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L E T H A L I T Y
Clock-tick...
Latch-click...
You're g o n e !!
****
Fingertips of night smudging, smearing ebony gloss streaks
Down dusty, grimy glass--
Swallowing your spectral image
In the tainted glow of neon-rainbow billboards.
A twenty-first century Lancelott, you don your callousness and
And self-loathing like a tarnished suit of armor
On a chivalrous quest to save two-hundred-dollar Nocturne Ladies
From drug primed pimps...
T H E M S E L V E S...
But---n o t from you!!
****
Passion's fire--and my love--follow you
Through myriads of abandoned midnite alleyways
And already I have squandered
The ghosts of your warmth and poisoned promises.
The heaviest of down comforters
Fail to cease my chills
And I am just as bloodless
As before your first lethal kisses.
Your inevitable absence is the burn of frostbite
Your eventual return an addiction--
The relief, insatiable...
I c r a v e your presence.
Your vanishing is like slicing away strips of my skin--
The carving and the cutting release a chronic, artic cold
That confronts me from deep within my crystalized soul...
I freeze and die e a c h time you leave.
****
From within in the hollow of our bed
The mist of a heroine-induced haze rises
Enfolded in the memory of your lust, I slip shivering
Between the sweat-soaked sheets and pain-drenched pillows
Longing--promising--hoping that I'LL be g o n e...tomorrow....
Waiting--bargaining with the darkness--listening to...
Clock-tick,
Latch-click,
Your footsteps stumbling up the stairs....
©2013 Dark Enchantress
Latch-click...
You're g o n e !!
****
Fingertips of night smudging, smearing ebony gloss streaks
Down dusty, grimy glass--
Swallowing your spectral image
In the tainted glow of neon-rainbow billboards.
A twenty-first century Lancelott, you don your callousness and
And self-loathing like a tarnished suit of armor
On a chivalrous quest to save two-hundred-dollar Nocturne Ladies
From drug primed pimps...
T H E M S E L V E S...
But---n o t from you!!
****
Passion's fire--and my love--follow you
Through myriads of abandoned midnite alleyways
And already I have squandered
The ghosts of your warmth and poisoned promises.
The heaviest of down comforters
Fail to cease my chills
And I am just as bloodless
As before your first lethal kisses.
Your inevitable absence is the burn of frostbite
Your eventual return an addiction--
The relief, insatiable...
I c r a v e your presence.
Your vanishing is like slicing away strips of my skin--
The carving and the cutting release a chronic, artic cold
That confronts me from deep within my crystalized soul...
I freeze and die e a c h time you leave.
****
From within in the hollow of our bed
The mist of a heroine-induced haze rises
Enfolded in the memory of your lust, I slip shivering
Between the sweat-soaked sheets and pain-drenched pillows
Longing--promising--hoping that I'LL be g o n e...tomorrow....
Waiting--bargaining with the darkness--listening to...
Clock-tick,
Latch-click,
Your footsteps stumbling up the stairs....
©2013 Dark Enchantress
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Re: L E T H A L I T Y
FUCKIN' WOW!!!!!! That was incredible!!
Sweets you have a Great pen!!!
PEN ON!!!!!!!
Sir Lancelott
Sweets you have a Great pen!!!
PEN ON!!!!!!!
Sir Lancelott
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Sir Lancelott,
I do not know quite what to say...
I extend to you, my deepest gratitude, and I accept most humbly, your compliments and words of encouragement!! All these mean sooo much!!
Thank you, "my Knight"!
Dark Enchantress
I do not know quite what to say...
I extend to you, my deepest gratitude, and I accept most humbly, your compliments and words of encouragement!! All these mean sooo much!!
Thank you, "my Knight"!
Dark Enchantress
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11th Feb 2013 2:37pm
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11th Feb 2013 10:20pm
I wish to say thank you, most sincerely, for your your generous, gracious words of praise! It is humbled, and grateful, that I am, to be certain!
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem...both mean so very much to me!
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poem...both mean so very much to me!
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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Anonymous
5th Feb 2013 10:42am
What a beautiful poem! I love the dark glimmer of it, the intense sadness and morbid twists....
A true gothic tale!
A true gothic tale!
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5th Feb 2013 11:54pm
Thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment on my poem.I truly appreciate your generous words of praise--they sincerely do mean a great deal to me, to be sure!
It is glad that I am , that you enjoyed this piece, and the journey that it takes readers on... into a darker, more sinister side of life.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
It is glad that I am , that you enjoyed this piece, and the journey that it takes readers on... into a darker, more sinister side of life.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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6th Feb 2013 5:23pm
Wow. Dark and powerful.. It has an Edgar Allen Poe feel to it, and as a fan, I mean that as a compliment!
I don't know what else to say other than this is another piece begging to be performed.
I don't know what else to say other than this is another piece begging to be performed.
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6th Feb 2013 10:37pm
I do not know quite what to say...except that I consider it an honor, to be sure, that you would consider this piece to have the tone of Edgar Allen Poe. He is also a favorite author of mine--especially "The Raven," "The Telltale Heart," and "Annabelle Lee."
But, to say that this poem is worthy of a performance....I mean coming from someone with your exceptional talent...I am just a bit overwhelmed and humbled, by this compliment!
Thank you, my friend, for taking the time to read my poem, and for your gracious, generous words of praise. ALL mean so very much to me!
Sionch`ain leat,
Enchantress
But, to say that this poem is worthy of a performance....I mean coming from someone with your exceptional talent...I am just a bit overwhelmed and humbled, by this compliment!
Thank you, my friend, for taking the time to read my poem, and for your gracious, generous words of praise. ALL mean so very much to me!
Sionch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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8th Feb 2013 5:02pm
This poem was worth the wait, everything in it was just right. Theres a music in these words that just hit me like a horror movie. Good show, very good show!
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8th Feb 2013 11:07pm
Thank you my dear friend for taking the time to read my poem and for your ever so special words of praise!
There actually does seem to be a certain,over-all element of horror to the tone of this piece...although I honestly was not intially intending for that particular effect.Yet, I am a bit honored that you picked-up on this aspect.
(no one has ever told me that there was"music in the words" of my poetry...that is soo awesome...soo appreciated,to be sure!)
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
There actually does seem to be a certain,over-all element of horror to the tone of this piece...although I honestly was not intially intending for that particular effect.Yet, I am a bit honored that you picked-up on this aspect.
(no one has ever told me that there was"music in the words" of my poetry...that is soo awesome...soo appreciated,to be sure!)
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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27th Mar 2013 2:49am
So powerful,and vivid...These moments you write of...Keep going please;)
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6th May 2013 00:36am
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7th May 2013 00:29am
Theo,
Thank you, thank you--ever so much-- for taking the time to read, and comment on my poem, and for your more than generous words of praise!!I accept these with heartfelt gratitude! To be quite honest, I am so humbled by ALL of your comments...their value, to me, is immeasureable!!!
Wow...to tell me that I have 'The Gift'....I am sooo deeply honored by this.
It is glad, and grateful, that I am, to be sure, that my piece brought you pleasure.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
Thank you, thank you--ever so much-- for taking the time to read, and comment on my poem, and for your more than generous words of praise!!I accept these with heartfelt gratitude! To be quite honest, I am so humbled by ALL of your comments...their value, to me, is immeasureable!!!
Wow...to tell me that I have 'The Gift'....I am sooo deeply honored by this.
It is glad, and grateful, that I am, to be sure, that my piece brought you pleasure.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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10th Jun 2013 12:05pm
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10th Jun 2013 2:18pm
Ummmm.....WOW!!!
Now...w h a t can i say...except that i am HONORED, and,humbled--to be certain.
Thank you, sooo much, for taking the time to read my poem....and for your generous comment! i accept, both, with gratitude.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
Now...w h a t can i say...except that i am HONORED, and,humbled--to be certain.
Thank you, sooo much, for taking the time to read my poem....and for your generous comment! i accept, both, with gratitude.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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Anonymous
21st Jun 2013 1:20am
Wow! A dark poem that I actually understand. You are such a talent. I hope to learn much. Wonderful piece. :)
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21st Jun 2013 3:29am
bluemoon,
Thank you! Thank you!....for taking the time to read this piece, and for your generous words of praise. i am glad that you enjoyed this poem, and grateful for your visit, and comments.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
Thank you! Thank you!....for taking the time to read this piece, and for your generous words of praise. i am glad that you enjoyed this poem, and grateful for your visit, and comments.
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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Anonymous
30th Jun 2013 3:55pm
This is really fantastic.
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30th Jun 2013 4:18pm
Thank you, ever so much, for taking the time to read my poem, and for your generous, encouraging compliment!!
Both truly mean soo much to me, and are sincerely appreciated!!
Both truly mean soo much to me, and are sincerely appreciated!!
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4th Jul 2013 5:36pm
umm....umm....umm...I'm SPEECHLESS! Xoxo
You breathe poetry, Enchantress!
It's evident in your ink! Mere words of praise doesn't do this piece justice and to state favorite parts would be an injustice to this write, because the entire poem reeks of brilliancy!
Pen Salute~
You breathe poetry, Enchantress!
It's evident in your ink! Mere words of praise doesn't do this piece justice and to state favorite parts would be an injustice to this write, because the entire poem reeks of brilliancy!
Pen Salute~
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5th Jul 2013 2:45pm
O...i simply do not know quite how to respond to your more than generous words of praise! Now--i am quite speechless. So, i will say the only words i know,my friend....
THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU! ....
APPRECIATION--HUMBLENESS--GRATITUDE xoxo
( Thanks, also for the 'reading list-recognition!')
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU! ....
APPRECIATION--HUMBLENESS--GRATITUDE xoxo
( Thanks, also for the 'reading list-recognition!')
Sioch`ain leat,
Enchantress
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25th Aug 2013 8:48pm
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25th Aug 2013 9:06pm
Perhaps it is the darkness within ...my soul, that has molded the sorceress capable of this scribe.
My friend, thank you for leaving me your generous words of praise! They are appreciated,to be certain!
My friend, thank you for leaving me your generous words of praise! They are appreciated,to be certain!
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2nd Oct 2013 2:26pm
DarkEnchantress, I'm so impressed with your darkness. You had me hooked from start to finish. This piece is VERY creative with the structure, s p a c i n g and font.
Great lines, word selection and pairing of words.
"Clock-tick...
Latch-click..."
Brilliant!
Great lines, word selection and pairing of words.
"Clock-tick...
Latch-click..."
Brilliant!
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19th Jan 2014 12:56pm
You have a way my dear friend. A truly talented way. Don't know how I missed this shining piece of ink Enchantress. But this was...enchanting! Amongst the many other glowing words I could use. Always a fan of your work M'dear. Always. Thank you.
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TS,
Thank you so, so much for spending time reading this piece, and,for your lovely, generous words of praise. I do not know quite what to say, except that i am truly humbled, and honored....how sincerely i appreciate your support!
This ALL means so very much to me, dear friend--to be sure! x
Thank you so, so much for spending time reading this piece, and,for your lovely, generous words of praise. I do not know quite what to say, except that i am truly humbled, and honored....how sincerely i appreciate your support!
This ALL means so very much to me, dear friend--to be sure! x
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19th Mar 2015 1:56am
Thank you, johnny212 ...
For taking the time to read this piece, and for leaving me your, gracious, thoughtful comments! Both are truly appreciated, to be certain!
it is a pleasure--indeed--to have you visit my realm. Please know that you are welcome any time!
Sioch`ain leat!
For taking the time to read this piece, and for leaving me your, gracious, thoughtful comments! Both are truly appreciated, to be certain!
it is a pleasure--indeed--to have you visit my realm. Please know that you are welcome any time!
Sioch`ain leat!