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or metaphorical terror
it's just a view i cannot leave
that makes my life a contradiction
i cannot understand my grief
caused by an overrated fiction
which is so oversimplified
there is no chance for understanding
every mindset's literally designed
making my thoughts sound like a blending
that make me speak to make them clear
although it's just unanswered questions
that mute the countless asking fears
by emphasizing their selection
i feel there is no better way
although i'm sure that is an error
but scanning through unconscious haze
results in metamorphic terror
that makes my life a contradiction
i cannot understand my grief
caused by an overrated fiction
which is so oversimplified
there is no chance for understanding
every mindset's literally designed
making my thoughts sound like a blending
that make me speak to make them clear
although it's just unanswered questions
that mute the countless asking fears
by emphasizing their selection
i feel there is no better way
although i'm sure that is an error
but scanning through unconscious haze
results in metamorphic terror
Published 2nd Mar 2013
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2nd Mar 2013 4:24pm
Self-recognition in the works of others is one of my criteria for really good poetry - which I found and this is. A delight!
3rd Mar 2013 6:30am
thank you! I'm glad you like it!
and I totally agree with your mentioned criteria :)
and I totally agree with your mentioned criteria :)
Anonymous
2nd Mar 2013 5:58pm
very well expressed and written..nice work here!
if I gave any critique, it would simply be that the I should always be a cap but i also know many who chose to write it lower case for their own reasons....so either way, write on!
if I gave any critique, it would simply be that the I should always be a cap but i also know many who chose to write it lower case for their own reasons....so either way, write on!
3rd Mar 2013 6:38am
Thanks for your compliment!
I have to confess that I can hardly explain why I sometimes avoid the capitalization of the I. But I guess there is a slight difference between my I and my i :)
I have to confess that I can hardly explain why I sometimes avoid the capitalization of the I. But I guess there is a slight difference between my I and my i :)
