ENDLESS PASSION

entered in  comp.

"As they make,
their way
pumping,
breathing the others blood
Only hawks see its rapture transpire."<--love that!
Endless Passion written wonderfully! :))))

Thank You Dear Rain:)))
I'm humbled!!!

Sounds like a mini Apocalypse there, Soul. Good read.

indeed Dear Grace:)), with more of the glory than the destruction aspect:)
Thank You for the read and kind comment!!!

The picture fits perfectly... Great write Soul.  Good luck in the competition. :)

Thank You Dear Magdalena:)))
I wanted one with it crumbling into water...but all
those were Atlantis style, to perfect looking.

Good luck in the competition-
not that you'll need it, of course.

Very well written piece,
vivid descriptions.

Why Thank You Dear Scribbler...i'm glad You liked:)

Your words are really apocalyptic in nature. You should have gone full blast though and make it grimmer for more impact, just sayin'...

Over-all I enjoyed this!

Thank You Sir....i wanted to take it many avenues...that was one way i was taking it...with more vision to the bird being a businessman watching drinking coffee...but i was limited to 50 words...so i kept the core vision of the point only:)

That's what I don't like in comps that put limit to your words, althought it's quite a bit of a challenge how you can cramp up words to get your point across.

I DID ENJOY that...it made me think for that work...and helped to spark the i dea of it:)

Your alternate definition of passion was masterfully executed!

Red

Thank You Dear Red:)
Seems i have been writing shorter works lately...at the same time...a challenge for me at times.

It is good to challenge oneself and broaden ones horizon that way you know the unlimited possibilities you are capable of. good luck!

Red

INDEED:)

Enjoyed this, nice structure, flow and some great thought provoking lines..well done.

Thank You Dear Miki:)

Only hawks see its rapture transpire--Fav line

Great piece Bro.SOUL

Sir Lancelott

Thank You Lance...or is it Hawkeye :)