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As above from below
from the heights as in the Haight
I saw from above, the walk below
feet at the edge, river styx
waving to the ferry man
with a wink and a smile,
I kept my thin dime
turning around, Yes indeed
Another Mile
The fun one, rooted
in rudimentary beginnings
taking the long way out
was just a way
to see the sights sound their twinkle downs
as they glaze
craggy edged surfaces of the rock walls
stop me if You've heard this one...
never mind, different,
words same language,
saying siestas sail snores sounding supranaturalistic sallowness
"arise chicken arise"
walking upon bones of the beaten brethren
to dine thy daily bread, crumbed, flaked
upon angel hair
I gazed upon that one star, my night sky high
I saw from above, the walk below
feet at the edge, river styx
waving to the ferry man
with a wink and a smile,
I kept my thin dime
turning around, Yes indeed
Another Mile
The fun one, rooted
in rudimentary beginnings
taking the long way out
was just a way
to see the sights sound their twinkle downs
as they glaze
craggy edged surfaces of the rock walls
stop me if You've heard this one...
never mind, different,
words same language,
saying siestas sail snores sounding supranaturalistic sallowness
"arise chicken arise"
walking upon bones of the beaten brethren
to dine thy daily bread, crumbed, flaked
upon angel hair
I gazed upon that one star, my night sky high
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Re: As above from below
3rd Apr 2013 8:16am
Very uplifting, made me smile.
never mind, different,
words same language,
saying siestas sail snores sounding supranaturalistic sallowness
"arise chicken arise"
walking upon bones of the beaten brethren
to dine thy daily bread, crumbed, flaked
upon angel hair
Awesome Alliteration, all is amazing.
Much enjoyed,
Scribbler.
never mind, different,
words same language,
saying siestas sail snores sounding supranaturalistic sallowness
"arise chicken arise"
walking upon bones of the beaten brethren
to dine thy daily bread, crumbed, flaked
upon angel hair
Awesome Alliteration, all is amazing.
Much enjoyed,
Scribbler.
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re: Re: As above from below
3rd Apr 2013 2:09pm
Awww Glad to make You smile Scribbler:)
I was.
Thank You for the read and kind words!!!
I was.
Thank You for the read and kind words!!!
Re: As above from below
Anonymous
3rd Apr 2013 8:41am
enjoyed this, I like the different structure. great thoughts, creative and well penned.
:-)
:-)
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re: Re: As above from below
3rd Apr 2013 2:10pm
Re: As above from below
3rd Apr 2013 10:47am
re: Re: As above from below
Thank You for the read and comment Dear Grace:)
A tad Smirk there...there was:)
A tad Smirk there...there was:)
Re: As above from below
3rd Apr 2013 11:24am
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3rd Apr 2013 2:15pm
Re: As above from below
5th Apr 2013 4:08am
Soulman, I love the verbal gymnastics you engage in this piece with terrific phrases like, "to see the sights sound their twinkle downs
as they glaze
craggy edged surfaces of the rock walls."
The line, "saying siestas sail snores sounding supranaturalistic sallowness," is a tad too much consonance for my ear but the four lines that follow are brilliant. Great job!
as they glaze
craggy edged surfaces of the rock walls."
The line, "saying siestas sail snores sounding supranaturalistic sallowness," is a tad too much consonance for my ear but the four lines that follow are brilliant. Great job!
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re: Re: As above from below
5th Apr 2013 4:37am
Thanks Tony!!!
I'm humbled You like it!!!
Far as the consonance extreme...that's just the silliness in me coming out...think...watching the Marx brothers...then turning the channel to the stooges...that's me lol
I'm humbled You like it!!!
Far as the consonance extreme...that's just the silliness in me coming out...think...watching the Marx brothers...then turning the channel to the stooges...that's me lol
Re: As above from below
5th Apr 2013 3:59pm
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5th Apr 2013 4:20pm
Re: As above from below
5th Apr 2013 10:15pm
re: Re: As above from below
5th Apr 2013 11:27pm
Thank You Dear Rain:)
I was happy with this one, that doesn't happen often
I was happy with this one, that doesn't happen often