Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Never Was
Why can’t we be friends anymore
Do you believe this is the best
Why can't I let this rest
We were close, but not now
You chose
Did you choose right?
I can't fight
for something that I already lost
I should have known better.
These types of friendships
Never last
Never understood that
I’m just not meant for that
Can’t cry tears that dried
Like a dead well with no water inside
Did I see something that never was
Hoping that this will work just because
I’m done
You won
no need to hit pause ...
Do you believe this is the best
Why can't I let this rest
We were close, but not now
You chose
Did you choose right?
I can't fight
for something that I already lost
I should have known better.
These types of friendships
Never last
Never understood that
I’m just not meant for that
Can’t cry tears that dried
Like a dead well with no water inside
Did I see something that never was
Hoping that this will work just because
I’m done
You won
no need to hit pause ...
#heartbroken
#sadness
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Maybe gone forever
She'll tell you that he left her
I say he just left
She'll tell you that he belonged to her
I say that's pretty ridiculous
She says he'll be completely lost without her
Well I don't know about that
I'm talking about her Miniature Schnauzer
I don't know what the hell you were thinking of....
I say he just left
She'll tell you that he belonged to her
I say that's pretty ridiculous
She says he'll be completely lost without her
Well I don't know about that
I'm talking about her Miniature Schnauzer
I don't know what the hell you were thinking of....
#heartbroken
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Holes
My funeral was today
Yet but another day to runaway
I drug myself out of that hole
It was never my goal
Leaving but a larger piece each time
Wiping away the grime
No one to see
No one to plea
Shovel in hand i begin to fill
The hole that is there
The piece that is gone
I look around at the holes
All that I have filled
Wondering how long can this go on
How much of me will die
Before I catch her eye
Before she is mine to love
Pulling myself out of this hole
Yet but another day to runaway
I drug myself out of that hole
It was never my goal
Leaving but a larger piece each time
Wiping away the grime
No one to see
No one to plea
Shovel in hand i begin to fill
The hole that is there
The piece that is gone
I look around at the holes
All that I have filled
Wondering how long can this go on
How much of me will die
Before I catch her eye
Before she is mine to love
Pulling myself out of this hole
#heartbroken
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love hurts so much
Why we can't find someone who means what they say, and not do anything to prove to you how are they gonna, be able to know what you need and really want, in your life and world. 🌍 For it's seems that nowadays it's getting harder, to tell the differences between what is good and bad, or if it's real or fake which makes it that harder to know, on who we should trust between the lines of what is the truth or lies. For tell me why we can't find, the real genuine deepness of what it meant to have a real commitment, with real consistency and real communications skills. TO articulate what...
#disappointment
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#rejection
#StreamOfConsciousness
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When Summer Comes Around
She looks at me, like i want to eat the heart
from her chest.
I dont, that wasn't my first option from the menu.
Though i often wondered what she'd taste like.
Beneath her flowing red hair,
i could see the pulse on her neck, abnormally beating as she attempted to read the thoughts filling my head.
Summer, a beauty i wanted to consume every
inch of,
devour her pale flesh,
an intoxication not meant for me.
But there she was.
She smelled of sun ripened peaches,
of something deeper,
of...
from her chest.
I dont, that wasn't my first option from the menu.
Though i often wondered what she'd taste like.
Beneath her flowing red hair,
i could see the pulse on her neck, abnormally beating as she attempted to read the thoughts filling my head.
Summer, a beauty i wanted to consume every
inch of,
devour her pale flesh,
an intoxication not meant for me.
But there she was.
She smelled of sun ripened peaches,
of something deeper,
of...
#friendship
#heartbroken
#love
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MAP
I traced the lines of us on my skin
Each curve; each edge; where we begin
A path we carved; through joy and strife
A map of you; a map of life
You were my compass; my north; my guide
The star I followed; the tide I’d ride
But somewhere along; the course grew strange
Your heart withdrew; the map began to change
Through deserts of doubt; through rivers of pain
I searched for the way; to find us again
Each turn a memory; each mile a scar
I chased your shadow; but you’d gone too far
The mountains we climbed; the valleys...
Each curve; each edge; where we begin
A path we carved; through joy and strife
A map of you; a map of life
You were my compass; my north; my guide
The star I followed; the tide I’d ride
But somewhere along; the course grew strange
Your heart withdrew; the map began to change
Through deserts of doubt; through rivers of pain
I searched for the way; to find us again
Each turn a memory; each mile a scar
I chased your shadow; but you’d gone too far
The mountains we climbed; the valleys...
#heartbroken
#love
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Seek Search and Find
To seek we must search to find what is it that we need and what in our lives, 🙏 for it's true that we are creatures of habits. THAT sometimes we don't have a glue on what we need and want, due to the chaos and drama and confusion and madness hidden behind a mask as a disguise. YET to really be able to sustain this beautiful element known as life. We must sometimes take a leap of faith, yet still knowing what we do know is that what we've been getting isn't it at all. 😞 YET then we start to just settle for the wrong reasons, just to say that we have someone only to say I got a...
#anger
#confusion
#disappointment
#heartbroken
#StreamOfConsciousness
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Russians
In the black and white of an endless film, I long to be your red rose, vivid, surreal. The last glimpse you catch before closing your eyes, The final breath shared under stormy skies.
I have never fought so fiercely, so true, Until the battle of words was between me and you. In the war of hearts, we wield the knives, Each strike cutting deep, yet we both survive.
I hold the blade to your chest, you to my throat, A silent scream as our souls take note. I beg you to do it, to end this rift, But you, with your surrender, offer a white handkerchief.
You fall to your knees,...
I have never fought so fiercely, so true, Until the battle of words was between me and you. In the war of hearts, we wield the knives, Each strike cutting deep, yet we both survive.
I hold the blade to your chest, you to my throat, A silent scream as our souls take note. I beg you to do it, to end this rift, But you, with your surrender, offer a white handkerchief.
You fall to your knees,...
#heartbroken
#hurt
#love
#rejection
#UnrequitedLove
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insulted rain~with the talented Indie
intrepid need insults my intelligence
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
and I succumb to the grief it causes
inside a raging storm of feeling
angry lust insinuates love elsewhere
such a grand feeling
to be titled so
when it usually brings devastating pain
soul stitches threatening to unravel, our love on the line
hurtful knowledge, to love is to hurt
thoughts of us, keep plaguing me
memories of days in the sun
laughing, you're my best friend
Would you recognise my true face
if you could see the scathing aura of my pain?
Or would you call...
#heartbroken
#love
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I wanna live
I wanna live
My life to the fullest
Father
I want to try to make
Some more new friends
Because Father I have
Very little friends in
My life
Also I have to look
After myself
Father I have no problem
Looking after myself
I do it every single day
I look also after my health
Every single day
And I go to bed early
Every single night
So that I get
A proper night sleep
My life to the fullest
Father
I want to try to make
Some more new friends
Because Father I have
Very little friends in
My life
Also I have to look
After myself
Father I have no problem
Looking after myself
I do it every single day
I look also after my health
Every single day
And I go to bed early
Every single night
So that I get
A proper night sleep
#confusion
#denial
#despair
#heartbroken
#jealousy
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Lost Us
Lost Us
#fear
#heartbroken
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11 Comments
Why some just don't get it
It's me again the story teller of unspoken words ✍️ Now Let's take a moment to analyze something, that has been going on way to long, to the point it hides behind close doors away from peeking eyes 👁️👁️ For example have you ever been in a relationship, that started off with good vibes and good intentions. But yet as it slowly begins to pass on through, the process of getting, to know each other. THINGS began to take, a evil turn not for the betterment of life, and the relationship but it became a living hell just to survive. What I'm saying is that...
#anger
#dark
#disappointment
#emptiness
#heartbroken
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