Poems About Emptiness Seeking Honest Critique
#emptiness
Poems about emptiness seeking honest critique. Honest feedback has been requested for these poems.
Damselinhandcuffs
Poem Published
Today 1:09pm
Today 1:09pm
Sea of Touch
The body makes love to the body and leaves me on the other side
I listen to the breathing that echoes in the room and I feel like the intruder
The sheets touch the blanket of skin and I feel rough
The voice of the other says this- this is making love
So I close the ungrateful eyes and picture the rain
Convince myself this touch is just as pure, just as great
Count the seconds til I forget the structure of my own name
As the body cums
And as I come to back into the body
All I feel is nothing ...
I listen to the breathing that echoes in the room and I feel like the intruder
The sheets touch the blanket of skin and I feel rough
The voice of the other says this- this is making love
So I close the ungrateful eyes and picture the rain
Convince myself this touch is just as pure, just as great
Count the seconds til I forget the structure of my own name
As the body cums
And as I come to back into the body
All I feel is nothing ...
#love
#loneliness
#sex #emptiness
#sex #emptiness
6 reads
0 Comments
Honoria
Poem Published
16th Sep 2019 9:47pm
16th Sep 2019 9:47pm
Inconvenient Truth
#sadness
#regret
#emptiness
47 reads
12 Comments
fieryangelsouljia
MorriganFey
MorriganFey
Poem Published
14th Sep 2019 11:35pm
14th Sep 2019 11:35pm
a Grave Fit For a Queen of Nothing
You could sit next to me
and never once hear me
scream
We could spend a thousand nights
tangled in each other's arms
and you'll never once see me
bleed
You could ask me if I'm okay
but you'll never know my pain..
I thought that if I carved it out,
the piece of me that kept me warm
I wouldn't desire anything beyond
the cold of this hell I told myself
would become my home
But all I long for now
is the warmth
of a genuine
embrace
the sweeter side of you ...
and never once hear me
scream
We could spend a thousand nights
tangled in each other's arms
and you'll never once see me
bleed
You could ask me if I'm okay
but you'll never know my pain..
I thought that if I carved it out,
the piece of me that kept me warm
I wouldn't desire anything beyond
the cold of this hell I told myself
would become my home
But all I long for now
is the warmth
of a genuine
embrace
the sweeter side of you ...
#despair
#suffering
#emptiness #hurt
#emptiness #hurt
49 reads
2 Comments
Nocturnalbutterfly
Poem Published
14th Sep 2019 4:16am
14th Sep 2019 4:16am
Bang
Don't leave me alone with my thoughts!
All I want to do is sleep.
A million voices screaming at me!
Silence they will not keep.
All they do is yell and shout!
Why must they remind me
Of all the worry, pain and doubt?
The sound is overwhelming
I can not take it any longer
Every voice is loud and booming
I taste metal.
Here's the answer.
Now the voices will settle.
B-A-N-G
All I want to do is sleep.
A million voices screaming at me!
Silence they will not keep.
All they do is yell and shout!
Why must they remind me
Of all the worry, pain and doubt?
The sound is overwhelming
I can not take it any longer
Every voice is loud and booming
I taste metal.
Here's the answer.
Now the voices will settle.
B-A-N-G
#anger
#anxiety
#dark
#despair
#emptiness
71 reads
5 Comments
BabydoII
Itty Bitty
Itty Bitty
Poem Published
13th Sep 2019 9:16am
13th Sep 2019 9:16am
Feeling 100...
They say you gotta wait
'Til your old and grey
To see all of your friends decay
And most of your family pass away
But hey
Twenty seven never felt so old
And it only gets worse, I'm constantly told
Is it 'cause I've done way too much
Too early
Now I'm bored and out of touch
Or surely...
It's the disease I was born with that makes me tired
Winding up each day just to feel inspired
While everyone else pretends mortality is a myth
Playing with past traumas as if there isn't always ...
'Til your old and grey
To see all of your friends decay
And most of your family pass away
But hey
Twenty seven never felt so old
And it only gets worse, I'm constantly told
Is it 'cause I've done way too much
Too early
Now I'm bored and out of touch
Or surely...
It's the disease I was born with that makes me tired
Winding up each day just to feel inspired
While everyone else pretends mortality is a myth
Playing with past traumas as if there isn't always ...
#death
#SelfReflection
#FeelingLost #emptiness
#FeelingLost #emptiness
34 reads
4 Comments
ashw
Poem Published
13th Sep 2019 2:06am
13th Sep 2019 2:06am
Precipice
I find myself on uncertain ground
Straddling an impossible horizon
On one side is day, where my consciousness thrives
On the other is night, where fatigue claims its prize
For years, it seems, I have longed for sleep
For a reprieve from wakefulness and the sun's piercing light
But now, as I stand astride this unlikely fission
I fear what awaits within night's unyielding prison
The darkness has beckoned, calling me forth
Even now its sweet siren reigns down on my soul
Oh, to just close my eyes and let my thoughts be...
Straddling an impossible horizon
On one side is day, where my consciousness thrives
On the other is night, where fatigue claims its prize
For years, it seems, I have longed for sleep
For a reprieve from wakefulness and the sun's piercing light
But now, as I stand astride this unlikely fission
I fear what awaits within night's unyielding prison
The darkness has beckoned, calling me forth
Even now its sweet siren reigns down on my soul
Oh, to just close my eyes and let my thoughts be...
#depression
#loneliness
#night
#despair
#emptiness
84 reads
0 Comments
Adzy
Poem Published
12th Sep 2019 11:07pm
12th Sep 2019 11:07pm
Afterlife
In life, the vivid colours of the world were a joy to behold.
In death, there is only the blackness of the eternal abyss.
I feel no pain here, though I feel nothing else
Except time, everlasting and unending
If only I could be alive for one more day.
The maggots have had their feast
My bones lie here, still
Like all the others.
I know no smell, taste or sight
All I have is an eternity to think,
And it's driving me crazy.
Is this purgatory?
Had I been a better person would I be up sitting on a cloud with...
In death, there is only the blackness of the eternal abyss.
I feel no pain here, though I feel nothing else
Except time, everlasting and unending
If only I could be alive for one more day.
The maggots have had their feast
My bones lie here, still
Like all the others.
I know no smell, taste or sight
All I have is an eternity to think,
And it's driving me crazy.
Is this purgatory?
Had I been a better person would I be up sitting on a cloud with...
#regret
#death
#memories
#LifeCycle
#emptiness
69 reads
0 Comments
PerfumeandTaffy
Poem Published
12th Sep 2019 10:46pm
12th Sep 2019 10:46pm
Just a little sad today
If I wasn’t so afraid
I would find a way
To tell you
How I still sink with doubt
In this dreary world
I wonder
If my name lingers
Even a wisp of of thought
In your crowded mind
I loved loving you
I loved your darkness
And the plumpness of your
Bottom lip.
In the wake of your absence
I am an ocean
Of vulnerability
And in the hazardous blue
I am weak because of you
Fighting to reach the surface
I fear change
But you left anyway
And now I sit in...
I would find a way
To tell you
How I still sink with doubt
In this dreary world
I wonder
If my name lingers
Even a wisp of of thought
In your crowded mind
I loved loving you
I loved your darkness
And the plumpness of your
Bottom lip.
In the wake of your absence
I am an ocean
Of vulnerability
And in the hazardous blue
I am weak because of you
Fighting to reach the surface
I fear change
But you left anyway
And now I sit in...
#depression
#heartbroken
#breakup #emptiness
#breakup #emptiness
66 reads
2 Comments
Kandicejohnson
Poem Published
12th Sep 2019 11:35am
12th Sep 2019 11:35am
I Didn’t Choose To Be Me
I chose to be fine
During this time
Of my life
Tell me your tales
Challenge my mind
Take me to your world
Stir up my thoughts
Take away this meloncholly
I wish to be happy
Why do you
Fly constantly?
You and I are lost
Little Bird.
In this night
I make you mine
Your my prisoner
Caged only
For tonight
As for me,
I've been caged
Most of my life
May I borrow
Your wings?
May I taste your life?
The tears I cry
Are no hidden secret
You look sad
Little bird ...
During this time
Of my life
Tell me your tales
Challenge my mind
Take me to your world
Stir up my thoughts
Take away this meloncholly
I wish to be happy
Why do you
Fly constantly?
You and I are lost
Little Bird.
In this night
I make you mine
Your my prisoner
Caged only
For tonight
As for me,
I've been caged
Most of my life
May I borrow
Your wings?
May I taste your life?
The tears I cry
Are no hidden secret
You look sad
Little bird ...
#sadness
#loneliness
#emptiness #FeelingTrapped
#emptiness #FeelingTrapped
42 reads
0 Comments
dkzksaxxas_DanielX
Poem Published
11th Sep 2019 7:02pm
11th Sep 2019 7:02pm
If EveryOne Didn't Know, Who'd There Be To Blame?
Eye canno look any'more.
It's just too damn raw.
Razors on a pinched nerve.
(Bring'em back.
Dead or a'live).
Take'em
out
behind the barn, and do
what ye know needs be done.
The stockpile of misery
has a long line of pre'cedants,
all ways
applauding the
mockery with
mockery,
and then just resorting
to the
pillory (and worse),
to tighten up the perceived stray pieces.
If our lives were not so selfishly
...
It's just too damn raw.
Razors on a pinched nerve.
(Bring'em back.
Dead or a'live).
Take'em
out
behind the barn, and do
what ye know needs be done.
The stockpile of misery
has a long line of pre'cedants,
all ways
applauding the
mockery with
mockery,
and then just resorting
to the
pillory (and worse),
to tighten up the perceived stray pieces.
If our lives were not so selfishly
...
#anxiety
#depression
#misunderstood
#emptiness
#apathy
84 reads
6 Comments
Damselinhandcuffs
Poem Published
11th Sep 2019 4:19am
11th Sep 2019 4:19am
Chant of Silence
#grief
#dark
#shame
#denial
#emptiness
44 reads
0 Comments
Kandicejohnson
Poem Published
10th Sep 2019 7:45pm
10th Sep 2019 7:45pm
Fueled Frustrations
Frustrations are fueled
You neglecting my needs
Falling apart in front of you
And you don't even see me
Behind my smiles
Behind my brown eyes
Lives so much hurt
I work hard to disguise
Frustrations fueled
Constantly degrading
Receiving discredit in return
Denying me any claim
Less you forget
I am of your design
Our blood is the same
Fueled frustrations
Behind my calm demeanor
I'm angry inside
Voice without chords
Replaying then rewind
Kept closed up
Suffocating my soul ...
You neglecting my needs
Falling apart in front of you
And you don't even see me
Behind my smiles
Behind my brown eyes
Lives so much hurt
I work hard to disguise
Frustrations fueled
Constantly degrading
Receiving discredit in return
Denying me any claim
Less you forget
I am of your design
Our blood is the same
Fueled frustrations
Behind my calm demeanor
I'm angry inside
Voice without chords
Replaying then rewind
Kept closed up
Suffocating my soul ...
#sadness
#loneliness
#abuse #emptiness
#abuse #emptiness
51 reads
2 Comments
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