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Black Hoods
War in the streets,
Pavement, paved with black blood,
Black hood, black hoodies, black streets.
Sirens, silenced, modern civil war, no law, introduction of black balance.
Eight, eighteen
Makes no difference with a 18.
40 oz. 48 hours, 24 might be the last seen, walking down the black streets.
Black faces, hidden behind black masks.
Die or die. Predestined failure.
Generational failure.
Cyclic shame, recycled,
shots taken in vain.
Gun powder, hideout, shooting up,
powder in veins.
Nothing like the black hood
Pavements, paved with black blood.
Road to hoodrich, an excuse for black floods.
Pavement, paved with black blood,
Black hood, black hoodies, black streets.
Sirens, silenced, modern civil war, no law, introduction of black balance.
Eight, eighteen
Makes no difference with a 18.
40 oz. 48 hours, 24 might be the last seen, walking down the black streets.
Black faces, hidden behind black masks.
Die or die. Predestined failure.
Generational failure.
Cyclic shame, recycled,
shots taken in vain.
Gun powder, hideout, shooting up,
powder in veins.
Nothing like the black hood
Pavements, paved with black blood.
Road to hoodrich, an excuse for black floods.
Published 19th Mar 2013
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3rd Apr 2013 8:54pm
Good, even though it lacks structure. It sounds better as a spoken word poem; it has a stronger affect read aloud.
I like the message, it explains some of the pain of the conditions. The line "die or die. Predestined failure" is powerful. I see that you were playing on the phrase "do or die". Saying there is no 'do' is the feeling that most don't have a choice but to be stuck in the loop.
I like your spirit, good job, and try to consider this poem as a spoken word.
I like the message, it explains some of the pain of the conditions. The line "die or die. Predestined failure" is powerful. I see that you were playing on the phrase "do or die". Saying there is no 'do' is the feeling that most don't have a choice but to be stuck in the loop.
I like your spirit, good job, and try to consider this poem as a spoken word.
12th Oct 2013 00:20am
thank you so much! I really am working to become more structural in my writing, and I definitely aim for spoken word rather poetry. :)
