Ela

I like it  

thank you :)

Pretty dark stuff Opheliac, nice going.


ok, if it were mine , I'd probably have gone a slightly different way:

you're making me hungry
with your talk of bodies

giving me

a desire to cut into the skin
and force it to speak
through metaphors

see, it says the same thing in a slightly different way , by no means better though , just different.


as always, enjoyed your writing.

shine on

i like your version best to be honest. it's more eloquent than mine.
thank you for your time and comment!  

Quite a labyrinth of a poem, Oph. Gets the reader reading more than once, and makes them think.
Lovely and almost brutal, almost.

labyrinth? i like that. Almost :)

agrees with Mr A, labyrinth is the apt descript. words you spin quite digs the reader in manifold dimensions & one could see how pithy you have packed them all. loved the words used precisely esp. the usage, hungry-desire-force screams with utter darkness Ophie! as usual, am never disappointed in my takeaways so unique here.
Keep sharing.x

Uma, you're being too kind to my poems. Since you're being such a sweetheart i'll give you something to look up if you like: try 18th century anatomy and dissection. (that was my trigger)

Brother Poet:

Nice poem.  Simply yet precise.


marcella1

appreciated :)

we readers find many facets in your small gem. the dark romance of my spirit defines the slicing into unassuming flesh as a quest to release inner passion...

enchanted. thank you :)

I love the 'ah' instead of actual words.
Thank you Gabriel :)

This is wonderfully complex for such a concise piece, Ophie. It's beautifully sinister and innocent all at the same time. I love it <3
On my reading list.