Poems About Myself Seeking Honest Critique
#myself
Poems about myself seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
My pasts departed
I feel up
I feel down
My minds scattered all around
Am I dreaming?
Or am I scheming?
Oh how I’m floating
On the edge of reason
I feel lost
I feel found
I’m overwhelmed
My hearts unbound
Am I flying?
Or am I falling?
Oh how can one know
What they are feeling?
Is this true?
Is this false?
I’m lost for words
What’s my default
Am I right?
Or am I wrong?
Oh do I have the strength
To truly be strong?
Can I give?
Can I take?
Am I ready
If it’s all a...
I feel down
My minds scattered all around
Am I dreaming?
Or am I scheming?
Oh how I’m floating
On the edge of reason
I feel lost
I feel found
I’m overwhelmed
My hearts unbound
Am I flying?
Or am I falling?
Oh how can one know
What they are feeling?
Is this true?
Is this false?
I’m lost for words
What’s my default
Am I right?
Or am I wrong?
Oh do I have the strength
To truly be strong?
Can I give?
Can I take?
Am I ready
If it’s all a...
#confessional
#myself
#SelfReflection #PersonalGrowth
#SelfReflection #PersonalGrowth
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Fantasy
You are in the fantasy
You are in the dream
Dreams become the reality
Reality is a façade
You are the momentum
You are the fire, you are the flame
Passion, desire, love
Ignites the world again
Close your eyes and hush little girl
All will be well again tomorrow
Just live, laugh, love and all of the above
For you will live to see another day
You are in the dream
Dreams become the reality
Reality is a façade
You are the momentum
You are the fire, you are the flame
Passion, desire, love
Ignites the world again
Close your eyes and hush little girl
All will be well again tomorrow
Just live, laugh, love and all of the above
For you will live to see another day
#dreams
#myself
#LifeCycle #SelfReflection
#LifeCycle #SelfReflection
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Piercing
The reality of a situation
Means sometimes letting go
Letting go of people
Letting go of friends
Letting go of a version of yourself
A person whom you thought yourself to be
It’s hard
You wanna hold on
But you’re just not her anymore
She’s no longer serving you
It’s like a breakup with yourself
How do you turn your back on yourself like that?
You feel sad
Like you’ve let yourself down
But really, it needs to be
It has to happen
You can’t fit into a box that’s too small anymore
You need...
Means sometimes letting go
Letting go of people
Letting go of friends
Letting go of a version of yourself
A person whom you thought yourself to be
It’s hard
You wanna hold on
But you’re just not her anymore
She’s no longer serving you
It’s like a breakup with yourself
How do you turn your back on yourself like that?
You feel sad
Like you’ve let yourself down
But really, it needs to be
It has to happen
You can’t fit into a box that’s too small anymore
You need...
#LifeStruggles
#myself
#SelfReflection #emotions
#SelfReflection #emotions
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5 Comments
Beyond the Veil
Beyond the Veil
By:
Joshua Jamal
I represent myself with confidence and humility/ I'm a gentleman with many gifts and a marvel to see/ one looks at me and see a handsome king/ but beyond what I represent so well that's hard to see/ is a damaged boy/ who's in internal conflict with his emotions looking to break free/ and in desperation for his "queen"/ due to exhaustion of fighting against the things/ that are within/ What things are those you ask, well where should I begin/ Besides that/ the answer would set where I'm taking you in a different...
By:
Joshua Jamal
I represent myself with confidence and humility/ I'm a gentleman with many gifts and a marvel to see/ one looks at me and see a handsome king/ but beyond what I represent so well that's hard to see/ is a damaged boy/ who's in internal conflict with his emotions looking to break free/ and in desperation for his "queen"/ due to exhaustion of fighting against the things/ that are within/ What things are those you ask, well where should I begin/ Besides that/ the answer would set where I'm taking you in a different...
#myself
#SelfReflection
#SelfDiscovery
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3 years a stalker
Waiting, watching, preying, stalking.
You had me in your clutches
You had me in your trap
No matter which route I head
There’s no way getting back
Chasing, coursing, tracking, hunting.
You broke me just as you wished
You broke me beyond repair
However I try to fix this
Forever in your lair
Taunting, teasing, crushing, squeezing.
Wanted me all to yourself
Wanted me as your slave
Well you’ve chosen the wrong girl
I’ll never be yours babe
Grabbing, choking, screaming,...
You had me in your clutches
You had me in your trap
No matter which route I head
There’s no way getting back
Chasing, coursing, tracking, hunting.
You broke me just as you wished
You broke me beyond repair
However I try to fix this
Forever in your lair
Taunting, teasing, crushing, squeezing.
Wanted me all to yourself
Wanted me as your slave
Well you’ve chosen the wrong girl
I’ll never be yours babe
Grabbing, choking, screaming,...
#abuse
#myself
#SelfReflection #manipulation
#SelfReflection #manipulation
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Losing my marbles
I’m trapped inside the ceiling
I’m trapped inside the wall
I’m trapped inside the windows
I’m trapped inside the floor
Can you hear me screaming?
Can you hear my moan?
I’m crying out for assistance
But no-one hears my call!
I’m trapped inside the mirror
I’m trapped inside the hall
I’m trapped inside the table
I’m trapped inside the door
I don’t know where I’m going
I don’t know where I am
I have lost all of my marbles
Then found them all again!
I’m trapped inside the wall
I’m trapped inside the windows
I’m trapped inside the floor
Can you hear me screaming?
Can you hear my moan?
I’m crying out for assistance
But no-one hears my call!
I’m trapped inside the mirror
I’m trapped inside the hall
I’m trapped inside the table
I’m trapped inside the door
I don’t know where I’m going
I don’t know where I am
I have lost all of my marbles
Then found them all again!
#funny
#myself
#SelfReflection #surreal
#SelfReflection #surreal
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Again and Again
Feeling like I have something to gain,
I dust my pencil off again.
Some letters march to their end
because I have writer’s block again.
Other letters go against the grain;
they are looking to start a war again.
Banding together, they do what they intend;
now I am crying from what they said again.
Here I am harvesting my pain,
hoping to use it to fix myself again.
Making a stand, then I have to pretend
to get my bearings and have a grip again.
Seems organic, and I feel perfectly sane.
No, I do not want to fail again.
Yes, I...
I dust my pencil off again.
Some letters march to their end
because I have writer’s block again.
Other letters go against the grain;
they are looking to start a war again.
Banding together, they do what they intend;
now I am crying from what they said again.
Here I am harvesting my pain,
hoping to use it to fix myself again.
Making a stand, then I have to pretend
to get my bearings and have a grip again.
Seems organic, and I feel perfectly sane.
No, I do not want to fail again.
Yes, I...
#rhyming
#MentalHealth
#myself
#SelfReflection
#FeelingLost
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20 Comments
Dentist
Hoi hoi
Hope this finds you well…
This time, another Dutch/English one:
Dentist
It was in late December around
The time the Savior was born
That my dentist kindly asked me
Gus, didn’t your girlfriend shave?
Tandarts
Het was eind december rond
De tijd dat de Heiland was geboren
Dat mijn tandarts mij vriendelijk vroeg
Gus, heeft je vriendin zich niet geschoren?
Hope you’ll like it!
Kind regards, Gus
Hope this finds you well…
This time, another Dutch/English one:
Dentist
It was in late December around
The time the Savior was born
That my dentist kindly asked me
Gus, didn’t your girlfriend shave?
Tandarts
Het was eind december rond
De tijd dat de Heiland was geboren
Dat mijn tandarts mij vriendelijk vroeg
Gus, heeft je vriendin zich niet geschoren?
Hope you’ll like it!
Kind regards, Gus
#myself
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IMPERVIOUS TO BORDERS (mid 1990's- early 2000's; Galveston Island Texas)
i am a color
moving through borders
though seldom seen
or known
some borders are set
some are unmarked
some borders are free
and then sometimes
at times
but not very often
especially these days
anymore
there are no borders at all
therefore i am a color
free from and impervious to
borders boundaries
and other such word label limits
just as i feel i am
equally free from
and impervious to
the thoughts words
judgments...
moving through borders
though seldom seen
or known
some borders are set
some are unmarked
some borders are free
and then sometimes
at times
but not very often
especially these days
anymore
there are no borders at all
therefore i am a color
free from and impervious to
borders boundaries
and other such word label limits
just as i feel i am
equally free from
and impervious to
the thoughts words
judgments...
#identity
#LifeAsAWriter
#myself
#SelfReflection
#acceptance
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Astray
When I need a friend
Are any of you there?
When I need to be held
Do you just stand and stare?
When I need the answers
Do any of you speak?
When I’m lost in myself
Do any of you make a peep?
When I’m completely lost
Can you guide the way?
I’ve taken the wrong path
I’m filled with total dismay
When my whole body feels empty
Can you help me to feel found?
I don’t know what to do
I’m astray without you
Can you bring my feet back to the ground?
Are any of you there?
When I need to be held
Do you just stand and stare?
When I need the answers
Do any of you speak?
When I’m lost in myself
Do any of you make a peep?
When I’m completely lost
Can you guide the way?
I’ve taken the wrong path
I’m filled with total dismay
When my whole body feels empty
Can you help me to feel found?
I don’t know what to do
I’m astray without you
Can you bring my feet back to the ground?
#sadness
#loneliness
#confessional
#myself
#SelfReflection
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A decaying soul
I’m down, I’m broken
I’m tattered, decayed
I’m worn, I’m tired
I’m lonely, concaved
I’m weak, I’m lurid
I’m cold, untamed
I’m empty, I’m tainted
I’m lost, delayed
I’m small, I’m malting
I’m taunted, afraid
I’m chained, I’m naked
soulless, depraved
I’m tattered, decayed
I’m worn, I’m tired
I’m lonely, concaved
I’m weak, I’m lurid
I’m cold, untamed
I’m empty, I’m tainted
I’m lost, delayed
I’m small, I’m malting
I’m taunted, afraid
I’m chained, I’m naked
soulless, depraved
#sadness
#confessional
#shame
#myself
#fear
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3 Comments
Delicious Corpse
I was bold enough
to give my contempt to the occasion.
There's a call grabbing attention
I hate any love
which means servitude,
that is in a programming grid,
announcing dates and times
as criminal sentences.
I undo the ties
and the bright smiles of commitment,
and the equipment that fits
like a clown costume;
I look like a clown,
and I resent the song
but I love dancing
which leads straight to the bed,
where laughter is always welcome.
Role invitations appear
like death sentences by the...
to give my contempt to the occasion.
There's a call grabbing attention
I hate any love
which means servitude,
that is in a programming grid,
announcing dates and times
as criminal sentences.
I undo the ties
and the bright smiles of commitment,
and the equipment that fits
like a clown costume;
I look like a clown,
and I resent the song
but I love dancing
which leads straight to the bed,
where laughter is always welcome.
Role invitations appear
like death sentences by the...
#lust
#fall
#mirror
#confessional
#myself
79 reads
5 Comments
DU Poetry : Poems About Myself Seeking Honest Critique