Poems About Emptiness Seeking Honest Critique
#emptiness
Poems about emptiness seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Ryan-G-Hayward
Poem Published
Today 4:34pm
Today 4:34pm
Black Swan
#despair
#emptiness
#loneliness
#regret
#shame
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Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
Today 6:04am
Today 6:04am
What Would She Think
What would she think
If she came home
And discovered my body
Dead on the floor
From an apparent suicide
Would she cry
Or would she be so mad
She pounded on my lifeless chest
Would she be happy (well on the inside)
Knowing that her life could move forward
And she could escape the trap
She's lived in forever
How long before she moved on
Or would she just enjoy the freedom
She's been gifted
What would she think
What happens next
Do I rot away and decay
In an empty timeless abyss
As my body...
If she came home
And discovered my body
Dead on the floor
From an apparent suicide
Would she cry
Or would she be so mad
She pounded on my lifeless chest
Would she be happy (well on the inside)
Knowing that her life could move forward
And she could escape the trap
She's lived in forever
How long before she moved on
Or would she just enjoy the freedom
She's been gifted
What would she think
What happens next
Do I rot away and decay
In an empty timeless abyss
As my body...
#dark
#emptiness
28 reads
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Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
Today 5:27am
Today 5:27am
Crossing Thoughts
Losing interest with my desires
My mind completely uninspired
Absent thoughts and losing focus
Erratic behaviors becoming noticed
Night after night of restless sleep
In my head crossing thoughts do creep
Fates cruel hand has me rattled
Why keep fighting this losing battle
This downward spiral has perplexed
The thoughts I planned to happen next
My head hangs down unhappily
My will declining rapidly
Giving in to this temptation
A peaceful warming sensation
The tremors of the smoking gun
The stress is...
My mind completely uninspired
Absent thoughts and losing focus
Erratic behaviors becoming noticed
Night after night of restless sleep
In my head crossing thoughts do creep
Fates cruel hand has me rattled
Why keep fighting this losing battle
This downward spiral has perplexed
The thoughts I planned to happen next
My head hangs down unhappily
My will declining rapidly
Giving in to this temptation
A peaceful warming sensation
The tremors of the smoking gun
The stress is...
#dark
#emptiness
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poet5678
CHUCKLES 123
CHUCKLES 123
Poem Published
Today 1:40am
Today 1:40am
If we can dream
If we can dream
While we sleep
In our cozy
And warm bed
We always dream
With the people
We lost
27 years ago
Who have died
Of cancer
At that time
We bad done
Their funeral
Service
And we bury
Then at
Their graves
Today they live
There new lives
In heaven
Also they are
Not suffering
Anymore
They are resting
In peace
While we sleep
In our cozy
And warm bed
We always dream
With the people
We lost
27 years ago
Who have died
Of cancer
At that time
We bad done
Their funeral
Service
And we bury
Then at
Their graves
Today they live
There new lives
In heaven
Also they are
Not suffering
Anymore
They are resting
In peace
#apathy
#bittersweet
#emptiness
#frustration
#rejection
19 reads
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BlackBox
Black Box
Black Box
Poem Published
Yesterday 00:59am
Yesterday 00:59am
This Feeling
I think of you often
Fondly, softly
Quietly in my prison of a mind
During my days and my nights
As I sit typing these small mementos
I’m reminded of how close we became
Your laughter, your beauty
The never ending conversations
This feeling of emptiness, loneliness
This somber sadness grips my soul
Clutching with intent to crush what’s left
Mangled and mashed into dust
Tears well up ready to burst forth
A briny, saline waterfall crashing into the depths of my heart
Inducing an anxious panic overriding all...
Fondly, softly
Quietly in my prison of a mind
During my days and my nights
As I sit typing these small mementos
I’m reminded of how close we became
Your laughter, your beauty
The never ending conversations
This feeling of emptiness, loneliness
This somber sadness grips my soul
Clutching with intent to crush what’s left
Mangled and mashed into dust
Tears well up ready to burst forth
A briny, saline waterfall crashing into the depths of my heart
Inducing an anxious panic overriding all...
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness
#UnrequitedLove
54 reads
0 Comments
jaspersilence
Poem Published
3rd Feb 2025 9:45pm
3rd Feb 2025 9:45pm
GHOST IN DAYLIGHT
Red light warning.
Open eyed kiss.
Midst my decathect,
Love like lunar waning.
Cut out from the dream tapestry.
Never,behind every door.
Loss,inside every hole.
The key, in every "contradiction".
I am the new moon.
Unseen,and ashamed...
I am the ghost in daylight...
Open eyed kiss.
Midst my decathect,
Love like lunar waning.
Cut out from the dream tapestry.
Never,behind every door.
Loss,inside every hole.
The key, in every "contradiction".
I am the new moon.
Unseen,and ashamed...
I am the ghost in daylight...
#confusion
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#loneliness
#sadness
29 reads
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Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
3rd Feb 2025 4:47am
3rd Feb 2025 4:47am
The Doomsday Clock
Time once thought to be infinite
Now 89 seconds from midnight
Lifes design rather intricate
A story we can not rewrite
Everything's taken for granted
Approaching castrophic destruction
Reaping the seeds we planted
Feeding the greed of corruption
Global challenges like climate change
Warned by atomic scientists
Common sense is now estranged
As existential threats exist
Lies spread and government dissension
Narratives to keep us suppressed
Global...
Now 89 seconds from midnight
Lifes design rather intricate
A story we can not rewrite
Everything's taken for granted
Approaching castrophic destruction
Reaping the seeds we planted
Feeding the greed of corruption
Global challenges like climate change
Warned by atomic scientists
Common sense is now estranged
As existential threats exist
Lies spread and government dissension
Narratives to keep us suppressed
Global...
#dark
#despair
#emptiness
59 reads
0 Comments
Chere-Rene13
Poem Published
31st Jan 2025 6:21am
31st Jan 2025 6:21am
Substantial Dreams
Shifty is the con man grifter...Obfuscating his counterfeiter, confessing menu to order from. Inside review of such a fiend's means of pulling a lick, his coming up salesman pitch to attend his feral fix. Heated is the dirty bent spoon. Matchbook ready & willing to sharpen the tool of a fiend's salvation. Candlelight, sets the mood of watering mouths, blast out of the running gate. Thrown at his soles a welcome mat for the variety substance of ill flavors he wipes & owns. Selfishly he programs his one track mind, believing that he is hurting nobody but himself... While he indulges...
#disappointment
#emptiness
#regret
#sadness
#shame
46 reads
0 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
30th Jan 2025 10:24pm
30th Jan 2025 10:24pm
love hurts so much
Why we can't find someone who means what they say, and not do anything to prove to you how are they gonna, be able to know what you need and really want, in your life and world. 🌍 For it's seems that nowadays it's getting harder, to tell the differences between what is good and bad, or if it's real or fake which makes it that harder to know, on who we should trust between the lines of what is the truth or lies. For tell me why we can't find, the real genuine deepness of what it meant to have a real commitment, with real consistency and real communications skills. TO articulate what...
#disappointment
#emptiness
#heartbroken
#rejection
#StreamOfConsciousness
67 reads
4 Comments
Stoney223
WOLF BAY33
WOLF BAY33
Poem Published
30th Jan 2025 2:36am
30th Jan 2025 2:36am
Stay out of the darkness
As the days turned into night a shifting is taking place in the world in our lives as well, for sure it's getting to the point that it's becoming more darker by the minutes as time. Slowly passes by the like day into night, through this realm of what is happening to our very deepness of what is life. Now let's just a minute to analyze, what I'm saying as you read between the lines, through my unspoken words. ✍️ FOR when we are facing a situation, that we will have no real control over. THAT we start to feel some kind of way, feeling trapped in a place that only shows, us the...
#emptiness
#fear
#FeelingTrapped
#LifeStruggles
#suffering
73 reads
2 Comments
Mstrmnd1923
Poem Published
30th Jan 2025 00:07am
30th Jan 2025 00:07am
It's Getting Harder
It's getting harder
And harder
To face each day
The cards are all stacked against me
Each day an uphill climb
With obstacles and headaches
Paying for my ghosts
My past regrets
The consequences of my mistakes
I am reaping what I sowed
Its getting harder
To block out the noise
The voices are getting louder
And telling me what I should do
I already know the answer
But I'm scared
I'm afraid of the aftermath
I don't know if I have the guts
To set the world right
And pay my balance due ...
And harder
To face each day
The cards are all stacked against me
Each day an uphill climb
With obstacles and headaches
Paying for my ghosts
My past regrets
The consequences of my mistakes
I am reaping what I sowed
Its getting harder
To block out the noise
The voices are getting louder
And telling me what I should do
I already know the answer
But I'm scared
I'm afraid of the aftermath
I don't know if I have the guts
To set the world right
And pay my balance due ...
#emptiness
67 reads
4 Comments
PAR
Poem Published
28th Jan 2025 9:11pm
28th Jan 2025 9:11pm
emotional suction
love´s is not a lie
it's an origami cuckoo
catched by the whirlpool
of a porcelain blackhole
it's an origami cuckoo
catched by the whirlpool
of a porcelain blackhole
#emptiness
#lies
#lust
#mirror
#passion
69 reads
17 Comments
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