Poems About Luck Seeking Honest Critique
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Poems about luck seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
NANCY_RDZ_STORIES
Poem Published
2nd Apr 2025 11:46pm
2nd Apr 2025 11:46pm
(The D.U.P Carnival: A Love-Twist Elegy)
The salt-stung air, a velvet shroud descends,
A carnival of ghosts, where longing bends.
Alexander's grin, a moonlit, fractured gleam,
"Last dance, dear hearts," a fevered, whispered dream.
No gentle waltz, but tango, raw and deep,
Where shadows writhe, and secrets sleep.
A love like rust, a crimson, jagged stain,
Narcissus' gaze, reflecting back the pain.
Erotic whispers, with bitter wine,
A stalker's breath, a twisted, dark design.
The Dup decks groan, a titan's final sigh,
As love's mad current...
A carnival of ghosts, where longing bends.
Alexander's grin, a moonlit, fractured gleam,
"Last dance, dear hearts," a fevered, whispered dream.
No gentle waltz, but tango, raw and deep,
Where shadows writhe, and secrets sleep.
A love like rust, a crimson, jagged stain,
Narcissus' gaze, reflecting back the pain.
Erotic whispers, with bitter wine,
A stalker's breath, a twisted, dark design.
The Dup decks groan, a titan's final sigh,
As love's mad current...
#DeepUndergroundPoetry
#fate
#luck
#nightmares
#sea
62 reads
4 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
10th Mar 2025 2:01pm
10th Mar 2025 2:01pm
Inspirational Incubus
If I were the muse
I'd appear in moments of quiet solitude
whispering words of wonder and possibility.
I'd guide the poet to the edges of dreams.
I'd lead him to hidden groves
where time stands still.
Where the rustling leaves
and murmuring streams compose
a symphony of inspiration.
With a touch as light as moonbeams
I'd paint the skies with hues
of dawn and dusk,
he'd find rhythm in chaos,
harmony in discord.
As his muse, I'd be the discovery
that within the realm of imagination ...
I'd appear in moments of quiet solitude
whispering words of wonder and possibility.
I'd guide the poet to the edges of dreams.
I'd lead him to hidden groves
where time stands still.
Where the rustling leaves
and murmuring streams compose
a symphony of inspiration.
With a touch as light as moonbeams
I'd paint the skies with hues
of dawn and dusk,
he'd find rhythm in chaos,
harmony in discord.
As his muse, I'd be the discovery
that within the realm of imagination ...
#fall
#identity
#inspirational
#luck
#mirror
95 reads
6 Comments
zinnzinn
ZINNNNIZ
ZINNNNIZ
Poem Published
1st Feb 2025 8:10am
1st Feb 2025 8:10am
Game Over
Well as luck would have it
I got the short end of the stick
It could be raining titties
and I'd get hit with a dic
I just broke my last cigarette
and see someone done stole my red bic
Ain't it sick how quick things slip
Into the shadows of the abyss
From this eclipse
From a dub to G then a ball now a
zip
Never should've taken that last hit
or that first sip
or chopped and crossed
That final little fine flat-line
That intertwined into a bind
Being confined behind the...
I got the short end of the stick
It could be raining titties
and I'd get hit with a dic
I just broke my last cigarette
and see someone done stole my red bic
Ain't it sick how quick things slip
Into the shadows of the abyss
From this eclipse
From a dub to G then a ball now a
zip
Never should've taken that last hit
or that first sip
or chopped and crossed
That final little fine flat-line
That intertwined into a bind
Being confined behind the...
#dark
#despair
#drugs
#fate
#luck
320 reads
4 Comments
Dan_ONeill
Dan ONeill
Dan ONeill
Poem Published
8th Jan 2025 1:11pm
8th Jan 2025 1:11pm
Feed it to the fire.
Shake off all the dead wood,
Chuck it on the fire,
As the wind blows stronger,
The flames climb ever higher.
It’s a mystery that we claim,
When we come into this world,
When we put upon our name,
And learn to shape its words.
All troubles are the allies,
Of the spirits we rely on,
That rough edges do us favours,
That there’s little use denying.
It’s a mystery we accept,
When we’re pulled between the worlds,
When we’re struck by flailing limbs,
With whipping stings, we learn.
Shake off all...
Chuck it on the fire,
As the wind blows stronger,
The flames climb ever higher.
It’s a mystery that we claim,
When we come into this world,
When we put upon our name,
And learn to shape its words.
All troubles are the allies,
Of the spirits we rely on,
That rough edges do us favours,
That there’s little use denying.
It’s a mystery we accept,
When we’re pulled between the worlds,
When we’re struck by flailing limbs,
With whipping stings, we learn.
Shake off all...
#earth
#fate
#luck
#responsibility
#water
71 reads
1 Comment
Green_Arrow
Poem Published
5th Jan 2025 7:08pm
5th Jan 2025 7:08pm
Now I Know That Nobody Would Believe Me
Arnold spotted an actual unicorn.
He took out his film filled camera.
But that's before it disappeared.
He took out his film filled camera.
But that's before it disappeared.
#deception
#fiction
#luck
#technology
#unicorns
106 reads
0 Comments
buddhakitty
Poem Published
2nd Jan 2025 6:48am
2nd Jan 2025 6:48am
hmmmmm...
that day.
that special day in
everyone's life they
talk about as being
the very
best.
I'm still
waiting
for it.
that special day in
everyone's life they
talk about as being
the very
best.
I'm still
waiting
for it.
#aging
#luck
105 reads
8 Comments
Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
24th Dec 2024 6:26pm
24th Dec 2024 6:26pm
Dancing In Your Graveyard............. (Choose Your Own Adventure)
#1
Stranded in a remote countryside
In the distance you see a village
Seeking any help they can provide
You walk the extra mileage
Empty streets echoed terrified screams
As you knock on a door unanswered
The storm raining nightmaric dreams
Calmness and uneasiness now transferred
(Attempt to go inside ---> #2
follow the voices down the street ---> #3)
#2
You slowly push open the squeaking door
And see an empty cobwebbed abyss
As you walk upon the creaking floor ...
Stranded in a remote countryside
In the distance you see a village
Seeking any help they can provide
You walk the extra mileage
Empty streets echoed terrified screams
As you knock on a door unanswered
The storm raining nightmaric dreams
Calmness and uneasiness now transferred
(Attempt to go inside ---> #2
follow the voices down the street ---> #3)
#2
You slowly push open the squeaking door
And see an empty cobwebbed abyss
As you walk upon the creaking floor ...
#fate
#luck
118 reads
2 Comments
disDain
Poem Published
23rd Dec 2024 00:20am
23rd Dec 2024 00:20am
If The Day’s Okay…I’m Alright
If the day’s okay…I’m alright
I would write…What I could not say
…I tried
To convey the time that I’ve had mine…
Into my mind…I pray
If the day’s okay…I’m alright
Giving Thanks…For my angst, provides a place where my fear can reside
And my tears can revive…The lifeless eyes…I see
If the day’s okay…I’m alright
Seeking the night, when I cry in the mourning
I’m much obliged…Being twisted and contorted
Enlisted to conform with…A dissident assortment
Blended into all of us “We”
If the day’s okay…I’m alright ...
I would write…What I could not say
…I tried
To convey the time that I’ve had mine…
Into my mind…I pray
If the day’s okay…I’m alright
Giving Thanks…For my angst, provides a place where my fear can reside
And my tears can revive…The lifeless eyes…I see
If the day’s okay…I’m alright
Seeking the night, when I cry in the mourning
I’m much obliged…Being twisted and contorted
Enlisted to conform with…A dissident assortment
Blended into all of us “We”
If the day’s okay…I’m alright ...
#faith
#fate
#karma #luck
#karma #luck
72 reads
0 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
12th Dec 2024 2:40pm
12th Dec 2024 2:40pm
One-way ticket...
Why should I care for the new year?
Another cycle of the same celestial dance
spiraling through familiar constellations.
Same faces in the same places,
their conversations a recitation of a well-worn script.
Why should I care for the new year?
When the clock's hands circle back
to touch the same numbers they brushed a moment ago.
And the calendar's pages, thin and brittle
fall like leaves from the same tree.
Why should I care for the new year...
When the same hues paint the dawn
and...
Another cycle of the same celestial dance
spiraling through familiar constellations.
Same faces in the same places,
their conversations a recitation of a well-worn script.
Why should I care for the new year?
When the clock's hands circle back
to touch the same numbers they brushed a moment ago.
And the calendar's pages, thin and brittle
fall like leaves from the same tree.
Why should I care for the new year...
When the same hues paint the dawn
and...
#fate
#karma
#luck
#mirror
#NewYear
192 reads
14 Comments
oldmanG
Poem Published
8th Nov 2024 4:28am
8th Nov 2024 4:28am
Ea$y Money (Not so Easy)
Ea$y Money (Not so easy)
Cutting in line
Won’t wait my turn
It’s my money and
I want to collect
But the game ain’t over
There’s still time
For it to fall to pieces
Does it almost every time
Life of a Rider
Comin up short in the end
They say insanity is
When you rinse and repeat
Tryin to make an easy buck
Instead of just being
Losing an easy buck instead
Of pocketing
Life of a Rider
Isn’t an easy path
Want to get rid of this
Insanity not so easy
...
Cutting in line
Won’t wait my turn
It’s my money and
I want to collect
But the game ain’t over
There’s still time
For it to fall to pieces
Does it almost every time
Life of a Rider
Comin up short in the end
They say insanity is
When you rinse and repeat
Tryin to make an easy buck
Instead of just being
Losing an easy buck instead
Of pocketing
Life of a Rider
Isn’t an easy path
Want to get rid of this
Insanity not so easy
...
#addiction
#curse
#fate #luck
#fate #luck
90 reads
0 Comments
NANCY_RDZ_STORIES
Poem Published
5th Sep 2024 8:21am
5th Sep 2024 8:21am
A TINY TRAVEL
Riding on an insect cause I'm tiny Mrs May
A black ant as sugar rages it's hyper way
Passing through the woods I hear some voice say.....
I'm a better ride as I can fly you away
To my surprise, why it's a bumble bee
As I utter back, ok then please take me to see the raw honey...
The bee speaks as it flails and speeds its wings
As you wish, yet do you mind in the journey that I can sing?
A black ant as sugar rages it's hyper way
Passing through the woods I hear some voice say.....
I'm a better ride as I can fly you away
To my surprise, why it's a bumble bee
As I utter back, ok then please take me to see the raw honey...
The bee speaks as it flails and speeds its wings
As you wish, yet do you mind in the journey that I can sing?
#dystopian
#fate
#luck
253 reads
4 Comments
smackdownraven
Poem Published
5th Sep 2024 3:45am
5th Sep 2024 3:45am
wishes
hidden in the shadows are all the stars I've collected
they don't wish for the sky
they are happy to shine in my smile and eyes
they raced from the heavens
really just shiny wishes
light a smile and kiss a super nova
starlight shine with hope in the moment
glittery synchronicity brightly lit to fulfill a dream or two
a sprinkle of lust should light the wick
and a spark can become a bonfire
twinkle twinkle
take that girl from the bar home
fate brought her to you for the night
effervescence let her...
they don't wish for the sky
they are happy to shine in my smile and eyes
they raced from the heavens
really just shiny wishes
light a smile and kiss a super nova
starlight shine with hope in the moment
glittery synchronicity brightly lit to fulfill a dream or two
a sprinkle of lust should light the wick
and a spark can become a bonfire
twinkle twinkle
take that girl from the bar home
fate brought her to you for the night
effervescence let her...
#luck
#magic
165 reads
0 Comments
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