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Identity
I could write of solitude
Or independence, But I’m too minute
Of happiness but I shall lie to myself
Of sadness, but that’d just bring me down
I should probably just write about love,
But sweet, sweat, love comes guilt
And the fear of not knowing If I can stay faithful,
With guilt and fear comes sadness
And sadness just brings me down
I could write of fiction or someone else’s life
But I’ve already written all there is to write
I could write of myself, I could write of my pain
I could write of myself,
But I don’t have a name.
Or independence, But I’m too minute
Of happiness but I shall lie to myself
Of sadness, but that’d just bring me down
I should probably just write about love,
But sweet, sweat, love comes guilt
And the fear of not knowing If I can stay faithful,
With guilt and fear comes sadness
And sadness just brings me down
I could write of fiction or someone else’s life
But I’ve already written all there is to write
I could write of myself, I could write of my pain
I could write of myself,
But I don’t have a name.
Published 28th Jan 2013
| Edited 4th Feb 2013
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28th Jan 2013 5:52am
28th Jan 2013 6:11am
There comes times for writers contemplating what to write, and many go through some sort of thought process. Yours is quite interesting, as you try and settle on something to write about. That's I think your words suggest as you move along in the poem. The ending of this poem, you say that you don't have a name, giving the implication of having no identity. Its almost as of you're saying that there's nothing to you. I enjoyed this poem it made me think and it flowed quite well. I enjoyed a trip through your thoughts. Well done
Chaos_Collector
Chaos_Collector
28th Jan 2013 8:24am
Thank you for your feedback Chaos_Collector :) I know i should have maybe added more than but i don't have a name, just a writer's block really, but thanks glad you enjoyed it.
om_nom_noms (Julie)
om_nom_noms (Julie)
28th Jan 2013 2:22pm
You're welcome :) I personally would've named this poem Identity and called it a day. I think this poem is fine just the way it is, but that's just me Julie.
Chaos_Collector
Chaos_Collector
Anonymous
28th Jan 2013 9:54am
This is lovely, indeed!
Much enjoyed this read.
Thanks for sharing, Cookie J.
Please pen on!
Tidespotter
Much enjoyed this read.
Thanks for sharing, Cookie J.
Please pen on!
Tidespotter
