started in me
Eyes are closed I feel my sins
Building a coffin of my deeds
Predator alive alien within me breathing
We are predators of innocence
Get you close enough to sink in
My...
#aliens
#myself
#shadows #symbolism
#shadows #symbolism
76 reads
0 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
25th Oct 2024 4:21am
25th Oct 2024 4:21am
Underneath
Bones on display
Skeletons in the closet
Heart on sleeve
Naked underneath
Skeletons in the closet
Heart on sleeve
Naked underneath
#confessional
#mirror
#myself
69 reads
0 Comments
Kristinawarrior56
Poem Published
12th Oct 2024 6:28am
12th Oct 2024 6:28am
Prison, here I come!
#confusion
#memories
#myself
84 reads
4 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
11th Oct 2024 2:23pm
11th Oct 2024 2:23pm
Job Application
How many mornings can there still be ahead?
How much morning do you still want to find in my body?
Forgive me for asking you unusual questions...
Forgive me for being out of the ordinary!
Write me endless letters, when we are far away,
with endless letters and diverse meanings.
Stop being mean to me for so long.
Let me wake up far from the edge of the bed...
For such a long time and so often for no time at all.
How much morning do you still want to find in my body?
Forgive me for asking you unusual questions...
Forgive me for being out of the ordinary!
Write me endless letters, when we are far away,
with endless letters and diverse meanings.
Stop being mean to me for so long.
Let me wake up far from the edge of the bed...
For such a long time and so often for no time at all.
#confessional
#identity
#myself
#PersonalGrowth
#SelfReflection
99 reads
4 Comments
PoetSpeak
Poem Published
7th Oct 2024 3:07pm
7th Oct 2024 3:07pm
New Collage - Urban Folk Art
I’ve decided I’m a folk artist
Self-taught
Urban
Primal
Tribal
Primitive
Gritty
Cityscape
Only thing missing is the clothesline …
Self-taught
Urban
Primal
Tribal
Primitive
Gritty
Cityscape
Only thing missing is the clothesline …
#art
#identity
#myself
#philosophical
#TruthOfLife
170 reads
22 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
7th Oct 2024 12:04pm
7th Oct 2024 12:04pm
Sea Me
I set off into the sea
To see a real part of me
Winds start picking up
Sails are swept under and above
White crest of ocean
Mixed with jagged rocks
Think I can ride out the storm of me
But I’m crazy I’m a tidal wave
Churn through the storms
That come upon my vessel
storm picks up winds adjust
All I see is white caps diving into the black
A moment of calm before my storm
Realize this is my day of my being
Waves sing high and crash like a symphony
Of all things...
To see a real part of me
Winds start picking up
Sails are swept under and above
White crest of ocean
Mixed with jagged rocks
Think I can ride out the storm of me
But I’m crazy I’m a tidal wave
Churn through the storms
That come upon my vessel
storm picks up winds adjust
All I see is white caps diving into the black
A moment of calm before my storm
Realize this is my day of my being
Waves sing high and crash like a symphony
Of all things...
#humankind
#myself
#sea #storm
#sea #storm
92 reads
2 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
5th Oct 2024 5:00pm
5th Oct 2024 5:00pm
Escape Me
Escape Me
How do you runaway from something
When you don’t know what you’re running from
Deep in me somewhere in a dark crevice
Is something that I can’t face for that face is me
Down in the basement of my soul
The lights are out and I don’t have a flashlight
Stumble back up the stairs of my mind
Pages fall off a calendar the leaves turn gold
The seasons change but nothings changed in me
Groundhog Day again with no peace for my being
So how do I run away from myself
...
How do you runaway from something
When you don’t know what you’re running from
Deep in me somewhere in a dark crevice
Is something that I can’t face for that face is me
Down in the basement of my soul
The lights are out and I don’t have a flashlight
Stumble back up the stairs of my mind
Pages fall off a calendar the leaves turn gold
The seasons change but nothings changed in me
Groundhog Day again with no peace for my being
So how do I run away from myself
...
#confessional
#confusion
#emptiness
#mirror
#myself
81 reads
0 Comments
PoetSpeak
Poem Published
26th Sep 2024 4:18am
26th Sep 2024 4:18am
Untitled 408
Using a razor till I cut myself
What does that tell you
Travel by night
Just to buy eggs
Organic if you must know
Fame was good
Always got good tables in restaurants
On the subway I'm a regular Joe
Writers get away with that
No annoying fans
No autographs
You're sexy
I'm a thug
It's all good
I wear a wind up watch
Stainless steel
Just like my heart
What does that tell you
Travel by night
Just to buy eggs
Organic if you must know
Fame was good
Always got good tables in restaurants
On the subway I'm a regular Joe
Writers get away with that
No annoying fans
No autographs
You're sexy
I'm a thug
It's all good
I wear a wind up watch
Stainless steel
Just like my heart
#confessional
#identity
#myself
#TruthOfLife
#WritingPoetry
159 reads
23 Comments
Results_May_Vary
Poem Published
19th Sep 2024 00:36am
19th Sep 2024 00:36am
Ovis
i am just a simple whisper
trust me to not make a whimper
i am just a forgotten liar
just me to burn in the fire
lie awake to pass the time
tell a lie to punish mine
show me
how to love and make this dissipate
show me
how to raise you up and hold you there
take your sin and eat your hate
believe you know and think you care
i am nothing but a whisper
trust me to bend a knee and lend an ear
waiting to take your daily order
i am just a servant, i am your whore
take me wherever your hell may guide ...
trust me to not make a whimper
i am just a forgotten liar
just me to burn in the fire
lie awake to pass the time
tell a lie to punish mine
show me
how to love and make this dissipate
show me
how to raise you up and hold you there
take your sin and eat your hate
believe you know and think you care
i am nothing but a whisper
trust me to bend a knee and lend an ear
waiting to take your daily order
i am just a servant, i am your whore
take me wherever your hell may guide ...
#family
#myself
#parent #relationships
#parent #relationships
108 reads
0 Comments
MYSTERIOUS_GIRL
Lizzy_3164
Lizzy_3164
Poem Published
17th Sep 2024 1:28am
17th Sep 2024 1:28am
Angel Of Death
Angel Of Death
Ive been feeling kind of disconnected
from my mind a lot these days
Its like I cant seem to shut the voices off
I cant get them to behave
I'm not really sure how much more
of this shit I can even take
Before this mask that I am forced
to wear just disintegrates
And losing family doesn't help
So now Im scaling the edge of a skyscraper
And no ones screaming save her
So Im wavering back and forth
between this life or something greater
Taking steps to reach the top
And Ill slip and fall if I ever...
Ive been feeling kind of disconnected
from my mind a lot these days
Its like I cant seem to shut the voices off
I cant get them to behave
I'm not really sure how much more
of this shit I can even take
Before this mask that I am forced
to wear just disintegrates
And losing family doesn't help
So now Im scaling the edge of a skyscraper
And no ones screaming save her
So Im wavering back and forth
between this life or something greater
Taking steps to reach the top
And Ill slip and fall if I ever...
#anger
#myself
#SelfReflection
186 reads
3 Comments
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