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and i considered you so perfect.
i've met people who consider themselves perfect
but then realised their follies in mere fractions
and destroy themselves in great leaps
i then only realised i knew you in mere fractions
but we took such great leaps
but then realised their follies in mere fractions
and destroy themselves in great leaps
i then only realised i knew you in mere fractions
but we took such great leaps
Published 18th Feb 2013
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Anonymous
18th Feb 2013 12:58pm
The i's referring to the self need capitalising.
This is a short but sweet piece. I like the repeated image of the word 'fraction'. It implies that something isn't quite complete. A good enigma to a poem in the love category.
This is a short but sweet piece. I like the repeated image of the word 'fraction'. It implies that something isn't quite complete. A good enigma to a poem in the love category.
19th Feb 2013 1:32am
i find it interesting that it is clear that you thought about her quite highly, but then she only gets 4 lines. 4 lines of loveliness, but still. but who knows, maybe in the end she only deserved 4 lines?
