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Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
I anchor myself around your ankles
my face twisted like bloody yarn
you rip yourself away at the exit
desolate I sway cradled
lost at the sea I created
seconds take hours to pass
regretful hands cover your face
you stare at the frozen ground
as you imitate a birds return
like fall welcomes the winter
I blanket my heart around you
and turn yet another cheek
carefully you spread your eggshells
I take those familiar steps
and wait seconds for your depart
my face twisted like bloody yarn
you rip yourself away at the exit
desolate I sway cradled
lost at the sea I created
seconds take hours to pass
regretful hands cover your face
you stare at the frozen ground
as you imitate a birds return
like fall welcomes the winter
I blanket my heart around you
and turn yet another cheek
carefully you spread your eggshells
I take those familiar steps
and wait seconds for your depart
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Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
9th Feb 2013 6:26pm
'carefully you spread your eggshells
I take those familiar steps
and wait seconds for your depart'
^Genius stanza, strong.
Very descriptive, I get the feel of
heart break and a tint of hope.
Very well written,
Scribbler.
I take those familiar steps
and wait seconds for your depart'
^Genius stanza, strong.
Very descriptive, I get the feel of
heart break and a tint of hope.
Very well written,
Scribbler.
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re: Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
9th Feb 2013 7:53pm
Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 6:40pm
"like fall welcomes the winter
I blanket my heart around you
and turn yet another cheek"
Damn...such a painful realization, penned so wonderfully!
Wow Rachel!!! Yet another Absolutely Beautiful write :)
Very Well Done
I blanket my heart around you
and turn yet another cheek"
Damn...such a painful realization, penned so wonderfully!
Wow Rachel!!! Yet another Absolutely Beautiful write :)
Very Well Done
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re: Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
9th Feb 2013 7:54pm
Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
9th Feb 2013 7:34pm
So easy to rock the boat when the sea is made of eggshells.
I get this Rachel, very much so. Great expression and pen. :)
I get this Rachel, very much so. Great expression and pen. :)
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re: Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
9th Feb 2013 7:55pm
Yes, that's quite insightful Magdalena. Thank you for stopping by. It means a lot.
Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 8:53pm
Nice write Rachel O....fragile in so many ways.
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re: Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
9th Feb 2013 9:44pm
Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
Anonymous
9th Feb 2013 9:10pm
Very beautifully written
A delicate pattern of words
Actually reminds me of
the spare usage of words
by Emily Dickinson
Peace
Kitty
A delicate pattern of words
Actually reminds me of
the spare usage of words
by Emily Dickinson
Peace
Kitty
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re: Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
9th Feb 2013 9:44pm
Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
6th Mar 2013 5:16pm
Such intimate, seesaw of emotions you convey. Life is not as simple as it should be.
I like the snapshots of the soul, the person within, that you consistently create.
I like the snapshots of the soul, the person within, that you consistently create.
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re: Re: Don't Go, Come Back, Go Away
29th Mar 2013 4:02am
Yes, true...though life could be easier by letting people go, and NOT come back :)
Thank you for your constant wisdom and sense of meaning in my pieces.
Thank you for your constant wisdom and sense of meaning in my pieces.