Poems About Emptiness Seeking Honest Critique
#emptiness
Poems about emptiness seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
Today 1:34am
Today 1:34am
The Torture Master
The damp basement floor
Infested with cockroaches
Through a creaking door
A maniacal man approaches
Covered in days of dirt
And a smell of rotten flesh
His untucked stained shirt
Unending torture expected next
He hobbles to the corner
And eyes up his next victim
Its too late to warn her
Pain will soon inflict them
He drags her by her hair
Over to his workshop table
Screaming tears of despair
But physically she's unable
To free herself...
Infested with cockroaches
Through a creaking door
A maniacal man approaches
Covered in days of dirt
And a smell of rotten flesh
His untucked stained shirt
Unending torture expected next
He hobbles to the corner
And eyes up his next victim
Its too late to warn her
Pain will soon inflict them
He drags her by her hair
Over to his workshop table
Screaming tears of despair
But physically she's unable
To free herself...
#dark
#emptiness
29 reads
0 Comments
Vision_of_insanity
Poem Published
15th Apr 2025 8:45pm
15th Apr 2025 8:45pm
Swallowed Me Whole
I tried to feel something
I loved her & she loved me
I don't know what happened
Everything was going well
Then all of a sudden, I got cold like there was a stranger next to me
I tried to get rid of the feeling but it swallowed me
She asked me what my problem was and how she can help
She was right next to me and it sounded like she was from another planet
I almost forgot her name
I still don't understand it
I was in love with her and then in a flash, I couldn't think of a single reason that I should be with her
I left her that night...
I loved her & she loved me
I don't know what happened
Everything was going well
Then all of a sudden, I got cold like there was a stranger next to me
I tried to get rid of the feeling but it swallowed me
She asked me what my problem was and how she can help
She was right next to me and it sounded like she was from another planet
I almost forgot her name
I still don't understand it
I was in love with her and then in a flash, I couldn't think of a single reason that I should be with her
I left her that night...
#confusion
#emptiness
#FeelingLost
#loneliness
#love
69 reads
8 Comments
Hatful-of-Hollow
Poem Published
11th Apr 2025 4:14pm
11th Apr 2025 4:14pm
Talking to Strangers about Sex and Sunsets
Whispered ectoplasm dawn
softly buries screaming ghosts,
broken are the weeping windows
thou her morning opening
swings silent doors open
If she forgets my name
by the evening rush-hour
distilled by memories of
vodka breath between her legs,
then temptation is merely another
limb in the human abattoir
softly buries screaming ghosts,
broken are the weeping windows
thou her morning opening
swings silent doors open
If she forgets my name
by the evening rush-hour
distilled by memories of
vodka breath between her legs,
then temptation is merely another
limb in the human abattoir
#emptiness
83 reads
7 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
10th Apr 2025 11:37am
10th Apr 2025 11:37am
Not suffering alone (PTSD)
When we are under a heavy load of stress, it will take a more deeper hold upon the mind and soul, sometimes taking you where you've been and gone through this cycle of life. For sure we sometimes, have to reevaluate our own personal thoughts, on a time ⌚ in our lives that the damage has, already been done. Mentally and physically and emotionally, draining us slowly as it begins to take us back in time. When we were in a a foreign country fighting in war zone, fighting in a war zone that is not our war to be fighting for the freedom of it's own people's. YET still there is a down side,...
#despair
#emptiness
#fear
#grief
#suffering
55 reads
0 Comments
Northern1
Poem Published
10th Apr 2025 2:47am
10th Apr 2025 2:47am
Flat Out
#dark
#deception
#emptiness
#identity
#power
34 reads
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Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
9th Apr 2025 12:42pm
9th Apr 2025 12:42pm
Eternal Emptiness
The winds howled deep within my soul
An enraged storm has taken control
Emptiness has consumed me
I'm flooded with an emotionless reality
It's cold and dark in this abyss
Love was denounced and dismissed
Rage fueled by a growing pettiness
Ugliness transformed from prettiness
Self absorbed I lost compassion
Emotions murdered by hate's assassin
Unable to feel any sympathy
Or understand the importance of empathy
Laughing, I watch you suffer and bleed
My world motivated by power and greed
These...
An enraged storm has taken control
Emptiness has consumed me
I'm flooded with an emotionless reality
It's cold and dark in this abyss
Love was denounced and dismissed
Rage fueled by a growing pettiness
Ugliness transformed from prettiness
Self absorbed I lost compassion
Emotions murdered by hate's assassin
Unable to feel any sympathy
Or understand the importance of empathy
Laughing, I watch you suffer and bleed
My world motivated by power and greed
These...
#emptiness
45 reads
0 Comments
Hashman
Poem Published
9th Apr 2025 1:59am
9th Apr 2025 1:59am
Cancer
i crawl into you
i eat you
touch you inside
and out
i invade you
hide in you
i change you
i corrode you
i kill you
i eat you
touch you inside
and out
i invade you
hide in you
i change you
i corrode you
i kill you
#anger
#emptiness
#hate
67 reads
2 Comments
nostalgic_being10
Poem Published
8th Apr 2025 7:53pm
8th Apr 2025 7:53pm
Glass Pieces
Pieces of glass prick beneath my skin,
Pricking me until I bleed from within.
They itch, they scratch, they hurt so much,
I leave them alone, yet their lingering touch
Cannot be ignored,
Even when old skin is restored.
Forcefully, I tore the glass pieces away,
Yet despite my efforts, I couldn't stay.
Still, I scratched and bled,
Until I saw the wounds- throbbing and painfully red.
I should have known better, I know that
Yet you cannot leave the glass alone
It fragile after all
I should have stopped touching those...
Pricking me until I bleed from within.
They itch, they scratch, they hurt so much,
I leave them alone, yet their lingering touch
Cannot be ignored,
Even when old skin is restored.
Forcefully, I tore the glass pieces away,
Yet despite my efforts, I couldn't stay.
Still, I scratched and bled,
Until I saw the wounds- throbbing and painfully red.
I should have known better, I know that
Yet you cannot leave the glass alone
It fragile after all
I should have stopped touching those...
#anxiety
#emptiness
#shame
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Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
8th Apr 2025 4:57am
8th Apr 2025 4:57am
The Rot
My soul once innocent
My feelings unscathed
I once was magnificent
But time has betrayed
My actions so virtuous
My heart so pure
Life became torturous
And I became unsure
With innocence erased
I felt anger begin
Hatred replaced
And the rot set in
My blackened heart
With no love to give
A vicious start
Of this new way to live
Mentally detached
Reckless in nature
Quick to attack
Cuz I fucking hate you
I say what I want
My unfiltered tongue
Excitement...
My feelings unscathed
I once was magnificent
But time has betrayed
My actions so virtuous
My heart so pure
Life became torturous
And I became unsure
With innocence erased
I felt anger begin
Hatred replaced
And the rot set in
My blackened heart
With no love to give
A vicious start
Of this new way to live
Mentally detached
Reckless in nature
Quick to attack
Cuz I fucking hate you
I say what I want
My unfiltered tongue
Excitement...
#emptiness
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Hashman
Poem Published
8th Apr 2025 2:59am
8th Apr 2025 2:59am
Billie...
The way you haunt my dreams
the way you step into my head
the way you pound my heart
may we never meet again
wish i could go back
and say goodbye
before we said hello,
wish i could close the door
before it opened
you took all of me
you haunt my dreams
day and night
night and day...
the way you step into my head
the way you pound my heart
may we never meet again
wish i could go back
and say goodbye
before we said hello,
wish i could close the door
before it opened
you took all of me
you haunt my dreams
day and night
night and day...
#emptiness
#loneliness
#love
85 reads
0 Comments
Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
6th Apr 2025 2:20pm
6th Apr 2025 2:20pm
Venomous Lies
Crooked spine
And hobbled feet
Corrupted mind
Thoughts incomplete
Blood red eyes
And a forked tongue
Venomous lies
Told to the young
Evil hatred spread
Wicked and twisted
Army of the dead
In shadows existed
Coming for our souls
Coming for our lives
Absolute control
Hate sharpened knives
With hearts unopened
And minds closed down
Consumed by smoke and
Mirrors we drown
Promised a future
Promised a life
Instead we're sutured
Concealing our strife ...
And hobbled feet
Corrupted mind
Thoughts incomplete
Blood red eyes
And a forked tongue
Venomous lies
Told to the young
Evil hatred spread
Wicked and twisted
Army of the dead
In shadows existed
Coming for our souls
Coming for our lives
Absolute control
Hate sharpened knives
With hearts unopened
And minds closed down
Consumed by smoke and
Mirrors we drown
Promised a future
Promised a life
Instead we're sutured
Concealing our strife ...
#dark
#emptiness
88 reads
2 Comments
Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
6th Apr 2025 3:39am
6th Apr 2025 3:39am
When Our Dreams Have Died
Land of opportunity
A chance to thrive
A loving community
That's full of drive
Where dreams take shape
And hard work pays
Once America was great
Unique in many ways
Brother helping brother
With a common goal
Success of each other
Is success of the whole
Happiness and success
At our fingertips
But now nevertheless
Our dreams have slipped
Tears have moistened
Our tear filled eyes
We have been poisoned
By the repeated lies
Anger and rage...
A chance to thrive
A loving community
That's full of drive
Where dreams take shape
And hard work pays
Once America was great
Unique in many ways
Brother helping brother
With a common goal
Success of each other
Is success of the whole
Happiness and success
At our fingertips
But now nevertheless
Our dreams have slipped
Tears have moistened
Our tear filled eyes
We have been poisoned
By the repeated lies
Anger and rage...
#emptiness
#heartbroken
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