Heartbroken Seeking Honest Critique Poems
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heartbroken seeking honest critique poems. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Confessions After the Fact Pt 1
I had a good man once... but,
I lost him in the battle of to save him,
From the darker parts of the light he held in his eyes,
The parts that twist and coil within me.
And Lord knows I tried,
Tried to patch up and piece together,
The fragments of my wild heart,
And silence the shadows that whisper in the dead of night,
The secrets I kept inside,
Secrets so dark I was intent on keeping them hidden,
Trapped in the silk of my silence....
I thought,
Yeah I thought that if I could just show him the light,
Only the...
I lost him in the battle of to save him,
From the darker parts of the light he held in his eyes,
The parts that twist and coil within me.
And Lord knows I tried,
Tried to patch up and piece together,
The fragments of my wild heart,
And silence the shadows that whisper in the dead of night,
The secrets I kept inside,
Secrets so dark I was intent on keeping them hidden,
Trapped in the silk of my silence....
I thought,
Yeah I thought that if I could just show him the light,
Only the...
#bittersweet
#breakup
#heartbroken
#MovingOn
#TimeHeals
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Mamas Don't
Text
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
Mama, please don’t leave
Daddy is having a hard time.
He said he can’t look at me
He cries all the time
Text
Mamas don’t usually go
You left me here, just me
Daddy is so angry
I just don’t understand this though
Text
Mama, Why don’t you come home?
Daddy has been gone
He leaves me here a lot on my own
I didn’t ask to be alone
Mama's Text
Baby girl, I’m sorry to say
I didn’t want to tell you when I left that day
I set your...
#despair
#grief
#heartbroken
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Wishes and Dreams
Wishes and Dreams
We all have wishes and dreams and mine are of you
although there will not be a time when those wishes
and dreams will come true.
And so I name you a star in that heavenly night
but not the typical star one that is phenomenally bright
because that is how you are to me and though I will not share
this with you it is still how it shall be.
Wish.....Wish.....wish wishing upon a star.
So far away I wonder how you are.
Are you okay?
Are you happy?
I wish you these things.
I hope...
We all have wishes and dreams and mine are of you
although there will not be a time when those wishes
and dreams will come true.
And so I name you a star in that heavenly night
but not the typical star one that is phenomenally bright
because that is how you are to me and though I will not share
this with you it is still how it shall be.
Wish.....Wish.....wish wishing upon a star.
So far away I wonder how you are.
Are you okay?
Are you happy?
I wish you these things.
I hope...
#heartbroken
#love
#sadness
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Treating Love Letters Like Junk Mail
She told the police on her boyfriend
They nailed him with a suitcase full of heroin
He was tried & sent to jail
She was paid in full, the money that she was promised for helping out
She moved into a nice apartment
After a while, she got some letters from him
He didn't know that she was the one that had set him up
His letters were full of declarations of eternal love
The only thing that kept him going was thinking of her each & every day he sat in his rotten, stinking cell
She laughed at the letters and threw them away
After a few...
They nailed him with a suitcase full of heroin
He was tried & sent to jail
She was paid in full, the money that she was promised for helping out
She moved into a nice apartment
After a while, she got some letters from him
He didn't know that she was the one that had set him up
His letters were full of declarations of eternal love
The only thing that kept him going was thinking of her each & every day he sat in his rotten, stinking cell
She laughed at the letters and threw them away
After a few...
#apathy
#heartbroken
#prison
#rejection
#suicide
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I hate surprises
Oh, don't give me
Alice's intentions
and a queen of hearts
attitude.
In Wonderland,
with a good smile,
even cats disappear.
In wonder
with a good
disappear.
Cat's land smile.
Alice's intentions
and a queen of hearts
attitude.
In Wonderland,
with a good smile,
even cats disappear.
In wonder
with a good
disappear.
Cat's land smile.
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#hurt
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Mother
Mother,
I feel,
like
an
earthquake
got buried
in
your
womb.
Smothering,
positivity
and
the love I miss,
crumbling tomb......
I forgot
how to love,
I forgot
how to feel,
I have
one emotion
and is
negativity
I'm a
narcissist,
I even
hurt a kid
who hurt
me
with her words.
She was only
a puppy at 12
I feel bad
and I feel mad
but its not enough
to assume.....
that I can change,
walk past ...
I feel,
like
an
earthquake
got buried
in
your
womb.
Smothering,
positivity
and
the love I miss,
crumbling tomb......
I forgot
how to love,
I forgot
how to feel,
I have
one emotion
and is
negativity
I'm a
narcissist,
I even
hurt a kid
who hurt
me
with her words.
She was only
a puppy at 12
I feel bad
and I feel mad
but its not enough
to assume.....
that I can change,
walk past ...
#anxiety
#confusion
#dark
#grief
#heartbroken
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Goodbye Dad
Goodbye Dad
I am heart broken
That I have lost you
So fast
I can't stop crying
Yes I could never believe
That you had to part so soon
But deep down
I could not stand to see you
Suffer every day
Battling you disease
I tried to make you
Comfortable
Also I had to be strong for you
And it is very hard to do
Yes you lost you battle
And at the same time
It was hard to see you leave
This earth
But at the same time
I must understand that
You are in a better place them me
You are living a new...
I am heart broken
That I have lost you
So fast
I can't stop crying
Yes I could never believe
That you had to part so soon
But deep down
I could not stand to see you
Suffer every day
Battling you disease
I tried to make you
Comfortable
Also I had to be strong for you
And it is very hard to do
Yes you lost you battle
And at the same time
It was hard to see you leave
This earth
But at the same time
I must understand that
You are in a better place them me
You are living a new...
#despair
#disappointment
#grief
#heartbroken
#shame
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How I Feel
Its been sorrowful to the point,
I cry without wet salty tears,
Feelings do but don't appoint,
as erased are my life's fears.
I'm so stuck in its gears.
I cry without wet salty tears,
Feelings do but don't appoint,
as erased are my life's fears.
I'm so stuck in its gears.
#despair
#emptiness
#heartbroken #loneliness
#heartbroken #loneliness
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Cosmic Tide
Like a tsunami, an origami of emotions
tears through my chest.
Crest crashing down on my heart,
creating a black hole.
Scrolling through porcelain dreams,
just to flail in collapsed nightmares.
Staring into the abyss
with cuckoo eyes.
Crying as I drown in the whirlpool,
unable to escape your betrayal.
tears through my chest.
Crest crashing down on my heart,
creating a black hole.
Scrolling through porcelain dreams,
just to flail in collapsed nightmares.
Staring into the abyss
with cuckoo eyes.
Crying as I drown in the whirlpool,
unable to escape your betrayal.
#heartbroken
#sadness
#WritingPoetry
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~You are my Golden Spring..
https://youtu.be/6xlMbWc52VI?feature=shared
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
1.
you bring over this aching
soul .. those very memories
of that youngly budding in
metallic copperish gleams..
the very first sight, in our
rendezvous
of love..
in this eventual eve .. that’s
in some bearing of a seeded
petrichor.. of a rain to be.. you
come and go through my heart
.. leaving just the wetting
tears
why is this...
#heartbroken
#love
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
#lyrics #ValentinesDay
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6 Comments
Reach in Within (Its Settled)

#despair
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#rejection
#sadness
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painting the moment
the doors slams
.you are gone
.
the air falls to
the floor defeated
and the roses on
the table can no
longer laugh
.you are gone
.
the air falls to
the floor defeated
and the roses on
the table can no
longer laugh
#heartbroken
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4 Comments
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