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Day One
The night descends upon a darkened heart
broken and shattered like a mirror
beaten with a bloodied fist
the soul within this body withers
being blown about as if it were mere ashes
without a backbone or any substance
each day I say today is day one
I won't pick up the bottle on this day
fail, fail, fail I haven't made it yet
I would cry but no tears are allowed to flow
write but my emotions are pent up
create if I gave a damn about my passions
i'm a blank page now
void of color a whisp of my former self
I used to paint and write with vigor
now I swill booze and get lost in delirium
what happened to me I ask myself
fear at the core of things
I wonder when did I become so afraid
being a fierce warrior once upon a time
the fighter in me looks upon the sad state of things with disdain
Today I failed will tommorow be day one?
Please I pray to the powers that be I succeed
down this rocky high road
the key to my soul's salvation
broken and shattered like a mirror
beaten with a bloodied fist
the soul within this body withers
being blown about as if it were mere ashes
without a backbone or any substance
each day I say today is day one
I won't pick up the bottle on this day
fail, fail, fail I haven't made it yet
I would cry but no tears are allowed to flow
write but my emotions are pent up
create if I gave a damn about my passions
i'm a blank page now
void of color a whisp of my former self
I used to paint and write with vigor
now I swill booze and get lost in delirium
what happened to me I ask myself
fear at the core of things
I wonder when did I become so afraid
being a fierce warrior once upon a time
the fighter in me looks upon the sad state of things with disdain
Today I failed will tommorow be day one?
Please I pray to the powers that be I succeed
down this rocky high road
the key to my soul's salvation
Written by
crimsin
(Unveiling)
Published 24th Feb 2013
| Edited 27th Feb 2013
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Re: Day One
24th Feb 2013 11:27pm
Tomorrows a new day, step into it with determination.
Wonderfully expressed and written Crim :)
Wonderfully expressed and written Crim :)
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re: Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 00:45am
ty Magdalena I thank the powers that be that i'm still breathing and have a chance to turn things around..peace Crim
Re: Day One
Anonymous
24th Feb 2013 11:28pm
Hi Crimsin
It sounds that by writing down the problem you have done the first tiny step in solving it. The poem is masterful, explaining the addiction and the fear of daily failure. Life is lived day by day and failure on day x does not mean failure on day y. The poem is very inspirational for all of us who struggle to survive our weaknesses.
Go in peace
Good write and a good read
Thanks
Kitty
It sounds that by writing down the problem you have done the first tiny step in solving it. The poem is masterful, explaining the addiction and the fear of daily failure. Life is lived day by day and failure on day x does not mean failure on day y. The poem is very inspirational for all of us who struggle to survive our weaknesses.
Go in peace
Good write and a good read
Thanks
Kitty
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re: Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 00:46am
Thank you Kitty for your most gracious heartfelt comment..you touched my heart..wishing you peace Crim
Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 1:32am
You are a work of art, and you have a brilliant soul that will live on forever. Do not let anything or anyone take that away from you. Keep creating. You are damn good at it:)
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re: Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 7:48am
Re: Day One
Anonymous
25th Feb 2013 2:08am
Crim- Let's go climbing! You have the mettle....it is seen in your written words....one foot in front of another...the summit is not easy to reach...but, the view lasts a lifetime.
Coming home is mandatory...keep flowing, you will get there!
Strider
Coming home is mandatory...keep flowing, you will get there!
Strider
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re: Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 7:49am
Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 3:40am
I would cry but no tears are allowed to flow
write but my emotions are pent up
create if I gave a damn about my passions
.. i haven't reminded you lately how brilliant and amazing you are for that i am sorry. we have no idea what tomorrow brings if it even comes so baby please don't age yourself with worry on something you cannot control. fail? no.. you are far from a failure. the bottle? yes .. it becomes our enemy while being our savoir. but i have to admit i can't see myself with out it. we all have something we turn too. maybe a few things. thats when we have to decide which of our enemies love us more? our bottles. damn them. as faithful as a dog. hugs baby. my dark princess.
write but my emotions are pent up
create if I gave a damn about my passions
.. i haven't reminded you lately how brilliant and amazing you are for that i am sorry. we have no idea what tomorrow brings if it even comes so baby please don't age yourself with worry on something you cannot control. fail? no.. you are far from a failure. the bottle? yes .. it becomes our enemy while being our savoir. but i have to admit i can't see myself with out it. we all have something we turn too. maybe a few things. thats when we have to decide which of our enemies love us more? our bottles. damn them. as faithful as a dog. hugs baby. my dark princess.
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re: Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 7:51am
My Beautiful Dark Queen..you're right it hugs our soul like no other..thank you for being there and understanding..much love Crim
Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 3:50am
Crim your writing is just good! You make it look so easy ! Nice write baby girl
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re: Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 7:52am
thank you my ever lovely Gg..I appreciate and cherish your comments..xoxo Crim
Re: Day One
25th Feb 2013 5:07pm
Each time you venture into our world of wonder here is an opportunity for we friends to hug and share... the good and not so good. Deep respect and appreciation for you!
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re: Re: Day One
27th Feb 2013 10:24pm
Re: Day One
Anonymous
25th Feb 2013 10:24pm
What a difference a day makes! Let everyday be a blank canvas and another opportunity. This is a wonderful write, deeply expressed and I adore it.
Critique-Stanza 2, Line 1 The soul within in this..
I think the "in" should be cut..
Peace, Miki
Critique-Stanza 2, Line 1 The soul within in this..
I think the "in" should be cut..
Peace, Miki
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re: Re: Day One
27th Feb 2013 10:25pm
thank you Miki for the words of encouragement and spot on with my error ty for pointing it out to me lovely lady..peace Crim :)
Re: Day One
26th Feb 2013 11:00am
Another heartfelt write. I love you Sinful Criminal. I love all addicts. You are my people. I feel your pain here so deeply because I remember all too well what it was like chasing that first elusive day; a day that never seemed to come. You can do it and when the time comes that you do, you know that I will walk through it with you. Don't give up hope. It's not easy but nothing worthwhile is. I wish I could grab you by the hand and lead you over to this side but it's your battle. All I can do is fight it beside you...which I will.
Gemini
Gemini
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re: Re: Day One
27th Feb 2013 10:27pm
Thank you Christian I love you with the same love from one addict to another..one on top of the mountain and one still climbing..much peace and love Crim
Re: Day One
26th Feb 2013 9:38pm
we can over anytime we so choose , all we need to do is ASK .......you are never alone . thank you !
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re: Re: Day One
27th Feb 2013 10:28pm
Re: Day One
1st Mar 2013 1:29am
Crim you know I love you for starters.
Each day is a struggle and from the looks of these comments, it's evident you are touching people with your unique work of art.
Hugs and kisses.
Each day is a struggle and from the looks of these comments, it's evident you are touching people with your unique work of art.
Hugs and kisses.
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re: Re: Day One
10th Mar 2013 8:39pm
Re: Day One
Anonymous
24th Mar 2013 3:57am
Wow! How this melted my soul. Brought a tear! Well done. :)
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re: Re: Day One
24th Mar 2013 4:00am
Thank you Flower you have touched my heart with you kindness..wishing you peace Crim :)
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31st Mar 2013 6:12am
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31st Mar 2013 6:34am