Metaphor by Top Critiquers Poems
#metaphor
My Most Failed Possession
Drunk skunk, wish you weren't the one
Bite my woman's sugarplum
This worthless piggy never made it home
Impulsive, compulsive
Hope you know your so repulsive
Pommel you like the dog you are
Oh honey I can kill you if I want
Kill you with my own two hands
Oh sugar I'm so happy I could kill you
Kill you like a stranger on my land
Because you, You are worthless like an animal
Labeled "rejected" on your back
A presence so offensive, A presence so unreal
So many ways to skin a cat
Everything...
Bite my woman's sugarplum
This worthless piggy never made it home
Impulsive, compulsive
Hope you know your so repulsive
Pommel you like the dog you are
Oh honey I can kill you if I want
Kill you with my own two hands
Oh sugar I'm so happy I could kill you
Kill you like a stranger on my land
Because you, You are worthless like an animal
Labeled "rejected" on your back
A presence so offensive, A presence so unreal
So many ways to skin a cat
Everything...
#kindness
#murder
#evil
#rhyming
#metaphor
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The Poet
The silhouette of her soul glistened
in the falling twilight.
Her eyes were haunted by yearn.
Her heart beating brimming with woven words.
Concealing her secrets in velvet prose.
She lay in a field of midnight sky.
Stars of thoughts a sweet scattering
throughout her mind.
She tears through her fibers of ecstasy
to extract the underlying debris of pain.
A chrysalis of dark euphoria
Starkly alive on the page.
in the falling twilight.
Her eyes were haunted by yearn.
Her heart beating brimming with woven words.
Concealing her secrets in velvet prose.
She lay in a field of midnight sky.
Stars of thoughts a sweet scattering
throughout her mind.
She tears through her fibers of ecstasy
to extract the underlying debris of pain.
A chrysalis of dark euphoria
Starkly alive on the page.
#WritingPoetry
#metaphor
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OLD WRITING TRUTHS NEEDED TODAY
NOTES
As I was going through old files,
papers, and notes from college days
I came across a graduate course
folder with the following writing tips.
1. Don't try to guess what people want to hear
from you; first, figure out what you have to say.
2. Rejection is a sure sign you are a serious writer.
3. Original thoughts flow quickly; borrowed ones don't.
4. Writing can, and does, take place at any time or place.
5. Few critics are on the Bestseller List.
6. You can't write effectively out of ignorance.
7. The first quality of a...
As I was going through old files,
papers, and notes from college days
I came across a graduate course
folder with the following writing tips.
1. Don't try to guess what people want to hear
from you; first, figure out what you have to say.
2. Rejection is a sure sign you are a serious writer.
3. Original thoughts flow quickly; borrowed ones don't.
4. Writing can, and does, take place at any time or place.
5. Few critics are on the Bestseller List.
6. You can't write effectively out of ignorance.
7. The first quality of a...
#rhyming
#dialogue
#uplifting
#emotional
#metaphor
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Closets
Be they small, medium or large,
are cubicles of comfort
Places to hide, think, cry,
Drink…
Safe haven to spew all the dark matter, from my heart of gold
Where no one can diminish
my thoughts and how I say them
From the depth of every level of despair, or joy
I shed my fears and loathsome disdain for every upset I endure
Alone yet, not lonely, I share another’s pain
For when I admit to self hate you’ll be there for me, with me
I am whole again, I am enough~
alone in my zone
...
are cubicles of comfort
Places to hide, think, cry,
Drink…
Safe haven to spew all the dark matter, from my heart of gold
Where no one can diminish
my thoughts and how I say them
From the depth of every level of despair, or joy
I shed my fears and loathsome disdain for every upset I endure
Alone yet, not lonely, I share another’s pain
For when I admit to self hate you’ll be there for me, with me
I am whole again, I am enough~
alone in my zone
...
#alcohol
#confessional
#myself #metaphor
#myself #metaphor
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LOVE OF MY LIFE, I COME
(With apologies to author of the hymn, "O Lamb of God, I come", to whose tune it could also be sung.)
Just as I am, without one plea
For my Adam-like nudity
But warmth of love you have for me,
Love of my life, I come.
Just as I am, without a clout,
What clothes we wore now strewn about.
Desires within now come without.
Love of my life, I come.
Just I am you shall receive
Me, as to each other we cleave.
Your wedding promise I believe,
Love of my life, I come.
Just as I am (the love we own
Has broken...
Just as I am, without one plea
For my Adam-like nudity
But warmth of love you have for me,
Love of my life, I come.
Just as I am, without a clout,
What clothes we wore now strewn about.
Desires within now come without.
Love of my life, I come.
Just I am you shall receive
Me, as to each other we cleave.
Your wedding promise I believe,
Love of my life, I come.
Just as I am (the love we own
Has broken...
#love
#marriage
#lover
#metaphor
#symbolism
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Hiding from the very thing I thought I wanted most
It feels safe here
A gentle escape from fame
My disguise working well
Even the guy at the Deli on the corner
Didn't pay me no mind
I asked for hazelnut instead of regular
It smells great but taste is often lacking
The story of my life wraps around coffee
I tried so hard to achieve greatness
Now hiding from the very thing I thought I wanted most
Everyone wants a piece of your privacy
Selling my soul for headlines was a mistake
I couldn't have known then, to busy with my arrogance
Shit, he put sugar in my...
A gentle escape from fame
My disguise working well
Even the guy at the Deli on the corner
Didn't pay me no mind
I asked for hazelnut instead of regular
It smells great but taste is often lacking
The story of my life wraps around coffee
I tried so hard to achieve greatness
Now hiding from the very thing I thought I wanted most
Everyone wants a piece of your privacy
Selling my soul for headlines was a mistake
I couldn't have known then, to busy with my arrogance
Shit, he put sugar in my...
#identity
#coffee
#myself
#PopCulture
#metaphor
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my song
if there
were
some way
for me
to convince
you
to be
enticed
by
my song,
maybe adorn
myself
with words,
wrap myself
in lines
from poems,
would you
accept
all these
things,
would you
be interested?
were
some way
for me
to convince
you
to be
enticed
by
my song,
maybe adorn
myself
with words,
wrap myself
in lines
from poems,
would you
accept
all these
things,
would you
be interested?
#dialogue
#emotional
#metaphor
#symbolism
#uplifting
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Navigating His Alluring Wind Songs
The taste of his aura knows my name
He whispers to me as he brushes past my lips to softly claim
His strong gust blows my emotions away
Raising my skirt wherever he wants to play
Gently kissing every hair strand, faint caresses to my face
No other force of nature gets that privilege to invade my personal space
Unintentionally letting me know the shadows of his existence when the draft moves
My red ribbon floating in the wind, his souvenir from our just due
In the absence of his poetic affection ...
He whispers to me as he brushes past my lips to softly claim
His strong gust blows my emotions away
Raising my skirt wherever he wants to play
Gently kissing every hair strand, faint caresses to my face
No other force of nature gets that privilege to invade my personal space
Unintentionally letting me know the shadows of his existence when the draft moves
My red ribbon floating in the wind, his souvenir from our just due
In the absence of his poetic affection ...
#wind
#spiritual
#metaphor
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Manipulated Spirits?
Manipulated spirits?
Insinuation hears it.
Particulate the jeering.
Within you hate endearment.
Proliferate appearance.
Administrated weirdness.
Affiliated cheering.
Commiserate sincerest.
Anticipate a leering.
Origination gearing.
Capitulate some fearing.
Your indication clearest.
Initiation nearing.
Delineation dearest.
Deliberated fierceness.
Participation lyrics.
Articulated peering.
Assimilate from Seering.
Reciprocate what's realest.
Equivocation stealing.
...
Insinuation hears it.
Particulate the jeering.
Within you hate endearment.
Proliferate appearance.
Administrated weirdness.
Affiliated cheering.
Commiserate sincerest.
Anticipate a leering.
Origination gearing.
Capitulate some fearing.
Your indication clearest.
Initiation nearing.
Delineation dearest.
Deliberated fierceness.
Participation lyrics.
Articulated peering.
Assimilate from Seering.
Reciprocate what's realest.
Equivocation stealing.
...
#drugs
#metaphor
#morality
#rhyming
#spiritual
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Twisted Highway
How did we end up where we are
thinking only of the past nothing for tomorrow
as if how we used to be is the only way
to get back all and be together
are our tears of sorrow
bandages of what we know
to hurt within our body and soul
to love apart yet live with each other
it’s easy for you to rest and slumber
for me each heartbeat without you is a knife
that seems to stab me every time I want to remember
that living without you is my lot in life
it’s the twists and turns of our fate
to love apart to be near and...
thinking only of the past nothing for tomorrow
as if how we used to be is the only way
to get back all and be together
are our tears of sorrow
bandages of what we know
to hurt within our body and soul
to love apart yet live with each other
it’s easy for you to rest and slumber
for me each heartbeat without you is a knife
that seems to stab me every time I want to remember
that living without you is my lot in life
it’s the twists and turns of our fate
to love apart to be near and...
#love
#ILoveYou
#IMissYou
#metaphor
#StreamOfConsciousness
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Reverse Origami
He handed me a paper butterfly
beautiful, complete -
and uncharacteristically,
I accepted it on faith
admiring its perfection
Normally it's my compulsion -
unfolding the delicate mysteries
Those crisp creases
that converge in a point
Taking away dimensions
to make things comprehensible
A path to wholeness
that I can replicate
with confidence:
reverse origami
but over and over you say
Surrender
that need for understanding
(control)
Pause the doing
and the...
beautiful, complete -
and uncharacteristically,
I accepted it on faith
admiring its perfection
Normally it's my compulsion -
unfolding the delicate mysteries
Those crisp creases
that converge in a point
Taking away dimensions
to make things comprehensible
A path to wholeness
that I can replicate
with confidence:
reverse origami
but over and over you say
Surrender
that need for understanding
(control)
Pause the doing
and the...
#spiritual
#mystery
#art
#acceptance
#metaphor
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The Politics of Fish
Young fish sniff for bait
that could cost their peace
when swallowing it
But discerning adults
who remain uncaught
are smart
Refusing to be played
by false lures of insult
to their intelligence
Wise vertebrate
disempower fisherwo/men
who toss shit for bait
by swimming around the stench
Those are the fish
who maintain their peace
choosing waters of love instead
~
that could cost their peace
when swallowing it
But discerning adults
who remain uncaught
are smart
Refusing to be played
by false lures of insult
to their intelligence
Wise vertebrate
disempower fisherwo/men
who toss shit for bait
by swimming around the stench
Those are the fish
who maintain their peace
choosing waters of love instead
~
#metaphor
#philosophical
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